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Agree or Disagree: university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study.
提纲：
     同意
1，好多专业都需要基础学科
2，基础学科使我们的思想更有逻辑性
3，基础学科和我们日常生活息息相关

With the dramatic development of economy in every country, more and more occupations require more conprehensive knowledge and experience. Therefore, some people claims that university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study, while other people hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, it is necessary for us to get more from the basic science classes.

The first reason for my perference to this point is that there is many majors based on the basic science. In other words, many programs need relevant knowledge and background offered by some basic disciplines. For example, as is known to us, Newton is the biggest giant who claims to stand on the shoulders of other giant persons. When he came across the problems in the field of physics, mathe which is regarded as one of the most important basic sciences could always provide him with a lot of methods to deal with the problems. When he calculated the value of the earth gravity, calculus helped him a deal. Without any knowledge about mathematics, Newton could not have climbed up onto the shoulders of other giant scientists.

Another reason why I agree with the point that  university students should learn more basic science classes is that some basic science can help us keep a sober mind and make our mind more logically. No one can deny the fact that mathe has become the representive of logic which is of most importance for reasoning and thinking. A very famous scientist in China once said in an interview that he would usually work on some mathe problems if his logic is confused by the problems in his biology field, which would refresh his mind again.

Last but not the least, although the addition of some basic science courses can sort of increase the students' pressure and burden, compared to the positive influences and advantages, basic science courses are playing more and more important part in our daily lives to which such sciences are almost indispensable. To illustrate this point here is a good example that is very persuasive. One of my friends in my community who never enter the school for any education including the basic science. He is now suffering a very difficult time when he gave back the change to the customers. He usually makes mistake which brings a lot of complains from his customers.

In sum,  It is necessary for us to learn some basic science, because it provides us with a lot of ways and important to our daily lives.

[ 本帖最后由 cleanwater25 于 2008-10-27 09:49 编辑 ]

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With the dramatic development of economy in every country (in the world 好了，非洲有些国家可不发达), more and more occupations require more conprehensive (comprehensive) knowledge and experience. Therefore, some people claims that university students should be required to take basic science classes even they are not part of the field of the study, while other people hold the opposite view. As far as I am concerned, it is necessary for us to get more from the basic science classes.
(我还是没弄明白第一段的关系，因为现在经济发展要求学生有综合的技能，所以学生应当学习基础科学的课程。这似乎没什么关系吧。要不lz点明指出，more and more occupations require more comprehensive knowledge and experience which basic science courses can provide)

The first reason for my perference (preference) to this point is that there is many majors based on the basic science(s). In other words, many programs need relevant knowledge and background offered by some basic disciplines. For example, as is known to us, Newton is the biggest giant who claims to stand on the shoulders of other giant persons. When he came across (come across 在这里是什么意思？) the problems in the field of physics, mathe (math) which is regarded as one of the most important basic sciences could always provide him with a lot of methods to deal with the (去掉the，通指不需要定冠词) problems. When he calculated the value of the earth gravity, calculus helped him a deal. Without any knowledge about mathematics, Newton could not have climbed up onto the shoulders of other giant scientists.

Another reason why I agree with the point that university students should learn more basic science classes (不用再复述一遍topic statement了，每段的topic sentence 越简洁越好) is that some basic science(s) can help us keep a sober mind and make our mind more logically(logical). No one can deny the fact that mathe (math) has become the representive (是不是想说代表representation) of logic which is of most importance for reasoning and thinking. A very famous scientist in China once said in an interview that he would usually work on some mathe (math) problems if his logic is confused by the problems in his biology field, which would refresh his mind again. (我觉得在这里用定于从句就会显得有些指代不明了，不如用因果关系吧，for mathematics would refresh his mind again)

Last but not the least, although the addition of some basic science courses can (be) sort of increase the students' pressure and burden, compared to the positive influences and advantages, basic science courses are playing more and more important part in our daily lives to which such sciences are almost indispensable. (我承认在GRE阅读中会出现这种TS特长的句子，可是你是在写作文，要让别人明白，不是在写GRE阅读，考别人的阅读水平。相信那些老外也不愿意读GRE阅读) To illustrate this point here is a good example that is very persuasive. One of my friends in my community who never enter the(a，enter a school上学，enter the school去某个学校 ) school for any education including the basic science(s). (这句话没有谓语) He is now suffering a very difficult time when he gave back the change to the customers. He usually makes mistake(s，要不就加冠词) which brings(bring) a lot of complains from his customers.

倒数第二第三句话改成：One of my friends in my community who never enter a school for any education including the basic sciences is now suffering a very difficult time when he gave back the change to the customers.
我想说的是，我没看出来这个例子说明了什么道理。请原谅我用argument的观点来对待你这个例子：你的朋友没接受过basic sciences，他在处理changes时出现mistakes，但这之间有什么关系吗？你没有任何reasoning来verify their correlation，只是摆出了一个事实：一个没有basic sciences background的朋友在处理业务的时候会经常出错。但是不是其他原因导致了这样的错误？这样的可能性很大的。因为我们知道因为当契约发生变化的时候，遭受到客户抱怨是正常的。如果他的同事都能处理很好，而他不能，多半是因为他的交流能力有问题，而不是他没有接受过基础科学的教育。

In sum, It(it) is necessary for us to learn some basic science(s), because it provides us with a lot of ways and (it is) important to our daily lives.

我开始在写作文的时候有爱用复杂的句型，似乎那样看起来很专业。在写GRE作文的时候，有个朋友说我用的句型太复杂，不易看懂。而我朋友用的句型就比较简单，基本上就是6级的句子，顶多有一两个复杂的举行或词汇。结果她的作文成绩比我高。当我现在在寄托上贴作文的时候，有不少朋友指出我用的句型太复杂，尤其是TS，我才意识到这个问题，在这里我用谢谢weenbopper和其他的朋友们。作文是让别人读懂的，如何清晰的表达自己的观点才是最重要的。句子用的再复杂，眼花缭乱，而增加了别人的阅读难度，尤其是复杂句型或者词汇用错了，让意思更加不明，那就失去了意义了。毕竟我们写的是作文，不是文学作品。希望大家能够共勉。

祝你11月1号取得好成绩。:)

cleanwater25UID: 2295333

谢谢你，你给我的改的错误正是我希望看到的。确实第四段应该说明是数学没学好，导致他连加减法都不会（这样就找错钱了，也得到别人的抱怨了）。其实有的时候一个简单句能起到连接的作用。类似的意思不连贯在第一段就出现了。多谢你的提醒。