COMEON小组--------yuanhu124 9.7 作业

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Obviously, we human beings have stepped into the society of consumerism. Various of advertisements can be seen everywhere in our daily life. No matter you are on the street, or you are watching television programs or films, there are filled with advertisements. Considering the huge cost of the advertisements, some people think it is a waste of money and time of the company, because consumers all have got the idea what to buy. However, I believe it varies on the determination of whether the investments on advertisements are not reasonable.

For one thing, if a company's investments on advertisements are carefully calculated and planned. It can not be said to be a waste of money and time. Sometimes, the advertisements can indeed give right advises on the consumers' behaviors. Take Nike for example, its great success of today was established on a series of wise actions in history. When Michael Jordan took part in the NBA, no one knows he would be the most brilliant star in the NBA history. Nike found Jordan, and asked him to be the company's representer. Along with Jordan's raising fame, Nike Company developed to be the most successful one in the sports products market. There are a large amount of successful commercial cases whose advertisements work effectively.

Certainly, on the other hand, we should notice the negative aspect of the investments on advertisements. On the issue of advertisement, some companies may think the more the better. If possible, they really wish to cover the whole world with their advertisements, and let everyone knows their products. Some unwise companies are even plunged deeply in debt in that of the enormous cost of advertisements. Meanwhile, in the culture of consumerism, people usually do not know what they indeed want. They just follow the advertisements. In that case, the advertisements could not only be a waste of money and time of the company, but also could cause waste for the consumers.

To sum up, advertisement, the symbol of the commercial society, may lead the consumers to buy the right products that they really need. It may cause a large amount of waste of the society as well. We should look this issue rationally.

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Certainly, on the other hand, we should notice the negative aspect of the investments on advertisements. On the issue of advertisement, some companies may think the more the better. If possible, they really wish to cover the whole world with their advertisements, and let everyone knows their products. Some unwise companies are even plunged deeply in debt in that of the enormous cost of advertisements. Meanwhile, in the culture of consumerism, people usually do not know what they indeed want. They just follow the advertisements. In that case, the advertisements could not only be a waste of money and time of the company, but also could cause waste for the consumers.

To sum up, advertisement, the symbol of the commercial society, may lead the consumers to buy the right products that they really need. 加个However 好像更好点It may cause a large amount of waste of the society as well. We should look this issue rationally.

总体结构挺不错的,而且论证也比较充分,注意个别小错误.

yuanhu124UID: 2444317

谢谢修改！第二段开头的确是没写完，当时咋就没注意到呢~~最后一段加however也的确好一些！不过，今天是写的it depends，以前都是旗帜鲜明地写一个方向，这次还这有些应付不来，下次还是偏执一端算了！

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写成正负平衡的观点是托福写作的大忌。