COMEON作文小组------kwenfeng 11月16日作业

kwenfengUID: 2416423

11月16日

148) Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

进步总是好的，同意与否？（185，技术与进步类）

As the technology is being improved strikingly and the civilization is progressing without cease, the human life is becoming more and more comfortable and convenient. We could travel around the world within a couple days by plane, we could communicate with our friends lived in the opposite of the earth, and we could enter into the space to explore the Moon and the Mars or dive under the water to talk to the creatures living at the bottom of the ocean. Most things that seemed unrealistic previously do happen at present through the modern technology. Nevertheless, the technology is gradually undermining the normal human activity and the natural environment.
First of all, the development of the technology is always at the expenses of sacrificing the environment of our surroundings. Nowadays, it is drastically apparent that our rivers, air and the earth are being significantly polluted by the continual exploitation of human beings. Most of the rivers are no more suitable for drinking since plenty of industrial effluents disposed directly into the water, and because of the gas emitted into the atmosphere by the increasing number of automobiles, the air has turned unhealthy and noxious. We could see such news in television and on the internet, or hear them from the radio as the global temperature is rising every year and the glaciers are melting severely. As a result, our descendent would probably never see what the Antarctica looks like.
In addition, the hi-tech would trigger a growing number of hi-tech crimes. As everyone knows, there are more and more offence happened on the internet in the recent years, and majority of such crimes could successfully be cracked. According to a recent survey, the economic loss on account of the loophole on the internet is up to as much as hundreds of millions of RMB in China each year.
Furthermore, it is just the convenience which the technology brings us that makes people lazier and turned the aspects of living style more unhealthy. With the convention of fast transportation, people drive cars or take other vehicles instead of walking. On the other hand, thanks to the television and the internet, people become reluctant to communicate with families and friends in reality.
In conclusion, the technology indeed makes human life more colorful and convenient; yet, we could not but admit that the negative influence owing to the technology outweighs the positive aspects of it.
总是超时，而且严重超时，郁闷

[ 本帖最后由 kwenfeng 于 2008-11-17 13:36 编辑 ]

woaichixiguaUID: 2450470

11月16日

148) Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

进步总是好的，同意与否？（185，技术与进步类）

As the technology is being improved strikingly and the civilization is progressing without cease/ceaselessly, the human life is becoming more and more comfortable and convenient. We could travel around the world within a couple days by plane, we could communicate with our friends lived in the opposite of the earth, and we could enter into the space to explore the Moon and the Mars or dive under the water to talk to the creatures living at the bottom of the ocean. Most things that seemed unrealistic previously do happen at present through the modern technology. Nevertheless, the technology is gradually undermining the normal human activity and the natural environment.fRr ku&{9^

First of all, the development of the technology is always at the expenses of sacrificing the environment of our surroundings. Nowadays, it is drastically apparent that our rivers, air and the earth are being significantly polluted by the continual exploitation of human beings. Most of the rivers are no more suitable for drinking since plenty of industrial effluents disposed directly into the water, and because of the gas emitted into the atmosphere by the increasing number of automobiles, the air has turned unhealthy and noxious. We could see such news in television and on the internet, or hear them from the radio as the global temperature is rising every year and the glaciers are melting severely. As a result, our descendent would probably never see what the Antarctica looks like.寄托家园A-}!Ee`

In addition, the hi-tech would trigger a growing number of hi-tech crimes. As everyone knows, there are more and more offence happened on the internet in the recent years, and majority of such crimes could successfully be cracked. According to a recent survey, the economic loss on account of the loophole on the internet is up to as much as hundreds of millions of RMB in China each year.*X8?sQv8V

Furthermore, it is just the convenience which the technology brings us that makes people lazier and turned the aspects of living style more unhealthy. With the convention of fast transportation, people drive cars or take other vehicles instead of walking. On the other hand, thanks to the television and the internet, people become reluctant to communicate with families and friends in reality.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE
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In conclusion, the technology indeed makes human life more colorful and convenient; yet, we could not but admit that the negative influence owing to the technology outweighs the positive aspects of it.

我觉得LZ写得挺好的，这篇我自己没有写过,所以也不是特别好评价,不过三段层层深入的写法很值得学习
就是觉得LZ的开头有点太长了，结尾有有点太短了 留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国

kwenfengUID: 2416423

:handshake 多谢指导~
其实我的写作技巧比较单一，基本就是这样，很模板化，而且很难展开，举例较少，必须加大训练量。
请问有什么好的建议总结全文吗