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cleanwater25UID: 2295333

小家庭还是大家庭？

ps，我写完了才发现这道题我抄错了，看成了规模的大小，而没注意到其他的亲属。请拍砖的同志就当是这个题目吧。这几天实在太忙了，1号就要考了，我真不想在重写一篇了。当然你也可以选择不改我的作文。呵呵，完全取决于你了。

提纲：小家庭
1，小家庭省钱
2，小家庭可以给父母更多的空间做他们喜欢做的事情，这样可以保证他们的健康
3，小家庭可以使父母把全部的爱都给一个孩子
As the dramatic development of economy in many countries, more and more people start to care about the issue about the scale of the family, because families are the basic cells in every society which play very important role. Some people choose to set a large scale families, while others give the opposite views. As far as I am concerned, I believe the small scale families have more advantages over the big one.

The first reason for my preference to the small scale family is that it can save a lot of money. No one can deny the fact that the education of children in China is one of the biggest questions, because compared to the average income most parents earn
the tuition for children is sort of high. To illustrate my point, here is a good example that is very persuasive. The average salary in China is about 50 thousand Yuan per year, while the tuition along will exhaust nearly 15 percent for one child. The burden for one child is heavy, not to mention raising more children. What is more, other aspects in a family daily life can also cost a lot of money, for example, the parents have to buy many clothes, give the money to children for three meals a day and so on. However, the situation will be quite different if only one child is born in a family. Therefore, small scale family is able to reduce many pressures in many aspects.

The second reason why I regard small scale family as a superior one is that parents in the small family have more space. For example, one of my friends lives in a big family with 3 elder brothers, and his parents have to take care of all the four children. They spend almost all of their time and energy to look after them, from preparing food, helping them choose a ideal university and so forth. As a result, his parents have less time to do whatever they like to relieve their stress. In contrast, I am the only son in my family which provides my parents with a lot of time to make some trips. Every time when they come back from the joyous trip, they seem more energetic and healthier. How can my parents relax so often if they have to pay more attention to more children? So the small scale family offer more space and opportunities for parents to enjoy their lives which benefit their health mentally.

Last but not the least, more love will be filled in a small scale family. As is known to us, the energy of a person is limited and finite, so is the love parents give to a child. In order to be equal, parents have to divide their love to satisfy their children in a big family. Nevertheless, my parents give all their love to me which encourage me to study harder to reward their affections. Although the atmosphere in a big family seems warmer, the conflictions probably brought by it cannot be ignored.

All in all, it is no doubt for me to long for a small scale family, because it cuts down the cost, bring more love to just one child and save parents more energy.

[ 本帖最后由 cleanwater25 于 2008-10-29 00:26 编辑 ]

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

小改了下

As the dramatic development of economy in many countries, more and more people start to care about the issue about the scale of the family, because families are the basic cells in every/any society which play very important role 位置调整下会更好，放这读着有点不顺. Some people choose to set a large scale families, while others give/hold the opposite views. As far as I am concerned, I believe the small scale families have more advantages over the big one.

The first reason for my preference to the small scale family is that it can save a lot of money. No one can deny the fact that the education of children in China is one of the biggest questions, because compared to the average income most parents earn 这儿意思重复了,the tuition for children is sort of high. To illustrate my point, here is a good example that is very persuasive. The average salary in China is about 50 thousand Yuan per year, while the tuition along will exhaust nearly 15 percent  for one child. The burden for one child is heavy, not to mention raising more children. What is more, other aspects in a family daily life can also cost a lot of money, for example, the parents have to buy many clothes, give the money to children for three meals a day and so on. However, the situation will be quite different if only one child is born in a family. Therefore, small scale family is able to reduce many pressures in many aspects.

The second reason why I regard small scale family as a superior one is that parents in the small family have more space. For example, one of my friends lives in a big family with 3 elder brothers, and his parents have to take care of all the four children. They spend almost all of their time and energy to look after them, from？后面貌似没有个to来对应，感觉不对preparing food, helping them choose a ideal university and so forth. As a result, his parents have less time to do whatever they like to relieve their stress. In contrast, I am the only son in my family which provides my parents with a lot of time to make some trips. Every time when they come back from the joyous trip, they seem more energetic and healthier. How can my parents relax so often if they have to pay more attention to more children? So the small scale family offer more space and opportunities for parents to enjoy their lives which benefit their health mentally ？什么意思.

Last but not the least, more love will be filled in a small scale family. As is known to us, the energy of a person is limited and finite/重复？, so is the love parents give to a child. In order to be equal, parents have to divide their love to satisfy their children in a big family. Nevertheless, my parents give all their love to me which encourage me to study harder to reward their affections. Although the atmosphere in a big family seems warmer, the conflictions probably brought by it cannot be ignored.

All in all, it is no doubt for me to long for a small scale family, because it cuts down the cost, bring more love to just one child and save parents more energy.



结构，论证……没什么好挑剔的,真的很好
唯一问题是extended family 应该不是指有几个孩子的家庭吧……extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles)
当然，按你的定义，论证没有任何问题，但如果按上面定义，就有点问题了
应该extended family能有更多space(可以叫亲戚带嘛) and love（来自其他长辈）？





[ 本帖最后由 jackallen0714 于 2008-10-29 10:40 编辑 ]

ly8768UID: 2452066

As the dramatic development of economy in many countries, more and more people start to care about the issue about the scale of the family, because families are the basic cells in every society which play very important role. Some people choose to set a(不要) large scale families, while others give the opposite views. As far as I am concerned, I believe (that，更正式点) the small scale families have more advantages over the big one(s).

The first reason for my preference to the small scale family is that it can save a lot of money. No one can deny the fact that the education of children in China is one of the biggest questions, because compared to the average income most parents earnthe tuition for children is sort of high. To illustrate my point, here is a good example that is very persuasive. The average salary in China is about 50 thousand Yuan per year, while the tuition along will exhaust nearly 15 percent for one child. The burden for one child is heavy, not to mention raising more children. What is more, other aspects in a family daily life can also cost a lot of money, for example, the parents have to buy many clothes, give the money to children for three meals a day and so on. However, the situation will be quite different if only one child is born in a family. Therefore, small scale family is able to reduce many pressures in many aspects.这一段的观点我提出点以下疑问：1. 题目中说的是extended family，论据用的是孩子的教育费用。实际上按照这样的算法，无论是extended family，还是nuclear family，教育费用是没变的，因为孩子的数目没变。这个论据更适合少孩子的家庭。

second reason why I regard small scale family as a superior one is that parents in the small family have more space. For example, one of my friends lives in a big family with 3 elder brothers, and his parents have to take care of all the four children. They spend almost all of their time and energy to look after them, from preparing food, helping them choose a(an) ideal university and so forth. As a result, his parents have less time to do whatever they like to relieve their stress. In contrast, I am the only son in my family which provides my parents with a lot of time to make some trips. Every time when they come back from the joyous trip, they seem more energetic and healthier. How can my parents relax so often if they have to pay more attention to more children? So the small scale family offer(s) more space and opportunities for parents to enjoy their lives which benefit their health mentally.
看来还得讨论下extended family的定义了，根据题目中，extended family应该是(grandparents, cousins, aunts and uncles)，我觉得和家里有几个孩子没有关系。

Last but not the least, more love will be filled in a small scale family. As is known to us, the energy of a person is limited and finite, so is the love parents give to a child. In order to be equal, parents have to divide their love to satisfy their children in a big family. Nevertheless, my parents give all their love to me which encourage me to study harder to reward their affections. Although the atmosphere in a big family seems warmer, the conflictions probably brought by it cannot be ignored.

All in all, it is no doubt for me to long for a small scale family, because it cuts down the cost, bring more love to just one child and save parents more energy.
我觉得这个题目大家值得商讨一下，题目是extended family是否比没有以前重要了。而没有说到大家庭好还是小家庭好这个问题。只是这个题目可以归到“大家庭好还是小家庭好”这个大类里面。我觉得题目的重点是在说是否less important。这才是我们要证明的对象。当然这只是我的观点，不知道你是怎么看这道题目的？也欢迎大家多发表自己的看法。

[ 本帖最后由 ly8768 于 2008-10-29 20:36 编辑 ]

cleanwater25UID: 2295333

呵呵，是的，在开头我说了，我题抄错了