comeon作文小组——noramfa 11月16日作业

noramfaUID: 2571416

148) Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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进步总是好的，同意与否？（185，技术与进步类）寄托家园
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  At the mercy of ever-accerlerated updating of scinece and technology development,the issue of whether progress is always exert a positvie impact to society as a whole is soaring by the day. When facing with this dilima,people’s idea is cut from different cloths.Most people argee that humanbeings progress has taken great negative effect on the earth,they base their argument on the ground that serious problem ,such a s tendcy of animals species decline,unblanced ecosystem and gene clone issue  is due to mankinds progress.Yet other people react this problem the other way around and holds that progress play a cruial part role in mankinds culture develpment and all these problem may solved by releative laws and powerful goverment policy.After taken every aspect into deliberation,personally speaking,i am of the point that all the progress rise disadvantages far outweight  advantages in the last centuary.In the following,i will try to make my position clear.
  At the begining,i should admit that the development of scinece and biological trigger a positive power to our humanbeings.For instance,one authentic reasearch indicate that people’s average lifetime is hover around 80years in the developed country,which is 20years beyound last century.Appericate for the progess in the medical and biological area,various grave disease has been overcome.But it go without saying that,hundreds of animals be the sample and used in the experiment in order to accerlate progress .In addition, the invent of  gene clone and chemical and biological wapon may enforce a new controversail topic with the progress in biological and medical.
  In other words,as take the reins of science knowledge,humanbeings has leap a mighty step in the ourown flourish.Our life caliber elevate a big stage than before.For example.,with the invent of electirc,we may stay in the warm room with the air condition when there is chilly out of the house.Utilizing petroleum also supply plane and ship circulate,the transport form country to country is effectively than thousands years ago.we relish purchase goods produced in diefferent area in a department.But no oen can deny that the explore of the enery has engender a huge number of animals lost their niche,and this numer is increasing.An reletive reprot in the china daily mentions that more than 3 species of animal diappeared in every 2 days/Thus,the act of looting energy may unblanace the eviroment of enimals and danger the habitate for they living.
  From what has been dissussed above,it is reasonalbe to believe that humanbeings progress has take more obvious disadvantages but not advantages,as the master of the world,every country goverment have the right to establish accordingly laws to control the negative impact strenthen,humanbeings should balance the development of science and safeguard of eviroment as a  whole.


[ 本帖最后由 noramfa 于 2008-11-17 13:02 编辑 ]

kwenfengUID: 2416423

按comeon的规则是我修改吧？这几天工作比较多，我尽快搞定，请别介意:handshake

noramfaUID: 2571416

en!好的!:)

kwenfengUID: 2416423

At the mercy of ever-accerlerated updating development of scinece（science） and technology （development提前是否更好）, the issue of whether progress is always exert a positvie (positive) impact to（on）society as a whole is soaring by the day. When facing with this dilima,people’s ideas is(are) cut from different cloths. Most people argee(agree) that human beings progress has taken great negative effect on the earth, they base their argument on the ground that serious problem ,such as tendcy(trendy) of animals species decline, unblanced(unbalanced) ecosystem and gene clone issue  is(去掉is) due to mankind progress. Yet other people react this problem the other way around and hold that progress plays a cruial（crucial）part role（part 和 role取其一）in mankinds（是否有复数，不确定） culture development and all these problems may be solved by releative（relative） laws and powerful government policy. After taken（taking） every aspect into deliberation, personally speaking, I am of the point（？） that all the progress rise disadvantages（宜为the disadvantages caused by the progress） far outweight（outweigh）  advantages in the last centuary（century）.In the following, i will try to make my position clearly.

At the beginning, i should admit that the development of scinece and biological triggers a positive power to our human beings. For instance, one authentic reasearch indicates that people’s average lifetime is hover around 80years in the developed country, which is 20years beyound last century. Appericate（是appreciate吗？） for(有这种用法吗) the progess in the medical and biological area, various grave diseases has been overcome. But it goes without saying that（这句话翻译过来是理所当然，好像不适合这里的前后衔接）, hundreds of animals be the sample and used in the experiment in order to accerlate the progress .In addition, the invention of gene clone and chemical and biological wapon may enforce a new controversail topic with the progress in biological（biology）and medical（medicine）.


In other words(这里最好不要用这个词组表示你的第二个观点，因为可能让人感觉你在重复以上的观点), as taking the reins of science knowledge, human beings have leaped a mighty step in the ourown flourish(?).Our life(lives) caliber elevate a big stage than before. For example, with the invent of electric(electricity), we may stay in the warm room with the air condition when there（it） is chilly out of （宜outside？）the house. Utilizing （of）petroleum also supplys plane and ship circulate（感觉此句的意思不怎么通畅，是指石油的利用供给飞机、轮船能源吗？if so，you could say that’Utilizing of petroleum also makes plane and ship run’）, the transport from country to country is (more) effective than that thousands years ago. we relish purchase goods produced in diefferent area in a department. But no oen can deny that the explore of the enery has engender a huge (可在此处加上increasingly代替后面的分句) number of animals lost their niche, and this numer is increasing. A reletive reprot in the China Daily mentions that more than 3 species of animal diappeared（are disappearing） in every 2 days/Thus,the act of looting energy may unblanace the eviroment of enimals and danger the habitate for(where) they are living.

From what has been dissussed above, it is reasonalbe to believe that the progress made by human beings has take more obvious disadvantages but not advantages, as the master of the world, every country goverment have the right to establish accordingly laws to control the negative impact strengthen(?), human beings should balance the development of science and safeguard of eviroment as a  whole.


看Lz的用辞想必是经历了g的吧，但是较多单词的拼写错误以及主谓的前后不一致影响了文章的整体效果，部分地方我只是用红色突出，希望lz逐步改正。由于这些方面的扣分实在是可惜。
文章的每个观点有较充实的发展，但给人感觉不够清晰，可能是由于词汇和小的语法错误造成的。Lz除了表明环境上的负面影响以外，还可扩充一下观点，如progress对人们的日常生活造成了什么不利影响。
由于本人水平很有限，对于文中部分词组的用法不敢妄下结论，若我在改正过程中犯有错误，还望lz多多指正。

[ 本帖最后由 kwenfeng 于 2008-11-17 19:42 编辑 ]

kwenfengUID: 2416423

在回复框里还能看到红色的，怎么一贴出来就全是黑的了，不好意思，lz要慢慢看了

noramfaUID: 2571416

谢谢楼上的！　不看不知道０．０　好多拼写错误阿～～～　看来真实考的时候一定要留点时间检查拼写　　
改的很详细，　对我很有帮助！