COMEON作文小组------jackallen0714 11月9日作业

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11月9日Agree or disagree: The best way to truly relax and reduce stress is to spend time alone.(2007.9.25)

Everyday we suffer great pressure from work, study and other directions which make us unable to enjoy our life. Finding a proper way to relieve this mental tension is rather necessary. When I hear people claiming the best way to truly relax and reduce stress is by spending time alone, I am really amazed. I believe spending time with a group of people will be much more better.

Firstly, when people get together, they can get information come from other people. From exchanging opinions, difficulties and problems which are major source of our pressure can easily get solved. For example, when students have questions come from homework and feel depressed, the most effective solution is discussing with their classmates or teachers. Similarly, meeting troubles and difficulties in works, holding a group meeting to find the trouble will be fairly effective. Since individual's ability and knowledge is limited, it is more wiser to face adverse situation together with other people.

Another reason for my inclination it that spending time alone is rather dangerous. Especially when people's emotion is occupied with depressed feeling. There is no outlet for them to convey the negative emotion, therefore, it is quite easy that they go extremes and do harmful deed to themself as well as to the society. Involving in groups will help them get out of the dead end and discover a broader world.

Moreover, people can share their joy when they spend time together. We often hear people saying when joy is shared, it becomes double. Many people choose music concert or other group activities to relax themself. Because from sharing different points of view with other people, individuals are emotional connected. They can feel the warm of the group and thus achieve greater sense of happiness. In this manner, people can achieve truly relax and effectively enjoy their life.

Admittedly, people need private time to adjust their emotion. However, sharing with others can benefit this adaptation process. Therefore, I am always pleased to spend time with my friends and families, and I do not hesitate to find help from other people whenever in adverse situation.

[ 本帖最后由 jackallen0714 于 2008-11-9 23:17 编辑 ]

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Everyday we suffer great pressure from(可以这样用么？) work, study and other directions which make us unable to enjoy our life. Finding a proper way to relieve this mental tension is rather necessary. When I hear people claiming the best way to truly relax and reduce stress is by spending time alone, I am really amazed. I believe spending time with a group of people will be much more better.Firstly, when people get together, they can get information come from other people. From exchanging opinions, difficulties and problems which are major source of our pressure can easily get solved. For example, when students have questions come from homework and feel depressed, the most effective solution is discussing with their classmates or teachers. Similarly, meeting troubles and difficulties in works, holding a group meeting to find the trouble will be fairly effective. Since individual's ability and knowledge is limited, it is more wiser to face adverse situation together with other people.Another reason for my inclination it（去掉IT改成IS） that spending time alone is rather dangerous. Especially when people's emotion is occupied with depressed feeling. There is no outlet for them to convey the negative emotion, therefore, it is quite easy that they go extremes and do harmful deed to themself as well as to the society. Involving in groups will help them get out of the dead end and discover a broader world. 寄托家园d+u*g~%u9X(}~aMoreover, people can share their joy when they spend time together. We often hear people saying when joy is shared, it becomes double. Many people choose music concert or other group activities to relax themself. Because from sharing different points of view with other people, individuals are emotional(emotionally) connected. They can feel the warm of the group and thus achieve greater sense of happiness. In this manner, people can achieve truly relax and effectively enjoy their life.Admittedly, people need private time to adjust their emotion. However, sharing with others can benefit this adaptation process. Therefore, I am always pleased to spend time with my friends and families, and I do not hesitate to find help from other people whenever in adverse situation(if I am in trouble).总体来看，文章写得很好。句子连贯，用词丰富准确。结构工整。论点明确，理由比较充分。但是个人认为， 第一个理由段的例子不太具有说服力。再有， 我建议第二个理由段和能和第三个更换下位置。当然他们的首句的结构不要换。
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