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Recently, a question of building a business research center or a agriculture center in our country is better makes people in my university pretty confused. For my part, I strongly recommend a new research center for business to be built in our country.

First and foremost, the fact is that our country is so abundant in farmlands and farmers that we have no need to worry about agricultural problems. However, comparing this situation with that of current business affairs in China, you will find out that our country is weaker in the aspect of business.

Take international trade for example, we should have had the confidence in competing with other countries relying on our resources and manufactory industries. But, on the contrary, we lost many of these competitions because of lacking commercial and legal knowledge. Therefore, there is no time for us to waste to improve people's knowledge in business.

What's more, if our country has advantages over other countries in business area, we can reap a lot of benefits such as increase in funds and international status.

In summary, building a research center for business research is more beneficial considering all the facts a stated above.

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Recently, a question of /wether building a business research center or a agriculture center in our country is better makes people in my university pretty confused.这个和你的大学有什么关系？ For my part, I strongly recommend a new research center for business to be built in our country. First and foremost, the fact is that our country is so abundant in farmlands and farmers that we have no need to worry about agricultural problems. However, comparing this situation with that of current business affairs in China, you will find out that our country is weaker in the aspect of business. 这个展开不够，要具体到为什么中国的商业更亟待发展，举例说明商业方面落后的表现，这样的话更有说服力。 ,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA_&EpM Take international trade for example, we should have had the confidence in competing with other countries relying on our resources and manufactory industries. But, on the contrary, we lost many of these competitions because of lacking commercial and legal knowledge. Therefore, there is no time for us to waste to improve people's knowledge in business.这段是上一段的例证么？还是放在一起比较好。留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA(Gz jKd~&t%G What's more, if our country has advantages over other countries in business area, we can reap a lot of benefits such as increase in funds and international status.这段你说的是我们在商业方面有优势的话就给我们带来什么什么好处，而不是说建造商业研究中心的好处，当然，你的意思是间接的，但还是论点清晰明确比较好。 In summary, building a research center for business research is more beneficial considering all the facts a/I stated above. LZ语言基础还可以，但论证不够说服力，建议文章结构整齐些，观点明确，然后就是多练练手啦，总之处女作嘛，还是值得鼓励的，楼主加油！