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发表于 2008-8-28 16:48:03 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

As far as I am concerned, I couldn't agree more with the argument that our young people should have the ability to plan and organize, especially in this complex society. And there are a couple of reasons to name.

Firstly, the most important function of plan and organize is increasing people's efficiency. As we all know, working with plans will urge people to become more purposeful, thus they could achieve their aims step by step and finally make them more effective towards their own business. Furthermore, the improving of efficiency means a lot of time would be saved. With more extra time, people can do some other things as they wish, such as sports, entertainment and so like. High efficiency and sufficient self-enjoyment are important signs of success. One of my classmates is a good example. He is very outstanding both in the courses and activities. And he tells me that the secret of his achievement is planning as early as possible before starting. So the ability to plan and organize is indispensable.

What's more, plan and organize can help us to avoid useless efforts and make a good preparation for the future. It is quite normal that people's effort could make no sense according to the wrong precondition. And this could be due to the lacking of former plan, to some degree. Sometimes, planning as early as possible could help a lot to us for the future. And here is a heartbreaking experience of mine. Once I have a chance to go abroad to the USA to pursue my PHD. Degree in this June. But unfortunately, I haven't grasped this valuable opportunity for that I have not taken the examinations of GRE and TOEFL due to lacking of any planning for my future. At last, one of my classmate replaced me and gone there to study. From this experience, I learned that our young people should make a plan of our future life as early as possible. Just as a famous saying: Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what you goanna get.

In a sum, plan and organize could not only help our young people to increase our working efficiency, but also make a solid preparation for the future. Thus, they are essential and indispensable for us.

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As far as I am concerned(这个错误……唉,改成concern), I couldn't agree more with the argument that our young people should have the ability to plan and organize, especially in this complex society. And there are a couple of reasons to name.寄托家

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Firstly, the most important function of plan and organize is increasing(to increase) people's efficiency. As we all know, working with plans will urge people to become more purposeful, thus they could achieve their aims step by step and finally make them more effective towards their own business. Furthermore, the improving of efficiency means a lot of time would be saved. With more extra time, people can do some other things as they wish, such as sports, entertainment and so like. High efficiency and sufficient self-enjoyment are important signs of success.(这个论述很好) One of my classmates is a good example. He is very outstanding both in the courses and activities. And he tells me that the secret of his achievement is planning as early as possible before starting. So the ability to plan and organize is indispensable.(这句话是怎么得来的丫)

What's more, plan and organize can help us to avoid useless efforts and make a good preparation for the future. It is quite normal that people's effort could make no sense according to the wrong precondition. And this could be due to the lacking of former plan,(今儿又多了个逗号) to some degree. Sometimes, planning as early as possible could help a lot to us for the future(这里有点不顺,有个很较真的语法,如果help当成不及物动词用的话,只能接with和for,to是不可以的。所以这里最好改成help us a lot for the future). And here is a heartbreaking experience of mine. Once I have(had) a chance to go abroad to the USA to pursue my PHD. Degree in this June. But unfortunately, I haven't grasped this valuable opportunity for that(去掉) I have not taken the examinations of GRE and TOEFL due to the lacking(其实lack也是名词,可以直接用原型) of any planning for my future. At last, one of my classmate replaced me and gone(went) there to study. From this experience, I learned that our young people should make a plan of our future life as early as possible. Just as a famous saying: Life is like a box of chocolate, you never know what you goanna get.

In a sum, plan and organize could not only help our young people to increase our working efficiency, but also make a solid preparation for the future. Thus, they are essential and indispensable for us.
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发表于 2008-8-28 23:33:40 |只看该作者
唉估计你写的赶时间,这篇估计是你这些作业中质量比较不好的之一。但我感觉这题目挺难写的,怎么写都别扭,你也这感觉吧,这题目理解起来有点困难,所以写的时候可以写的方向就很多,很难把握。好在明天休息了,WU…………
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