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10月15日
32)A company is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the company should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
一个公司准备出资支持艺术或者保护环境？你认为公司该如何选择？(185,花钱问题)
A company is going to give some money rather to support the arts or to protect the environment, I prefer the money the money to support the arts, all the reasons I state below.
First, just a company’s money can have how much effect in protecting the environment? I think just so-so or nothing. No effect, just like a sand throw into the sea. But give the money to one or some artists, is different, compare to environment need, artist just need a little or tiny portion, but can be a strong effect. So why should us throw the money into the water than doing something really?
Second, such a company should build up its mind do not just protect the environment, companies should not destroy the environment, if the environment is not be touched, why should us to protect it? And if the environment need be protected, just one company’s power is not enough, but the art, is different, company who can support the arts and build up a relief about “protect the environment”. Can tell common people about the crisis about the damage to the environment, and to exhibit the artwork, everyone who attend the arts exhibition can feel the guilty about damage the environment, more and more effect than just throw the little money to the sea.
For all the things I have said above, I strongly agree with the money should support the arts. I do not meaning that environment is not important, but I think money should work more effective than just throw the money into the sea, and support the arts is the right way. Support some artists. Who have the relief about help the environment, will be the best way, and can publicize the company, kill two birds with one stone~

[ 本帖最后由 needyou 于 2008-10-17 23:45 编辑 ]

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A company is going to give some money rather to support the arts or to protect the environment/直接照抄好像不太好啊, I prefer /using the money to support the arts, all the reasons I state below.

First, how much effect can a company’s money have in protecting the environment?/调整了下 I think just so-so/口语化词汇，个人以为最好少用or nothing. No effect, just like a sand throw into the sea. But give the money to one or some artists, is different, compare to environment need, artist just need a little or tiny portion, but can be a strong effect. So why should us throw the money into the water than doing something really?

Second, such a company should build up its mind do not just protect the environment, companies should not destroy the environment, if the environment is not be touched/?, why should us protect it? And if the environment need be protected, just one company’s power is not/far from enough, but the art, is different, company who can support the arts and build up a relief/拼写 about “protect the environment” and can/没必要拆成两句 tell common people about the crisis about the damage to the environment, and to/through exhibit the artwork, everyone who attend the arts exhibition can feel the guilty about damage the environment, more and more effect than just throw the little money to the sea.

For all the things I have said above, I strongly agree with the money should support the arts. I do not meaning that environment is not important, but I think money should work more effective than just throw the money into the sea, and support the arts is the right/a better way. Support some artists who have the belief about help the environment will be the best way, and can publicize the company, kill two birds with one stone~

楼主先写写简单的句子吧，你的长句子很容易出错，断句、语法等也有不同程度的问题

结构没问题！例子还可以！加油！