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发表于 2008-10-18 23:51:21 |显示全部楼层
Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why.


High education should be available should be open to all the students or only to good students? in my own experience. I support the opinion that higher education should be available to all students, all the reasons I state below.

First, it’s hard to define “good students”. What kind of students can be defined as ”good” ? grade? If higher grade can be measured as good students, Bill Gates, or Rockefeller, or Ford, maybe the loser, in the definition. Because they can not enroll or finished some kinds of higher education in their lives. But they are great man. So how to define the good student is so different, and can not decide who are available to the higher education, and if university available to all students, we are not have the problem to define the standard who is good student.

Second, good students maybe not fit for the university life, maybe they are just pedants and can not deal with the little things in life. We have hear so many news that some grade good students fail in their college life. And common people, who are not very well when they are senior school students maybe have some expertise in some field, such as computer programmer or mechanical design. These people who have some expertise in such field should be enroll the college and training their experience, they are genius in such field.

In conclusion, I support that university education should be available to all students, because we can not define who have the ability to enroll the university.  And more people have higher education is better for our society.

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发表于 2008-10-19 09:01:45 |显示全部楼层

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这位战友 你楼上的这个作文第二段有部分乱码!你再重新传一份

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发表于 2008-10-19 09:28:07 |显示全部楼层
High education should be available should be open to all the students or only to good students? /这句话有问题! in/大写 my own experience./前面用逗号 I support the opinion that higher education should be available to all students, all the reasons I state below./有问题,没有谓语!

First, it’s hard to define “good students”. What kind of students can be defined as”good”? grade? /
大些,而且有些口语化,建议吧句子补全。 If higher grade can be measured as good students, Bill Gates, or Rockefeller, or Ford, maybe the loser, in the definition. /例子挺好。Because they can not enroll or finished some kinds of higher education in their lives. But they are great man. So how to define the good student is so different, and can not decide who are available to the higher education, and if university available to all students, weare not have the problem to define the standard who is good student. /这句话有问题建议换个方式说。而且有语病。
Second, good students maybe not fit for the university life, maybe they are just pedants and can not deal with the little things in life. We have hear/heard so many news that some grade good students fail in their college life. And common people, who are not very well when they are senior school students maybe have some expertise in some field, such as computer programmer or mechanical design. These people who have some expertise in such field should be enroll/ enrolled或者其他好的词the college and training their experience, they are genius in such field.

In conclusion, I support that university education should be available to all students, because we can not define who have the ability to enroll/
建议换个词,go to, get into, enter the university.  And more people have higher education is better for our society.

总体来讲,结构比较工整,理由比较充分。
建议:用词变换,句型变化,字数最好在320以上。

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