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Do you agree or disagree: Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. (2008年05月9-10日,花钱问题)


Which field, namely, arts or athletics, should be the priority for government to support financially? So complicated this choice is that people have various answers for it. Some people believe that arts deserve more economic support than athletics from the government, while personally, I will vote for the athletics.

Firstly and foremost, the spirit in athletic field, that is, persistence, endows it with the value to be supported by the goveronment. We human beings have witnessed numerous sport games or championships since the old ancient time, especially the Olympic games. In each of those games, we see the athletes running and jumping, dedicating all their energy and effort, even though there is only one golden medal provided. Moreover, as long as tracing back their career of athletics, we can easily find that each of the athletes has gone through a particularly hard time of training during which the atheles must overcome a large number of difficulties and backsets. The sport spirit exists In their mind is persistence, which definitely is favorable merit for human beings to pursue. The athletics is a considerably powerful source of encouragement, spuring ordinary people to insist whatever he or she is engaged in. Thus, it is reasonable for the government to support the athletics.

Additionally, for the sake of health, athletics is never a minor part in our daily lives, which should be highly sponsored by the government. A healthy body is the foundation for each individual. No matter in a workplace or school, we often hear that somebody is absent from work just because of some kind of illness, which definitely have no positive effect on the working efficiency. No to mention the situation in hospital,  in which someone is in tremendous trouble with cancer or other unapproachable disease.What will be the consequence.? Obviously, the family members of this person will suffer a long period of distress. Therefore, it is totally not unnecessary that government should put considerable weight on the physical health. Suppporting more athletic activities and games will enhance the deep impression of athletics inside each person and make he or she realize the importance of athletics and then do more exercises so to keep fit.

In a word, I will vote for the athletics without any reservation.

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10月22日作业
Do you agree or disagree: Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. (2008年05月9-10日,花钱问题)留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAS
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nFirstly and foremost, the spirit in athletic field, that is, persistence, endows it with the value to be supported by the goveronment. We human beings have witnessed numerous sport games or championships since the old ancient time, especially the Olympic games. In each of those games, we see the athletes running and jumping, dedicating all their energy and effort, even though there is only one golden medal provided.这句话我觉得很需要改，但是想了蛮久还是没想出来。起码running and jumping这样的似乎不妥……另外，我觉得这句是支持这段中心句的具体句子，应该要改好。 Moreover, as long as tracing back their career of athletics, we can easily find that each of the athletes has gone through a particularly hard time of training during which the atheles (he) must overcome a large number of difficulties and backsets.(and how this example demonstrates the spirit of persistence? No further analysis is made) The sport spirit exists In their mind is persistence, which definitely is favorable merit for human beings to pursue. The athletics is a considerably powerful source of encouragement, spuring ordinary people to insist whatever he or she is engaged in.(why is the encouragement talked about here? This paragraph seems on the topic of persistence) Thus, it is reasonable for the government to support the athletics.

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U)|'Y:_NAdditionally, for the sake of health, athletics(you may use “doing sport” here for the varying word using requirement) is never a minor part in our daily lives, which should be highly sponsored by the government. A healthy body is the foundation for each individual. No matter in a workplace or school, we often hear that somebody is absent from work just because of some kind of illness, which definitely have no positive effect on the working efficiency. Not to mention the situation in hospital, (I don’t quite get your meaning. Why those in hospital are supposed to be fatal ill?) in which someone is in tremendous trouble with cancer or other unapproachable(incurable/irremediable) disease.What will be the consequence.? Obviously, the family members of this person will suffer a long period of distress. Therefore, it is totally not unnecessary that government should put considerable weight on the physical health.(chinglish? 不是完全没有必要……是吧……) Suppporting more athletic activities and games will enhance the deep impression of athletics inside each person and make he or she realize the importance of athletics and then do more exercises so to keep fit.
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两点选的蛮好的，坚持的精神、身体的健康，具体谈没谈好。。。

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