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30分钟完成(460字) 30分钟修改 这篇写得比较水 没什么严谨的论证 请只说缺点 谢谢！
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After a busy day work, there is common question among people concerning whether to spend time alone is the best to truly relax or not. Preferring solitude are those people stress privacy and quiet. As far as I am concerned, people are more likely to find relaxation and recreation by spending time with others such as families or friends, when considering value of their sharing and providing assistance.

To begin with, it is undeniable that solitude that enables privacy and tranquility, which can greatly ease people's stress from work. Take my own experience for example, I'm a music nut and I always like to listen to some light music alone when I feel tired in my spare time. When I am gripped by the fascinating rhythm and immersed in the world of music, I can forget about anger, tension and sadness, leaving my heart with comfort and calm, and therefore feel truly peaceful.

Nevertheless, by chatting with friends and sharing the same hobbies, people can also find way to reduce pressure. Again, take listening to music for example. Sometimes I will invite some friends home and listen to music together in my leisure time. During appreciating music, we could talk with each other and discuss about the meanings, forms as well as composers of music we like, which really make a lot of fun. What's more, my friends often bring me some new terrific CDs for sharing, which really impress me a lot. Consequently, being immersed in the atmosphere of chatting and sharing, I can also forget about the bothering chores from work and feel truly loosen.

Furthermore, families and close friends can lend a hand or just give comfort, which can ease people's anxiety about their work or future and therefore are helpful to their psychological health. After all, those who committed suicides due to extreme depression are always alone. For instance, when I make some mistakes or fail to do well in my work, I may feel gloomy and totally lose my confidence. In that case, I will resort to families and close friends who will support me with no reasons. I can ask them for advices or help, sometimes just comfort. As a result, it is via long time complaining and consolation, inquiring and advising, back and forth that I regain my confidence and therefore ease my anxiety for my career.

To sum up, considerable though benefits that spending time alone provides are, they cannot compete with the pronounced merits that spending time with others brings about, when advices and consolations from others and the strength of sharing are taken into account. From my point of view, these are two most crucial criteria for people who want relaxation to consider, and spending time with other like families or friends is the best way to reduce strain.

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After a busy day work, there is common question among people concerning whether to spend time alone is the best to truly relax or not. Preferring solitude are those people stress privacy and quiet. As far as I am concerned, people are more likely to find relaxation and recreation by spending time with others such as families or friends, when considering value of their sharing and providing assistance.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GREJ
To begin with, it is undeniable that solitude that enables privacy and tranquility, which can greatly ease people's stress from work. Take my own experience for example, I'm a music nut and I always like to listen to some light music alone when I feel tired in my spare time. When I am gripped by the fascinating rhythm and immersed in the world of music, I can forget about anger, tension and sadness, leaving my heart with comfort and calm, and therefore feel truly peaceful.


Nevertheless, by chatting with friends and sharing the same hobbies, people can also find way to reduce pressure. Again, take listening to music for example. Sometimes I will invite some friends home and listen to music together in my leisure time. During appreciating music, we could talk with each other and discuss about the meanings, forms as well as composers of music we like, which really make a lot of fun. What's more, my friends often bring me some new terrific CDs for sharing, which really impress me a lot. Consequently, being immersed in the atmosphere of chatting and sharing, I can also forget about the bothering chores from work and feel truly loosen.
Furthermore, families and close friends can lend a hand or just give comfort, which can ease people's anxiety about their work or future and therefore are helpful to their psychological health. After all, those who committed suicides due to extreme depression are always alone（太绝对了）. For instance, when I make some mistakes or fail to do well in my work, I may feel gloomy and totally lose my confidence. In that case, I will resort to families and close friends who will support me with no reasons. I can ask them for advices or help, sometimes just comfort. As a result, it is via long time complaining and consolation, inquiring and advising, back and forth that I regain my confidence and therefore ease my anxiety for my career.


To sum up, considerable though benefits that spending time alone provides are, they cannot compete with the pronounced merits that spending time with others brings about, when advices and consolations from others and the strength of sharing are taken into account. From my point of view, these are two most crucial criteria for people who want relaxation to consider, and spending time with other like families or friends is the best way to reduce strain.

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