COMEON作文小组------macross 9月15日作业

macross_36UID: 2306285

With the fast development of science and technology, many inventions have emgerged(emerged) to displace the traditional published books. It has long been put into qualm in deciding whether the published books will be disappare(disappear) in the next 20 years. Personally, I agree with such issue and I would like to explore several reasons for my choice.
The first reason is that nowadays, people could get information from many other kinds of media such as computer rather than from reading books. As we all know, we can get plenty information include the content of a popular book from the Internet. In other words, if we have a computer, we can down load the content of the books we want anytime we like. What is more, sometimes the information is free which means we can save money by using computer to read the books. In short, new technology benefits people by saving cashes(cash) spend on purchasing books.
Another essential reason involves the decreased interest in reading books and the increased interest in spending time using other medias(mediums). Poll after poll shows that people are more likely to watch TV programs or travel(surfer) online rather than read books in their spare time for the reasons that books are less vivid and attractive than those mediums that can provide video and sound and interaction between people and the mediums.  
In addition, books made of paper hold undeniable drawbacks. On the one hand, consumers have to spend considerable money in buying the books they want. On the other hand, plenty of trees are cut down to supply the paper to publish books. It is not surprising that some environmentalists strongly oppose to(/) such paper books. With the growing awareness about protecting the environment, people are likely to give up buying published books.
To sum up, from my point of view, it goes without saying that the published books will disappare in the foreseeable future for the reason that such kind of books carries obvious disadvantages and some other mediums can bring people more convenience.

ammyanaUID: 2529083

With the fast development of science and technology, many inventions have emgerged(emerged) to displace the traditional published books. It has long been put into qualm in deciding whether the published books will be disappare(disappear) in the next 20 years. Personally, I agree with such issue and I would like to explore several reasons for my choice.

The first reason is that nowadays, people could(can) get information from many other kinds of media such as computer(computer是不是media啊？改成internet比较好) rather than from reading books. As we all know, we can get plenty information include the content of a popular book from the Internet.（如果是我我会写成the huge amount of information from internet has brought us all kinds of knowledge,which give us a chance to get access to  the popular novels at the first time） In other words, if we have a computer, we can down load the content of the books we want anytime we like. What is more, sometimes the information is free which means we can save money by using computer to read the books. In short, new technology benefits people by saving cashes(cash) spend on purchasing books.
（这段观点联想到其他媒体还是很不错的，像我就只对纸质和电子书做了比较，没考虑到媒体比如电视啊网络啊之类的） 6

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Another essential reason involves the decreased interest in reading books and the increased interest in spending time using other medias(mediums)(media). Poll after poll shows that people are more likely（更有可能？prefer更好吧） to watch TV programs or travel(surfer) online rather than read books in their spare time for the reasons that books are less vivid and attractive than those mediums that can provide video and sound and interaction between people and the mediums. （这句太长，感觉不地道） |留

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In addition, books made of paper hold undeniable drawbacks. On the one hand, consumers have to spend considerable money in buying the books they want. On the other hand, plenty of trees are cut down to supply the paper to publish books. It is not surprising that somany environmentalists strongly oppose to(/) such paper books. With the growing awareness about protecting the environment, people are likely to give up buying published books. （detail 太少，观点支撑不够）

To sum up, from my point of view, it goes without saying that the published books will disappare in the foreseeable future for the reason that such kind of books carries obvious disadvantages and some other mediums can bring people more convenience.

楼主的文章还是中规中矩的，感觉这样没有亮点
语言上应该还是多看些英文原版书，地道一点比较好吧
词汇的使用还是有些不太好的重复，句型结构也感觉有点生硬
我的评价可能还是不太准确，有些地方没有看得太仔细，见谅啊！

不过结构和想法还是很好的，大家一起加油！

macross_36UID: 2306285

谢谢评价。
这个水平基本就是我考试水平啦，我是严格掐时写的，包括拟提纲时间在内。我28号就上战场了。
一限时我就不会写好句子了，呵呵，希望考试成绩不要太惨。

vanessa20UID: 2479494

With the fast development of science and technology, many inventions have emgerged(emerged) to displace the traditional published books. It has long been put into qualm in deciding whether the published books will be disappare(disappear) in the next 20 years. Personally, I agree with such issue and I would like to explore several reasons for my choice.
The first reason is that nowadays, people could get information from many other kinds of media such as computer rather than from reading books.（from books 就ok 了） As we all know, we can get plenty information include （including）the content of a popular book from the Internet. In other words, if we have a computer, we can down load（download） the content of the books we want anytime we like. What is more, sometimes the information is free which means we can save money by using computer to read the books. In short, new technology benefits people by saving cashes(cash) spend on purchasing books.
Another essential reason involves the decreased interest in reading books and the increased interest in spending time using other medias(mediums)  （media 是 medium 的复数）详细用法请见 https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... e%3D1#pid1772018941

. Poll after poll shows that people are more likely to watch TV programs or travel(surfer) online rather than read books in their spare time for the reasons that books are less vivid and attractive than those mediums that can provide video and sound and interaction between people and the mediums.  （好长的一个句子…楼主可以尝试变换句型来增添文章的可读性.）
In addition, books made of paper hold undeniable drawbacks. On the one hand, consumers have to spend considerable money in buying the books they want. On the other hand, plenty of trees are cut down to supply the paper to publish books. It is not surprising that some environmentalists strongly oppose to(/) such（such 可省） paper books. With the growing awareness about（ about？） protecting the environment, people are likely to give up buying published books. （观点不错！）
To sum up, from my point of view, it goes without saying that the published books will disappare （disappear） in the foreseeable future for the reason that such（ such 使用过于频繁） kind of books carries obvious disadvantages and some other mediums（同上） can bring people more convenience.

有几点意见，
1.能用动词尽量少用名词形式
2.注意用词的多样性个句式的变化
3.可以多看看 主流报刊增加语感;)
我们一起加油！

macross_36UID: 2306285

明天开始看newyork times！
我不会变句型啊～～～～
谢谢支持！