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Renewable resources of energy (sun ,wind, water) will soon replace the old resources of fossil fuels(gas ,oil and coal ) ,agree or disagree?

Recently, I am concern about the international news and get the information that the price of crude oil is higher than ever before. This phenomenon has arises the consideration of the public that the fossil resource has already suffered shortage. As we all know, fossil fuels plays an important role in the process of the development of industrialization and urbanization. Once these fuels such as gas, oil and coal were exploited out by people, the development of our society will face historical heavy stock. It seems clear that fossil fuels will soon be replaced by the renewable energy under the efforts of scientists because of the advantages of the maintenance of ecological balance, less pollution, and unlimited supply .

To begin with, considering the advantages of the renewable sources such as ecological balance, less pollution, and unlimited supply, it is also essential for us to seek mathods to replace the old ones soon. Fossil fuels such as gases, oil and coal cannot be recyclable employed. The consumption of the gas and oil are extremely huge.  Once they are exhausted, they can not be regenerated in a short time. Renewable energy will solve the essential issue problem-the limited supply of energy.  The formation of them would last for several geological ages. It is necessary for scientists around the world to seek other kind of resources to replace it. Moreover, The global warming phenomenon is being considered by scientists.For example, a solar panel produces no waste, whereas a coal plant contributes many tons of waste, especially in the atmosphere.Under the pressure of the shortage, renewable resources will be found out and accepted as favorable substitutes soon.

Furthermore, for a long time, governments and scientists from many countries have focused their consideration on solving this problem through using other renewable resource of energy such as sun, wind or water. Developing new types of energy as substitute for fossil fuels soon is the important and urgent mission of the whole citizen .Under the efforts of them, we have already deserved many kinds of new resources. For example, we build factories to use wind and water producing electricity. The research is gaining surprising result gradually. Therefore, we could firmly consider that in the near future, we could replace the old resources of fossil fuels.

claierh0323UID: 2375722

我第一次帮别人该作文，说的不好的地方请见谅

Recently, I am concern about the international news and get the information that the price of crude oil is higher than ever before. This phenomenon has arises the consideration of the public that the fossil resource has already suffered shortage. As we all know, fossil fuels plays an important role in the process of the development of(我觉得有些啰嗦） industrialization and urbanization. Once these fuels such as gas, oil and coal were exploited out by people, the development of our society will face historical heavy stock. It seems clear that fossil fuels will soon be replaced by the renewable energy under the efforts of scientists because of the advantages of the maintenance of ecological balance, less pollution, and unlimited supply .

To begin with, considering the advantages of the renewable sources such（多写了吧） as ecological balance, less pollution, and unlimited supply, it is also essential for us to seek mathods to replace the old ones soon. Fossil fuels such as gases, oil and coal cannot be recyclable employed. The consumption of the gas and oil are extremely huge.  Once they are exhausted, they can not be regenerated in a short time. Renewable energy will solve the essential issue problem-the limited supply of energy.  The formation of them would last for several geological ages. It is necessary for scientists around the world to seek other kind of resources to replace it. （可以分个段哦）Moreover, The global warming phenomenon is being considered by scientists.For example, a solar panel produces no waste, whereas a coal plant contributes many tons of waste, especially in the atmosphere.Under the pressure of the shortage, renewable resources will be found out and accepted as favorable substitutes soon.

Furthermore, for a long time, governments and scientists from many countries have focused their consideration on solving this problem through using other renewable resource of energy such as sun, wind or water. Developing new types of energy as substitute for fossil fuels soon is the important and urgent mission of the whole citizen .Under the efforts of them, we have already deserved many kinds of new resources. For example, we build factories to use wind and water producing electricity. The research is gaining surprising result gradually. Therefore, we could firmly consider that in the near future, we could replace the old resources of fossil fuels.

我觉得你这篇文章写的很好，有一些问题
1.结构上再公整一点会给你的作文加分
2.分析的很好也很全面，加些更生动的例子更好，比如编个数据什么的，那文章很有说服力啊
3，我觉得你的ecological balance 和less pollution好像是一回事哦（个人意见）

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To begin with, considering the advantages of the renewable sources such as ecological balance, less pollution, and unlimited supply, it is also [为啥有also?]essential for us to seek mathods to replace the old ones soon. Fossil fuels such as gases, oil and coal cannot be recyclable employed. The consumption of the gas and oil are extremely huge.  Once they are exhausted, they can not be regenerated in a short time.(1) Renewable energy will solve the essential issue problem-the limited supply of energy.  (2)The formation of them[指代不清] would last for several geological ages.(3) It is necessary for scientists around the world to seek other kind of resources to replace it. Moreover, (4)The global warming phenomenon is being considered by scientists. 这四句话有些混乱建议顺序2，4，3，1For example, a solar panel produces no waste, whereas a coal plant contributes many tons of waste, especially in the atmosphere.Under the pressure of the shortage, renewable resources will be found out and accepted as favorable substitutes soon. r:_*q;TX

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Furthermore, for a long time, governments and scientists from many countries have focused their consideration on solving this problem through using other renewable resource of energy such as sun, wind or water. Developing new types of energy as substitute for fossil fuels soon is the important and urgent mission of the whole citizen .Under the efforts of them, we have already deserved many kinds of new resources. For example, we build factories to use wind and water producing electricity. The research is gaining surprising result gradually. Therefore, we could firmly consider that in the near future, we could replace the old resources of fossil fuels.

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部分用词还是很讲究的！
论证不够！
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This phenomenon has arises the consideration  语法是现在完成吧 是不是要用arise的完成形式呢？