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Do you agree or disagree: It is important to know events happening around the world, though sometimes they are unlikely to affect your daily life. (2007.4.29,生活与个人成功类)


I agree with that know something happening around world is important, though the things happened may not affect our daily life immediately. but who knows? Quote a advertizing’s word “everything is possible.”

We call it butterfly affection, a butterfly wave in china, may make a tornado in America. Today’s world is smaller than ever, morning life in Beijing, and have afternoon tea in New York. Or by the effect of global economics, the important things happen in the world will affect your daily life, more or less, such as the oil-price, do you care about it? I know that everyone talk about it everyday, oil-price affect our daily life everywhere, the transportation, the oil make product, and weather is about this, reduce Greenhouse gas, protect the environment.

Not only about the economy, the political events around the world is so important, such as diplomatic incident, anti-terrorism. and something happened you do not know it affect you, but it does, you do not need it now, means not you do not need it for ever, such as visa, when we can get a visa to another country is not important, but when you go aboard you need it, and then you should know, it affect your life.

But not every events happening around the world you should know, know something interesting and may affect your life is important, sometime you can chat with your colleague with it, a good issue.

In conclusion, read a newspaper is important, know something happening, and catch the world’s step.

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I agree with that to know something happening around the world is important, though the things happened may not affect our daily life immediately. But who knows? Quote a advertizing(’s) word “everything is possible.”

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We call it butterfly affection, a butterfly wave in china, may make a tornado in America. Today’s world is smaller than ever, morning life in Beijing, and have afternoon tea in New York. Or by the effect of global economics, the important things happen in the world will affect your daily life, more or less, such as the oil-price, do you care about it? I know that everyone talk about it everyday, oil-price affect our daily life everywhere, the transportation, the oil make product, and weather is about this, reduce Greenhouse gas, protect the environment.

Not only about the economy, the political events around the world is so important, such as diplomatic incident, anti-terrorism. and something happened you do not know it (不知道这里要表达什么意思)affect you, but it does, maybe(加上这个词可能表达更准确)you do not need it now, means not（我的语感告诉我应该是not means） you do not need it for ever, such as visa, when we can get a visa to another country (这里少个it)is not important, but when you go aboard you need it, and then you should know, it affect your life.寄()托家园x7hXlD;j2^
(最后一句有些牵强，可以出国的时候签证无疑也很重要，且最后一句的意思表达不是很清楚)
But not every events happening around the world（可以适当换些说法比如the situation of the world, information and news of the world等等） you should know, know（没有主语应用ing形式） something interesting and may affect （还是前面的问题）your life is important, sometime you can chat with your colleague with（连续用两个with不好，而且应该用about） it, a good issue.N"B8U\+`Ju
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In conclusion, read(ing) a newspaper is important, know something happening, and catch the world’s step.
最后这一段的问题是语句结构不清，最后两个分句是祈使句？第一个分句is是谓语，所以要用reading.

注：第一次给别人改，有的地方可能不妥，取其精华取其糟粕吧！