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Successful people take new things and take risks rather than the thing that they've done well.(2007.3.27)

As is familiar to us all that the most important virtues of the successful people are always their creative thinking, their courage to risk their ventures and so on. However, all these good qualities do not necessarily mean that they achieve their success just by means of take new things and risks rather than the thing they have done well. The areas at which they are good will serve as the original resource of their creative thinking and as the basis for their further achievement. I base my point on the following reasons.

To begin with, the areas at which they are good will serve as the basis for their creative thinking. This is especially true when it comes to the researching experiment. The institution researcher might do hundreds of experiment every year. Can you imagine how to carry out each experiment in a field with which they are not familiar, just by the passion to try their new thinking?  It is definitely a waste of resource and effort because these experiments are less likely to succeed without theoretical directions, let along creative discoveries. In contrast, a researcher who is knowledgeable in his own field always bases their creative thinking on the classical theory and is more sensitive to the any special results which may be ignored by an ignorant experiment conductor.

Furthermore, the areas at which they are good will serve as the basis for their taking new risks. This is especially true when it comes to the business field. Suppose an inexperienced businessman who has little knowledge in the investment field.  What happened if he chooses to invest in the disadvantage industry just by the impulse of risking their money?  The result will be either he loss the money or get profit by a 1% good luck.  However, no businessman is fond of trying his luck every time but makes decisions based on the professional economic and investment knowledge. Only in this way can they lower the entire risks for their investment.

In all, as discussed above, I assist on my point that only in an area which people are good at can they finally achieve their success.

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

As is familiar to us all that the most important virtues of the successful people are always their creative thinking, their courage to risk their ventures and so on. /这句逻辑有点不对，最重要的特点是xx,xx,xx以及等等等？可以改成 We can easily find creative thinking, courage to risk ventures and other virtues of this kind in successful people.However, all these good qualities do not necessarily mean that they achieve their success just by means of take new things and risks rather than the thing they have done well. The areas at which they are good/有点不流畅，把at放good后吧 will serve as the original resource of their creative thinking and as the basis for their further achievement. /这个观点不错！I base my point on the following reasons.

To begin with, the areas at which they are good will serve as the basis for their creative thinking. This is especially true when it comes to the researching experiment. The institution researcher might do hundreds of experiment every year. Can you imagine how to/多余 carrying out each experiment in a field with which they are not familiar, just by the passion to try their new thinking/thought?  It is definitely a waste of resource and effort because these experiments are less likely to succeed without theoretical directions, let along creative discoveries./建议重新组织一下，最后的let along creative discoveries.有点突兀 In contrast, a researcher who is knowledgeable in his own field always bases their creative thinking on the classical theory and is more sensitive to the/多余 any special results which may be ignored by an ignorant experiment conductor.

Furthermore, the areas at which they are good/最好变化下，不然容易审美疲劳 will serve as the basis for their taking new risks. This is especially true when it comes to the business field. Suppose an inexperienced businessman who has little knowledge in the investment field.  What happened if he chooses to invest in the disadvantage industry just by the impulse of risking their money?  The result will be either he loss the money or get profit by a 1% good luck.  However, no businessman is fond of trying his luck every time but makes decisions based on the professional economic and investment knowledge. Only in this way can they lower the entire risks for their investment.

In all, as discussed above, I assist on my point that only in an area which people are good at can they finally achieve their success.

二三段结构很相似啊~个人觉得变化下更好