COMEON小组---qawsed9.8作业

qawsedUID: 2359935

Since human being is one advanced species among all animals under the process of evolution.

Some scientists argue that the characters of modern populace can be considered to be rooted from the animals in the following three aspects: to search for food, to look for consort, to defend for disadvantages as well. Therefore, it is true that the study of animals do help us to learn human nature.

To begin with, both animal and human are busy with searching for foods. Under the catalyzer of hungry, human's most important mission is to make efforts to live along.  The hunger stimulates people's motivation to plant crops, vegetables, and harvest. This is very similar from the behavior of animal. For example, when it comes to lion, they pay their endeavor in hunting to feed themselves. Furthermore, the

process of searching foods was what was known as "the survival of the fittest". That urges lions to become much keener and stronger than other species and only in this way could them stand on the position of "king of forest" and extend the longevity of their lives. Correspondedly, every person has to keep absorbing new information and advanced skill to get along with the accelerated development of the whole society, that is also the inner law of coming competitive for survival.

Next, in certain season, after animals grow older and become mature, they usually pay their attention on looking for suitable mates, which is as similar as the behavior of human's marriage. When spring comes, male dolphins will swim to the seashore and show the high voice of them to attract the female dolphins attention. After comparing the characters of shape and voice, female will walk toward the appreciated male dolphins and establish their family. About the same situation, boys suits in a gentle mode and girls speak in a tender tone when they date with each other at the first time. When boys and girls found each other congenial then stepping into the marriage hall is the best way to keep their love forever.

Last but not least, to defend is another eminent character of both animals and human being. Animals are always alert of the danger. If enemy is approaching, they realize it in a highly sensitive way such as the natural enemy's smell, the sound and the concuss of the aggression. As long as they notice the particular atmosphere, they will set out comprehensive preparation against antagonists. In the modern society, people function efforts to protect the security and wealth of them such as buying insurance or build sanctum to avoid being attacked by both the visitation of Providence and disasters.

In conclusion, we can conclude that the human have so many similar characters from animals. The study of animals can help us learn the qualities of human nature in the process of working hard in order

to make a better life, looking for lovers to enjoy a marriage, fight for difficulties to thrive for the objectives. These aspect could comprehensively explain the issue that whether study of animals help us to learn human nature---the answer is yes!

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Since human beings（人类总称s不能少） is one advanced species among all animals under the process of evolution. Some scientists argue that the characters(characteristics) of modern populace(human, populace两者含义不同) can be considered to be rooted from the animals in the following three aspects: to search for food, to look for consort, to defend for disadvantages as well. Therefore, it is true that the study of animals do help us to learn human nature.

To begin with, both animal and human are busy with searching for foods. Under the catalyzer of hungry（用名词hunger或者starvation）, human's most important mission is to make efforts to live along.  The hunger stimulates people's motivation （有两个原因这里应该去掉，1 stimulate人而不是人的motivation；2 只有people才能去plant，motivation不能plant）to plant crops, vegetables, and harvest（应该放在plant的后面）. This is very similar from （to）the behavior of animal. For example, when it comes to lion, they pay their endeavor in hunting to feed themselves. Furthermore, the process of searching foods was what was known as "the survival of the fittest"（没看明白这里）. That urges（forces更合适） lions to become much keener（more keen） and stronger than other species and only in this way could them （这里是想用倒装吗？应该用主格they）stand on the position of "king of forest" and extend the longevity of their lives. Correspondedly, every person has to keep absorbing new information and advanced skill to get along with(keep up with是否更好？) the accelerated development of the whole society, that is also the inner law of coming competitive(adjective词性不对) for survival.

Next, in certain season, after animals grow older （grow就可以了）and become mature, they usually pay their attention on looking for suitable mates, which is as similar as the behavior of human's marriage. When spring comes, male dolphins will swim to the seashore and show the high voice of them to attract the female dolphins attention. After comparing the characters of shape and voice, female will walk toward the appreciated male dolphins and establish their family. About （in）the same situation, boys suits in a gentle mode and girls speak in a tender tone when they date with each other at the first time. When boys and girls found each other congenial then stepping into the marriage hall is the best way to keep their love forever.（boy和girl通常指teenager以下年龄段的，已经到了适婚年龄的话还是用man和woman吧）

Last but not least, to defend is another eminent character （character主要是角色，人物的意思，尽量还是用characteristics吧）of both animals and human being. Animals are always alert of the danger（animals are alert？？）. If enemy is approaching, they realize it in a highly sensitive way such as the natural enemy's smell, the sound and the concuss of the aggression. As long as they notice the particular atmosphere, they will set out comprehensive preparation against antagonists. In the modern society, people function efforts to protect the security and wealth of them such as buying insurance or building（分词间的并列） sanctum to avoid being attacked by both the visitation of Providence and disasters.

In conclusion, we can conclude that the human have so many similar characters from （to，similar to, different from）animals. The study of animals can help us learn the qualities of human nature in the process of working hard in order to make a better life, looking for lovers to enjoy a marriage, fight for difficulties to thrive for the objectives. （前面标红的这几个动词并列关系不清）These aspects could comprehensively explain the issue that （that多余）whether study of animals help us to learn human nature---the answer is yes!

几个例子中人与动物的相互关系逻辑上描述得不够清晰，个别用词不是很准确。

不过这篇挺难写的，继续加油！！

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yangkeli22UID: 2360405

楼主观点和我还真是挺像的啊，不过我只想到了生存和繁殖两方面，其它没想到啊，依据就是“食，色，性也”……看来我的思路还要再拓宽拓宽，不然还真是没的写了……

qawsedUID: 2359935

谢谢楼上的修改啊，我写的确实比较急，有些词没用好
be alert of 就是对..警惕的意思
加油