COMEON作文小组——jimibt 2008 10月23日作业

jimibtUID: 2560923

A or D : Grades(marks) encourage students to learn? (2008/2/16，185里面的经典题目 学习和教育类)留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAM!^Y*s9czY#F

Learning is a very important task to students. To qualify how well students study, grading is one of the most popular ways to be used.There are much controversy over whether grades can encourage students to study or not. In my opinion, grades not only discourage some students who do not get high grades,but also stimulate some to learn the strategy to achieve high grade,which is not the original thing they want to get from learning.

First, low grades will frustrate some potentially successfully students who get low grades to learn,.It may give them a false impression that their intelligence are low in those students. After they compare their bad results to the classmates who get good grades, they will feel  much more shameful. This bad feeling is a great handicap to cultivate the confidence that they are able to learn well.Some students may even discontinue their effort on study. Suppose that someone does not have the confidence to learn well,how can we estimate that he/she will study well?

On the other side, grades induce students to learn  strategies to get high grades,not to learn well.Since high grades can give students much sense of achievements, this provides students with a strong motivation  to get high grades. And it is moreeasier to learn the the strategy to test,but not the learning content. For example,a  biology teacher gives a gist of  whatexamination will ask,and the test contains the  reason of occurrence of  phenomenon . To get  high score,the students may also choose to recite the reasons and do not think why the phenomenon will happen.It is not the initial thing students want
to learn.

In conclusion, grades exert negative influence to students. The educator should  consider carefully their drawback when using them as a means to evaluate students.

[ 本帖最后由 jimibt 于 2008-10-24 18:39 编辑 ]

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Learning is a very important task to students. To qualify how well students study, grading is one of the most popular ways to be used.There are much controversy over （是这个介词么？）whether grades can encourage students to study or not. In my opinion, grades not only discourage some students who do not get high grades,but also stimulate some（one） to learn the strategy to achieve high grade,which is not the original thing they want to get from learning.

First, low grades will frustrate some potentially successfully students who get low grades to learn,.It may give them a false impression that their intelligence are low in those students. After they compare their bad results to the classmates who get good grades, they will feel  much more shameful. This bad feeling is a great handicap to cultivate the confidence that they are able to learn well.Some students may even discontinue their effort on study. Suppose that someone does not have the confidence to learn well,how can we estimate that he/she will study well?        E
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On the other side, grades induce students to learn  strategies to get high grades,not to learn well.Since high grades can give students much sense of achievements, this provides students with a strong motivation  to get high grades. And it is more easier to learn the the strategy to test,but not the learning content. For example,a  biology teacher gives a gist of  whatexamination will ask,and the test contains the  reason of occurrence of  phenomenon . To get(for getting)  high score,the students may also choose to recite the reasons and do not think why the phenomenon will happen.It is not the initial thing students want 寄托家园7M7z{'h
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In conclusion, grades exert negative influence to students. The educator should  consider carefully their drawback when using them as a means to evaluate students. 说实话 我觉得你写得很好。语言和例证都很不错，不我好很多。真的是榜样 我不知道还能修改什么 再改 也是吹毛求疵 如果你觉得我不够诚恳 你可以让别人帮你看看 希望你考试30分钟内能这样发挥 不错了 真的 sorry 恩 还有注意标点符号后面要有空格。
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不错 加油:)

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A or D : Grades(marks) encourage students to learn? (2008/2/16，185里面的经典题目 学习和教育类)留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USAM!^Y*s9czY#F
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Learning is a very important task to students. To qualify（evaluate我觉得qualify一个是限定的意思，还有一个是使具有资格，貌似没有评价的意思） how well students study, grading is one of the most popular ways to be used.There are much controversy over whether grades can encourage students to study or not. In my opinion, grades not only discourage some students who do not get high grades,but also stimulate some to learn the strategy（to simply pursuit the skill我觉得这么说更能体现单一追求技巧的论述） to achieve high grade,which is not the original thing they want to get from learning（which comfliicts with their original objective of mastering knowledge and technology学习的初衷就是为了获得技术和知识，这样说就更明确了）.

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First（一般用firstly）, low grades will frustrate some potentially successfully students who get low grades to learn（改成：low grades may frustrate students, especially those who may be excellent in the future ）,.It may give them a false impression that their intelligence are low in those students. After they compare their bad results to (with, compare to 更多的是表示比喻的意思)the classmates who get good grades, they will feel  much more shameful. This bad feeling is a great handicap to cultivate the confidence that they are able to learn well（such feeling is not beneficial for them to bulid up their confidence.）.Some students may even discontinue their effort on study. Suppose that someone does not have the confidence to learn well,how can we estimate that he/she will study well?"Q/Z
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On the other side, grades induce students to learn  strategies to get high grades,not to learn well.Since high grades can give students much sense of achievements, this provides students with a strong motivation  to get high grades. And it is more (much)easier to learn the the strategy to test,but not the learning content(but not pay more attention to truly master the knowledge). For example,a  biology teacher gives a gist of  what examination will ask,and the test contains the  reasons of occurrence of  phenomenon . To get  high score,the students may also choose to recite the reasons and do not think why the phenomenon will happen.It is not the initial thing students want bbs.gter.net'V
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In conclusion, grades exert negative influence to students. The educator should  consider carefully their drawback when using them as a means to evaluate students.


这些都是我个人的观点，不知道是否能令你满意。
我觉得你写的不错，很有逻辑性，但是表达的可以再细腻一些
最好再写一个原因。一般都是5段文章。只有两个论证段可能会影响你的分数^_^

jimibtUID: 2560923

你修改的很不错，谢谢！
改完之后感觉表达好了很多。

有一个用词可以商榷一下，pursuit为名词，用pursue可能好一些。

共同进步！！
^_^

cleanwater25UID: 2295333

呵呵，是的，我也是刚刚才发现这个错误的。
改正！