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发表于 2008-11-11 23:47:08 |显示全部楼层
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' ]* g4 E" \9 a! l# |7 LIf we are afraid to reveal our lack of knowledge we will not be able to learn. In order to make progress we must admit where we are now. Such an admission of ignorance is not easy. As Thoreau says, “How can we remember our ignorance which our growth requires, when we are using our knowledge all the time?”0 S+ _2 j6 y- `# ~2 Z
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Does the present system of education encourage us to admit our lack of knowledge, or is there too much pressure to demonstrate the acquisition of knowledge? Plan your response...; D: z( O5 @4 P6 h

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+ w7 {- B7 _& d6 e+ GThe education systems of most countries are colorful enough to encourage the acquisition of knowledge beyond the textbook. Thus, in many ways, such systems encourage us to admit our ignorance and be willing to pursuit knowledge in a particular field deeper than before.
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$ j' u- R# Q* l2 nEducation systems in certain countries enable us to specialize in certain disciplines at earlier stages of education, allowing us to choose our major even before high school students in institutions that offer special courses that require the student to choose from pre-high school. This is likely to set a specialized that we may take up in the future. In various classes and programmes, students are no longer required to take up a lot of subjects, and are asked to opt for a combination of three to four courses. The trend of education nowadays is that such courses offered do not cover the breadth, but emphasizes greatly on depth. This “ depth” of study surely require students to go deeply into the knowledge related to the subject. Such demanding knowledge enquiry is not a “Jack of al trades” will survive in. Here, admission of ignorance is the key to opening up a large pool of knowledge. We will fail if we are going to study the surface value of these demanding subjects and just act knowledgeable. To admit that we lack the deeper understanding and knowledge definitely help us survive in such specialized programmes.
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; ]; R1 h- n6 ?! uStudents are also required to take up much more project work, write major research paper every year and complete many term papers in an academic year. In project work, we need to admit what we do not know in certain required fields, and in this way necessary help will come group members. In the tedious research process and write up of our papers, one can never solo the work and not admit ignorance to get the help from our mentors. The interesting trend now is that more and more courses require their students to take up such research work at a much early stage of education.2 Y; {; H3 V9 c; G" t9 ^# q2 j

# a: ^( M2 T. r! }" M; D: \Thus, in view of how the present education system and how it is developing, we no longer can study independently and claim that we know everything in subjects. We start to realize now that we can never really master everything in subjects, as subjects now demand much deeper enquiry and understanding. Thus we need to admit our lack of understanding and knowledge to get the required help to great extents in order to secure a distinction or even a pass.
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发表于 2008-11-11 23:52:25 |显示全部楼层
坚持就是胜利2 F1 n3 j/ f* h3 b9 \! V
加油!
4 b. `* ~$ D8 z7 |' P6 O字数尽量保持在450左右;d: 8 B: z0 C0 H- @  o, q; X

2 A9 e# e$ N9 A/ D- B2 e, P过会加分,今天加分到上限了:)
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发表于 2008-11-12 22:35:10 |显示全部楼层
谢谢冰棒给的大拇指!- l. c5 I. m9 h5 K* w* v$ \

* v8 a: A  a8 X% G  L今天突然感觉我有点象街头“艺人”,虽然唱的不太好,但还是很期待几个铜板的:) 1 H1 H1 ^) x) G+ F4 r  Q

$ M' n4 R/ ^' T4 Y. p! L$ W$ X- Y如果冰棒口袋里有6个铜板,根据我的SAT Essay和评分标准,愿意给我几个铜板啊?2 g" V3 a3 {6 z1 Y6 {7 |. ]4 r- [

+ G* [, a) x: C8 c5 s' g% L[ 本帖最后由 topgoer 于 2008-11-12 22:47 编辑 ]

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嘿嘿~4个吧;d:2 L/ Y- H8 t* c

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发表于 2008-11-12 23:00:43 |显示全部楼层
呵呵,今天终于收获了4个铜板, 谢谢了!& X8 l6 ?+ ~$ T
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我继续当我的街头“艺人” :)

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:loveliness: 加油
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发表于 2008-11-16 11:31:21 |显示全部楼层
cool stuff,anyway i personally thinku need to be more specific, use a specific example with more details... keep it up

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发表于 2008-11-17 01:29:45 |显示全部楼层
谢谢指导!

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发表于 2008-11-18 19:13:03 |显示全部楼层
冰棒,字数超了会加分,那不是多多益善吗?

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我觉得在保证质量的情况下(逻辑清晰,突出主题,有理论证)字数多些,写的漂亮些,间距掌握好的话:o - @3 ]. M; T( H# j* c0 c
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