COMEON作文小组——2008.9.28作业 weenbopper

weenbopperUID: 2423595

"No pains, no gains.” That is a bible quotation, the truth of which has been recognized for thousands of years. However, does someone enjoy in experiencing pains? The answer might be obviously negative. It is the gains that attract numerous people to experience them. Thus, as for the recently hot debate over whether people should do something they do not enjoy in, I wholeheartedly support it with the following reasons.


First and foremost, as a member of a family, organization, company or club, we have to fulfill our obligations, which is unenjoyable in the most time. Your personal enjoyment is definitely based on these obligations, hardly can we experience any pieces of ecstasy before finishing our own jobs. As a employee, for instance, you have to finish your boring yet important works before doing your own enjoyable activities. How could you be a responsible and gorgeous employee if you even can not fulfill this basic responsibility? Also, do you think it is rational for a student to play cards before accomplishing his homework? Moreover, those obligations would be the prerequisite to enjoy those things that you want to do, say the job can provide us with the necessary money, and this example is just the tip of an iceberg.

In addition, to persist in finishing those dislikable things can cultivate and polish our good personalities. The most obvious one might be persistence. Just from the invention of light bulb, we can easily know how important persistence is for success. But for Thomas Edison's persistence, we might live in the dark world for a few more centuries. From persisting in fulfilling the things that you do not want to do, persistence and strong wills may be readily available to us. When I was a child, I always thought the homework were boring yet functional, and thus I persisted in trying my best to accomplish them. After a long term of this rigorous time, I got not only the highest grade but also a strong will and persistence, and this seemingly handicap has been proved as the best gift I sent to myself in the future. After that, one sentence is always bear in my mind" You can never know how close you are when you give up."

Admittedly, to do enjoyable thing also have its merit, say entertainment. From dawn to dark, everyone has to go through a rigorous schedule, every day we have papers to submit, deadlines to meet, meetings to attend, bills to pay and even children can not exempt from this rush, while those enjoyable things provide us with a little piece of relaxation in this fast-paced and pressing world. Nevertheless, when we look deeper and carefully balance its pros and cons, its demerit would prevail.

All in all, unenjoyable thing, by polishing our good personalities, is an indispensable factor for success, and also is the precondition to enjoy even a little piece of ecstasy.

candyamUID: 2325105

"No pains, no gains.” That is a bible quotation, the truth of which has been recognized for thousands of years. However, does someone enjoy in experiencing pains?( People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing=experiencing pain???) The answer might be obviously negative. It is the gains that attract numerous people to experience them. Thus, as for the recently hot debate over whether people should do something they do not enjoy in, I wholeheartedly support it with the following reasons.(整体上来说第一段不错)
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First and foremost, as a member of a family, organization, coampany or club, we have to fulfill our obligations, which is unenjoyable in the most time(GOOD). Your personal enjoyment is definitely based on these obligations, hardly can we experience any pieces of ecstasy before finishing our own jobs. As a employee, for instance, you have to finish your boring yet important works before doing your own enjoyable activities. How could you be a responsible and gorgeous employee if you even can not fulfill this basic responsibility? Also, do you think it is rational for a student to play cards before accomplishing his homework? Moreover, those obligations would be the prerequisite to enjoy those things that you want to do, say the job can provide us with the necessary money, and this example is just the tip of an iceberg.(作者的句式灵活，词汇量也很不错)


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In addition, to persist in finishing those dislikable things can cultivate and polish our good personalities. The most obvious one might be persistence. Just from the invention of light bulb, we can easily know how important persistence is for success. But for Thomas Edison's persistence, we might live in the dark world for a few more centuries. From persisting in fulfilling the things that you do not want to do（这里这个例子我有疑问了，PERSISTENCE,尤其是爱迪生的这个例子，似乎和人们不得不做不喜欢的事情没有关系吧，爱迪生也许是真的对发明灯泡有兴趣吧，觉得这个例子牵强了，应该想一个更好的理由）, persistence and strong wills may be readily available to us. When I was a child, I always thought the homework were boring yet functional, and thus I persisted in trying my best to accomplish them. After a long term of this rigorous time, I got not only the highest grade but also a strong will and persistence, and this seemingly handicap has been proved as the best gift I sent to myself in the future. After that, one sentence is always bear in my mind" You can never know how close you are when you give up."

Admittedly, to do enjoyable thing also have its meritS, say entertainment. From dawn to dark, everyone has to go through a rigorous schedule, every day we have papers to submit, deadlines to meet, meetings to attend, bills to pay and even children can not exempt from this rush, while those enjoyable things provide us with a little piece of relaxation in this fast-paced and pressing world. Nevertheless, when we look deeper and carefully balance its pros and cons, its demerit would prevail.(感觉这段也跟文题不太。。。。文题是人们有时不得不做不喜欢的事情，那么论证就只有两个观点：1.人们不是不得这样，人们总是可以做喜欢的事情；2.人们确实不得不做不喜欢的事情.但是这段说的是做喜欢的事情有好处。感觉不太对路)


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All in all, unenjoyable thing, by polishing our good personalities, is an indispensable factor for success, and also is the precondition to enjoy even a little piece of ecstasy.

总体来说我在句式，句法，甚至词汇挑不出来什么毛病，作者水平很是不错，但是例子和观点么，觉得跑题了，需要注意，对于中国学生来说本来要命的句式，语法，词汇等，而不是观点，恰当的例子等，所以作者如果跑题了或者证明偏了就不值得了。

rolling713UID: 2550988

我是楼上的rolling713， 楼主刚刚改过在下的拙作。我现在修改了一下，楼主能再帮我看看吗？谢谢！:) :handshake