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devilkinelevenUID: 2442869

8月27日
Movies and televisions have more positive or negative effects on young people’s behaviors. (2007.4.21,技术进步类)

Movies and televisions, as two forms of mass media, are closely related to young people's daily life. Most youngsters in China watch TV everyday, and go to cinema from time to time. Watching movie and television has both positive and negative effects on young people's behaviours, but if younsters are watching television with the guidance of adults, the effect from movies and televisions will be by and large positive.

First of all, young people are likely to have a  more comprehensive structure of knowledge. Televisions and movies enable young people to keep pace with the development of science and technology, the trend of fashion, the latest news of international events. We've already found the knowledge learned from school is not always adequate in the sense that science and technology are developing at a fast speed, changelling, renovating the existed knowledge system. What we know may prove to be wrong. Luckily, some television programs provide a out-of-class learning chance for young people. For example, in China, there is a special channel largely devoted to report the newest discoveries in science and technology. Besides, movies and televisions also play a role in forming youngsters's aesthetic taste. We can watch the fashion fair and get the information about what the most popular makeup and clothers are. These information helps us become more attractive in apperance. In addition, international news broadcasted hourly on TV allows young people be aware of the events happening abroad, so that we are more open-minded, possessing a global perspective rather than restricted in a small region.

Second, although too much exposure to televisions and movies are harmful to young people, adults' supervision can effectively minimize the bad effects. People argue against watching televisions and movies most probably due to two reasons. The first one is some young people are addicted to the TV programs and movies that they spend too much time in front of television. Therefore, outdoor activities have been reduced and physical health cannot be maintained. The other reason is that younsters will become violent if they are watching televison programs and movies filled with voilent scenes and actions. I concede that these concerns are quite reasonable. However, it is not the movies and televisions that should be blamed. Parents, teachers, as well as the whole society are supposed to should the responsibity to supervise over the programs suitable for young people. If parents and teachers could keep an eye on what young people are watching, if movie makers were more committed to cast suitable movies for youngster, if the society instilled into young people how to distinguish good programs from bad ones, the bad effects of televisions and movies could almost be eliminated.

In sum, having weighed the positive and negative effects of movies and televisions on young people's bahaviors, I believe it is clear that there are more postive effects than negative ones. After all, the negative effects are possibly wiped out throug the joint effort of society.

laureljiaUID: 2440618

OMG, 不要告诉我这是30分钟内写完的.我先晕一下,等醒过来在帮你看

laureljiaUID: 2440618

Movies and televisions, as two forms of mass media, are closely related to young people's daily life. Most youngsters in China watch TV everyday, and go to cinema from time to time. Watching movie and television has both positive and negative effects on young people's behaviours, but if younsters are watching television with the guidance of adults, the effect from movies and televisions will be by and large positive.
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First of all, young people are likely to have a  more comprehensive structure of knowledge. Televisions and movies enable young people to keep pace with the development of science and technology, the trend of fashion, the latest news of international events. We've already found(我记得宾语从句好像是要加that) the knowledge learned from school is not always adequate in the sense that science and technology are developing at a fast speed, changelling, (and) renovating the existed(existing) knowledge system. What we know may prove to be wrong. Luckily, some television programs provide a out-of-class learning chance for young people. For example, in China, there is a special channel largely devoted to report the newest discoveries in science and technology. Besides, movies and televisions also play a role in forming youngsters's aesthetic taste. We can watch the fashion fair and get the information about what the most popular makeup and clothers(clothes?) are. These information helps us become more attractive in apperance. In addition, international news broadcasted hourly on TV allows young people be aware of the events happening abroad, so that we are more open-minded, possessing a global perspective rather than restricted in a small region(这段思路很开阔,值得学习!).

Second, although too much exposure to televisions and movies are harmful to young people, adults' supervision can effectively minimize the bad effects. People argue against watching televisions and movies most probably due to two reasons. The first one is some young people are addicted to the TV programs and movies that they spend too much time in front of television. Therefore, outdoor activities have been reduced and physical health cannot be maintained. The other reason is that younsters will(太绝对了,换成tend to好一些) become violent if they are watching televison programs and movies filled with voilent scenes and actions. I concede that these concerns are quite reasonable. However, it is not the movies and televisions that should be blamed. Parents, teachers, as well as the whole society are supposed to should the responsibity to supervise over the programs suitable for young people. If parents and teachers could keep an eye on what young people are watching, if movie makers were more committed to cast suitable movies for youngster, if the society instilled into young people how to distinguish good programs from bad ones, the bad effects of televisions and movies could almost be eliminated..q*
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In sum, having weighed the positive and negative effects of movies and televisions on young people's bahaviors, I believe it is clear that there are more postive effects than negative ones. After all, the negative effects are possibly wiped out throug the joint effort of society.

不错不错!;d: 这篇文章难点在于说明positive多于negative, LZ说清楚了,而且语言很流畅,第二点我的思路和你一样,可是没你写的充实,学习了!总觉得时间很赶,说不清.有空帮我也看看,指点一下;d:

devilkinelevenUID: 2442869

嘿嘿~~确实又超时了。以前写过和这个题目类似的文章，所以写的有点收不住。
先吃饭去，等偶回来去拍你的。

tclrjtclrjUID: 2517750

嗯，我跟laureljia一样的感觉，第二段写的相当棒，论证太充分了，OTZ 拜倒……

qiaoxsh07UID: 2374361

Movies and televisions, as two forms of mass media, are closely related to young people's daily life. Most youngsters in China watch TV everyday, and go to cinema from time to time. Watching movie and television has both positive and negative effects on young people's behaviours, but if younsters are watching television with the guidance of adults, the effect from movies and televisions will be by and large positive.||*JEIUt@
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First of all, young people are likely to have a  more comprehensive structure of knowledge. Televisions and movies enable young people to keep pace with the development of science and technology, the trend of fashion, the latest news of international events. We've already found the knowledge learned from school is not always adequate in the sense that science and technology are developing at a fast speed, changelling, renovating the existed knowledge system. What we know may prove to be wrong. Luckily, some television programs provide a out-of-class learning chance for young people. For example, in China, there is a special channel largely devoted to report the newest discoveries in science and technology. Besides, movies and televisions also play a role in forming youngsters's(youngsters') aesthetic taste. We can watch the fashion fair and get the information about what the most popular makeup and clothers are. These information helps us become more attractive in apperance. In addition, international news broadcasted hourly on TV allows young people be aware of the events happening abroad, so that we are more open-minded, possessing a global perspective rather than restricted in a small region.

Second, although too much exposure to televisions and movies are(is吧，exposure 主语) harmful to young people, adults' supervision can effectively minimize the bad effects. People argue against watching televisions and movies most probably due to two reasons. The first one is some young people are (so)addicted to the TV programs and movies that they spend too much time in front of television. Therefore, outdoor activities have been reduced and physical health cannot be maintained. The other reason is that younsters will become violent if they are watching televison programs and movies filled with voilent scenes and actions. I concede that these concerns are quite reasonable. However, it is not the movies and televisions that should be blamed. Parents, teachers, as well as the whole society are supposed to should the responsibity(are supposed to和should你选一个吧，呵呵；responsbility拼写；有点语病，再看下) to supervise over the programs suitable for young people. If parents and teachers could keep an eye on what young people are watching, if movie makers were more committed to cast suitable movies for youngster, if the society instilled into young people how to distinguish good programs from bad ones, the bad effects of televisions and movies could almost be eliminated.mJ6t1d5BUH
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In sum, having weighed the positive and negative effects of movies and televisions on young people's bahaviors, I believe it is clear that there are more postive effects than negative ones. After all, the negative effects are possibly wiped out throug the joint effort of society.

有点小笔误，但瑕不掩瑜，Second 一段写的环环相扣，;d: ，精彩，向lz学习

devilkinelevenUID: 2442869

谢谢帮我看作文。
那个有语病的地方，should应该改成shoulder，没时间检查小错误满天飞：（