ISSUE130 [FF小组]第二次作业---by crazy_calm

crazy_calmUID: 2260690

2楼新添另外一种提纲，请根据需要改文~~~:handshake

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."


提纲：社会的命运是由现在青少年的社会化程度以及综合素质共同决定的，教育需要培养出同时具备高素质和高社会化的人才以促进社会的良性发展。
一、社会化程度为个人水平的发挥准备了一个良好的平台，是社会发展的外在条件。

二、然而社会成员的综合素质为社会发展提供可能性，是社会发展的内在成因。

三、教育需要在这两方面同时做出努力。

结论：未来社会是由现在的孩子所组成的，从某种程度上来说，今天对他们的教育才真正决定了社会的走向。我们并非不清楚教育的目标，只是需要在实施的途径和侧重点上做出调整，使孩子们能够更加平衡的成长。

The statement that society's orientation is determined by the socialized level of children overemphasizes the role of the interpersonal relationship playing in the development of society. As far as I concerned, how children are socialized as well as their comprehensive competence determine the destiny of society as a whole. Thus, education has to cultivate the youth with both good socialization and high quality. The relationship between the two aspects mentioned above has an analogy with the situation in teamwork. Only with good communication but without average good working skills of the team members, little achievement can they make.

Generally speaking, good socialization prepares children for a better adaption of the society and more importantly provides a platform to give a full play for their talents, which makes it an external factor of social development. With good socialization, one could cooperate and communicate with others more efficient. Only after one is well socialized will people get a chance to appreciate his or her inner talent. Nowadays more and more young people choose to participate in certain type of social related work, such as volunteer services or internship. These experiences have enriched their abilities of connecting knowledge and the real job, making a preparation for their jumping into the society after graduation. They will learn how the real society works and what their ideal jobs require for an employee so that they can improve themselves with specific goals.

However, it is the quality of the members of that society that makes the social evolvement possible, which makes it an immanent factor of social development. Such qualities roughly contain two aspects as moral trait and professional skills. Sometimes twist value orientation will lead to serious consequence. Economic crisis happening in America illustrates a vivid example. The crisis results from the credit collapse of the investors. The avaricious investors are certainly well socialized therefore they can sell their mortgages to lots of people by all means with the only consideration of their own benefits, by intentionally concealing all the risk from the buyers. But when the market collapsed, the only victims are the consumers. People with good socialization but lack of moral restriction sometimes jeopardize the society.

In that case, education designed for youth should make effort to develop both of the elements. Admittedly, most recent education has paid tremendous attention to professional skills of students. But lack of moral and social cultivation remains a great problem. Some may insist that schools have taken measures to encourage the students to cooperate with others, but little has been done for students to realize the differences between ivory tower and the real society.

After all, children today constitute the future society. To some extent, how well we educate them truly determines the destiny of society. It is not that we have not yet learned of the purpose of education, nevertheless, we need to take some measures to adjust the approach and emphasis. All the efforts are made to ensure a much more balance growth of younger generation who eventually brings about a better society.

[ 本帖最后由 crazy_calm 于 2008-11-7 20:18 编辑 ]

crazy_calmUID: 2260690

看了wikipedia上的关于socialization的解释之后，对于题目的理解突然有了新的变化。如果真正的socialization包括了人际关系，也包括了个人能力和道德品质，那么自己原来所形成的提纲就是不成立的。苦思一个下午重新列了一个提纲，和北美范文的基本上就是两重天了，我此前也没看到过这种思路，所以改文的同志根据自己的需要选择，觉得上一种保守思想可以接受的话就改那一篇，如果对我第二种理解感兴趣，也不妨帮我看看能不能站住脚，或者要如何再深入。:handshake


提纲：从socialization的定义上来看，社会的命运某种程度上来说的确是由社会成员的社会化程度说决定的，但是不仅仅是由幼年时期的社会化程度来决定。

1、socialization的定义（来自wikipedia）：the process of learning one’s culture and how to live within it. For the individual it provides the skills and habits necessary for acting and participating within their society. For the society, inducting all individual members into its moral norms, attitudes, values, motives, social roles, language and symbols is the ‘means by which social and cultural continuity are attained。

2、诚然，幼年时期的社会化对个人以及社会都有很大的影响。

3、然而，社会化并不因幼年时期的结束而停止。实际上，社会化的过程伴随着人的一生。

4、为了建设一个更好的社会，我们的眼光不能只停留在对年轻一代的教育和培养上。把改良社会的愿望寄予下一代的教育而忽视眼前全体社会成员的社会化，是消极和不恰当的。


这个想法的根本出发点就在于对‘How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society.’的理解上。一般来说我们都把重心放在determine上，于是就找除了社会化以外的因素。但是我看了wikipedia的解释以后，发现其实找到的所有因素都是可以归结到socialization里面的，因此我总是觉得没说到点子上。但是我们如果把重心放在today上，就可以走另外一条路，我把这句话翻译为孩子当下的社会化程度就决定了社会的命运，那就是这句话实际上没用发展的眼光看问题。这样就有了以上的提纲。


The statement that society's orientation is determined by the socialized level of children overemphasizes the socialization formed during one’s childhood. When we say one is well socialized, it means he or she is competent to fit into his or her own society with essential skills and habits. Those basics of adaption include professional ability, moral norms, values, social role and others. To some extent, the socialization of members does determine the society’s destiny, but not children’s alone.

Admittedly, socialization during childhood has a great influence not only on the individual but also on the society. In this level, child learns about proper attitudes, values and actions responding to the world around, also living knowledge and skills all from their parents and friends spontaneously, as well as school education passively. Well socialized children perform better both academically and practically than those who do not. And this advantage may last till they grow up because character formed in childhood is hard to change. One good example is that if the parents highly appreciate punctuality, the child will think it is natural to be punctual for people and continue to have this good habit throughout his whole life. And the opposite is just the same. How children are socialized highly impact their futures.

However, socialization does not end in childhood, or stop without formal education. In fact, socialization happens in various ways and almost every moment in one’s life. When people are grown up, they jump out the schools and into the society where they will realize it is an even big school. They will be busy fitting in a strange environment where certain beliefs or perspective they formed in their childhood have to be altered. Sometimes it goes right, hence personality and abilities of individuals get refined and they accomplish their life with honors and respect. But there are times it goes wrong and result in serious consequence. We have heard about top students in high school end up with nothing when they grow up. Or even innocent and tender child from a decent family becomes a felon in his forties. As a member of the society people are forced to refresh what they have learned before. On the other hand, mass media has more and more become an important factor that socializes individuals, including adults. Media are continually showing pictures of life and models of behavior in advance of real life through numerous critiques and TV dramas. It meets people’s need who will tend to accept the views mass media provides, eventually have his original changes. This is also a socializing process.

In that case, to develop a better society, it seems unfair and negative to just focus on the education and cultivation of younger generation, our children, but ignore that Social evolvement is a continuous procedure which requires a persistent and total refinement for all the members of that society. In my opinion, our efforts devoted to the children’s socialization are sufficient, but it will not put into use unless we prepare a better stage for the children to take the next step. Rather than thinking about what we can do to raise better children, more attention should be paid to adjust all the elements that influent socialization of every individual and give people good guidance for a better life.

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回复#2

1.构思很好,很强大!文笔也不错.不过还有一点小错误.比如,mass media has more and more become an important factor that...  总感觉读着不顺,我的理解是mass media is becoming an increasingly important factor that... ,当然了,也可能是我才疏学浅.

2.如果再阐述一下 what is a better society? 的话, 论证会更完美.

3.你这一篇写了多长时间?

4.继续努力!共勉!

crazy_calmUID: 2260690

嗯，LS改得不错，我自己也觉得那句读着不顺:handshake
至于对better society的定义，我原来是觉得在这种论证结构下，具体什么是better society其实并不影响我的论证，只要知道这是一个目标就好了。因为这实际上只是我论证的一个大前提，是先于论证而存在的。不过我也可以在最后加上一句解释，的确显得更严谨一些。
多谢提意见，大家共勉:handshake

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