COMEON-----作文小组-greenpalm-10.16作业

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COMEON-----作文小组-greenpalm-10.16作业
People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons that people work? Discuss one or more of these reasons. Use specific examples and details to support your answer.  
It is appropriate to think that people work for living, But not all people are struggling only to survive in such a vivid world without some other reasons:
     In personal consideration, We are human being, which are different from or may far ahead to any of the animal in the fields of conscience and wisdom. Those abilities made us behavior more complicated. For example, We realize the importance of heat then we discover fire; we staring at the sparkling of the fire then we invent the light. Even more, We corporate to defense the dangerous from nature while cover our goals together. We know how to contemplation, make plan, exam the plan, and solve the problems. What's all the motive of our action? It's the need of something but not only living.
    It's a world full of fiercely competitions. Anyone would not conscious in living basic life but better and better life when looking others' abundant living condition. So we can easily find that there are a mount of people rushed here and there for different jobs. And one success in the competitions would be seen as the able and could lead a high quality of life. What happen when people have had the life of their dream? They asked more: a family or a group of close friends, Which would become another motive of their working. Finally they will again engross in the struggle for more money, which could provide more for their families and friends.
       In order to gain what they need, people have to work. But besides the gain, Working itself may also become the origin of happiness. For some of them choose the career they love and are willing to devote all their life in it. Though this situation may stand a relatively small part of the labor market. Their enthusiasms in the work, however, also tell us what's more important than their living.
       Above all, We can safely conclude that people work hard are not because of living but other things in their various dreams and in the work itself.
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It is appropriate(understandable/reasonable) to think that people work for living, bBut not all people are struggling only to survive in such a vivid world without some other reasons

In personal consideration, We we are human beings, which are different from or may far ahead to any of the animals in the sensefields of conscience and wisdom. Those abilities made us behavebehavior more complicated. For example, wWe realized the importance of heat then we discovered fire; we staring at(??) the sparkling of the fire then we invented the light. Even more, wWe corporate to defense the dangerous from nature while cover our goals together(这句话没理解，感觉动物也可以聚集在一起对抗外敌啊，很多群居动物就是这样的). We know how to contemplateion, make plan, exam the plan, and solve the problems. What's all the motive of our action? It's the need of something but not only living(感觉有点偏题啊，lz是想说因为人比动物有wisdom和conscience，所以我们一切action目的都是sth but not only living，但题目问的是除了挣钱还有其他什么原因促使人们工作，挣钱也是人类区别与动物的活动啊，confused).
It's a world full of fiercely competitions. Anyone would not conscious（？？satisfy？？） in living basic life but better and better life when looking others' abundant living condition. So we can easily find that there are a mount of people rushinged here and there for different jobs. And one success in the competitions would be seen as the able and could lead a high quality of life（感觉这一段到此为止还是在说挣钱，至少是和钱有关的）. What happen when people have had the life of their dream? They asked more: a family or a group of close friends, Which would become another motive of their working. Finally they will again engross in the struggle for more money, which could provide more for their families and friends（感觉这一段观点不明确，前面在说competition促使人们工作了，后面有开始说dream，转而又说money）.
In order to gain what they need, people have to work（这个观点是上一段的吗？那直接放在上面吧，让你的论点明确些，最好上不要提money也是人工作的need了）. But besides the gain, Working working itself may also becomes the origin of happiness. For some of them choose the career they love and are willing to devote all their life in it. Though this situation may stand a relatively small part of the labor market. Their enthusiasms in the work, however, also tell us what's more important than their living（这段你提了两个，hapiness，后面又说interest，最好统一，虽然带着interest去工作能带来hapiness，但是他们应该是论点和论证的关系）.
Above all, We can safely conclude that people work hard are not because of living but other things in their various dreams and in the work itself.

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