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Getting advice from the older friends is more valuable than getting advice from friends at your age. (2007.8.11)

We never remain suspicious of the fact that hunman's minds aremore or less limited since we are all inevitablly influenced by different environment,cultures and customs.Asking advices from our friends can be considered as a efficient method to make up the scarcity of our narrow perspective.Along with this phenomenon rises a debate over whether it is more valuable to get advice from the older friends or those at our age.From my personal angle alone, the former one coinsides with my opinion.

The first reason to support my opinion is about the experience.Admittedly, the senior people suffered much more from the arduous way to grasp the real meaning of life than those young people in twenties.For example,when cooking a fish,assume that it's your firt try,you may wonder how much salt and sugar you should put and when to turn off the fire.If you ask your young friends about all these things,I doubt whether it is a disaster.

Further more,as a young adults,everythig seems fresh to us.We easily take everything for granted,and easily frustrated by the depressed result.At this time ,with the help from older friends,we can broaden the horizon to our life,and know the fact that to breath freely is already the gift of our destiny,then all the trifles bothering us can be neglected and all that we have to do is to enjoy the life itself.Their thrilling experiences,legendary stories and encouraged mottos all help us out from low like a guiging star.

However,we cannot take this asseration too far,for our young friends are also a magnificant treasure through our lifetime.They share the same love and experences with us, thus the recognition from them sometimes comforts us with the feeling that you are not alone in this world anymore.

In conclusion,advices and suggestions from all kinds of friends lead us the way to go through  the hardships.Particularly,older friends' encouragements contribute more to our growth.
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Getting advice from the older friends is more valuable than getting advice from friends at your age. (2007.8.11)

We never remain suspicious(觉得这个用法有点怪怪的~) of the fact that hunman's（human’s） minds are more or less limited since we are all inevitablly(inevitably) influenced by different environments, cultures and customs(background这个词用在这里也不错哦). Asking for advices from our friends can be considered as a efficient method to make up the scarcity of our narrow perspective. Along with this phenomenon rises a debate over whether it is more valuable to get advice from the older friends or those at our age. From my personal angle alone, the former one coinsides(coincides) with my opinion.(第一段中用于拓展题目的笔墨是否太多了呢？好象绕了很大一个圈子才切入正题呢)

The first reason to support my opinion is about the experience. Admittedly（admittedly 这个词一般是用在让步否定吧？）, the senior people suffered much more from the arduous way to grasp the real meaning of life than those young people in twenties. For example, when cooking a fish, assume that it's your firt （first）try, you may wonder how much salt and sugar you should put and when to turn off the fire. If you ask your young friends about all these things, I doubt whether it is a disaster. （感觉这个例子不是很恰当，因为做饭并不需要suffered much more from the arduous way to grasp the real meaning of life呀）
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Further more, as a young adults, everythig（everything） seems fresh to us. We easily take everything for granted, and are easily frustrated by the depressing result. At this time ,with the help from older friends, we can broaden the horizon of our lives, and know the fact that to breath freely is already the gift of our destiny, then all the trifles bothering us can be neglected and all that we have to do is to enjoy the life itself.Their thrilling experiences, legendary stories and encouraged mottos all help us out from low like a guiging(guiding) star。(这段主旨句更明显一点为好)学

However, we cannot take this asseration（assertion）too far, for our young friends are also a magnificant (magnificent) treasure through our lifetime. They share the same love and experiences(experiences) with us, thus the recognition from them sometimes comforts us with the feeling that you are not alone in this world anymore.

In conclusion, advices and suggestions from all kinds of friends lead us the way to go through  the hardships. Particularly ,older friends' encouragements contribute more to our growth.


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