COMEON作文小组------jackallen0714 10月30日作业

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

10月30日
agree or disagree ：advertisements is a waste of a company's money and time because consumers have known what they want to buy（07.12.8传媒类）

Advertisement is pervading in almost every aspect of our daily life.It is repeatedly broadcasted in  TV, newspaper, Internet, so on and so forth. Although sometimes they are annoying and disturbing, in general, its advantages overweight disadvantages in many aspects. From my point of view, the assertion that advertisement is wasting company's money and time seems quite superficial.

Firstly, there is not solid evidence can verify that each and every individual already have distinctive purchasing target. In fact, according to a survey of a major consulting company, considerable proportion of people purchase goods almost aimlessly. Moreover, it is almost universal that people incline to buy things they are familiar with. The reason is quite straightforward: no one wants to take the risk to try something comes out of nowhere. Since advertisement provide company appropriate mean to make people aware of their product, it is indeed fairly helpful.

Another reason why advertisement is useful lies in the fact that it give customers confidence. As is known to everyone, advertisement will cost considerable amount of money. In order to make profit, companies have to guarantee the consistently high quality of their product. Otherwise, when customs try their product for the first time but find it is only waste of money, they would have no inclination to buy it again. To some extend, advertisement reflect the quality of the goods and convey information of reliability to the customers which in turns will boost the sale of the product.

The most important function of advertisement is its ability to change people's attitude even customers have their personal preference. For example, my father used to reject microwave oven for many reasons, such as it is not safe and the food cooked by this is not healthy. However, after seeing the advertisement which contains information saying that microwave oven is healthy, safe and convenient, my father accepted and immediately purchase one. As you can see, advertisement indeed can change people's attitude.

As the reasons I listed above, I believe advertisement plays a essential role when people purchase goods. Because it makes people aware of the product, give customers confidence and can change people's attitude.

jackallen0714UID: 2510951

自我感觉第二点写得很失败……ts没表达好

ly8768UID: 2452066

Advertisement (has been pervading) is pervading in almost every aspect of our daily life. It is repeatedly broadcasted in(on) TV, newspaper(s), Internet, so on and so forth(我觉得so on 和so forth要一个就好了). Although sometimes they are annoying and disturbing, in general, its advantages overweight disadvantages in many aspects. From my point of view, the assertion that advertisement is wasting company's money and time seems quite superficial.

Firstly, there is not (no) solid evidence can verify(can verify 改成 verifying) that each and every individual(each和every重复了) already have(has) distinctive purchasing target. In fact, according to a survey of a major consulting company, considerable proportion of people purchase(s) goods almost aimlessly. Moreover, it is almost universal that people incline to buy things they are familiar with. The reason is quite straightforward: no one wants to take the risk to try something (that) comes out of nowhere(不知道come out nowhere是不是一个短语，如果不是的话用reward好了,或者说no effect). Since advertisement provide(s) company (with,provide with) appropriate mean(s) to make people aware of their product, it is indeed fairly helpful.
我觉得把最后一句话作为论点会更清晰点，整个段落围绕让人们了解到该产品展开论证的。

Another reason why advertisement is useful lies in(on, lie in是位于,lie on是...的原因) the fact that it give(s) customers confidence. As is known to everyone, advertisement will cost considerable amount of money. In order to make profit(s), companies have to guarantee the consistently high quality of their product(s). Otherwise, when customs try their product(s) for the first time but find it is(they are) only waste of money, they would have no inclination to buy it again. To some extend, advertisement reflect the quality of the goods and convey information of reliability to the customers which in turns will boost the sale of the product.
还是上面那句话，最后一句作为论点可能会使你的观点更清晰。

The most important function of advertisement is its ability to change people's attitude even customers have their personal preference. For example, my father used to reject microwave oven for many reasons, such as it is not safe and the food cooked by this(it) is not healthy. However, after seeing the advertisement which contains information saying that microwave oven is healthy, safe and convenient, my father accepted and immediately purchase one. As you can see, advertisement indeed can (can indeed) change people's attitude.)

As the reasons I listed above, I believe (that,文章中定于从句的that还是不要省略的好) advertisement plays a(an) essential role when people purchase goods. Because it makes people aware of the product, give customers confidence and can change people's attitude.

其实有时候感觉写的不爽的时候，当写完一段可以回去看看最后一句，往往你会觉得越到后来你的思路越清晰，所以不妨用把最后一句改成ts好了。