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Should people be allowed to use mobile phone in public transportation or not? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

It is a controversial issue whether people should be allowed to use mobile phones in public transportation. Mobile phone, as a specific product of new technologies, makes our lives much more convenient and connects people more tightly than before. As far as I am concerned, mobile phone should not be prohibited in public transportation because of following reasons.

Firstly, using mobile phone on public transportation could be a good way to kill time. Needless to say, taking public transportation might be a boring process, because there is no one to talk with, which would make us anxious and have detrimental effect on our health. If I can talk with my friends about some funny stories during work time on public transportation, it would be advantageous to my well-being and strengthen our friendship as well. Moreover, I could accomplish work during this time on public transportation, such as discussing the feasibility of a new proposal or distributing tasks. It definitely saves me lots of time; thus I would have more time to spend with my family.

The popularity of mobile phone makes each other within touch at anytime, and then prevents us from missing some crucial occasions. If mobile phone is prohibited in public transportation, it might mean that our rights of being informed of opportunities would be deprived. I remember once I was on bus, and my favorite company called me that they would like to give me an interview; finally, I got that important position. If I had had not been allowed to use my cell phone on bus, I could have missed this job. Using mobile phone in public transportation would bring about chances, some could be life-changing; thus, mobile phone should not be prohibited in public transportation.

Admittedly, someone argue that using mobile phone in public transportation would encroach on their rights and make the public surroundings noisy. However, compared with the advantages using mobile could bring about, such as helping us kill time and save time, preventing us from missing precious opportunities in public transportation, the disadvantages are definitely insignificant. Therefore, mobile phone should be allowed in public transportation.

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It is a controversial issue whether people should be allowed to use mobile phones in public transportation. Mobile phone, as a specific (? 不是很确定想表达什么..) product of new technologies, makes our lives much more convenient (很多次看到同样的说法了..a convenient life这种说法很诡异，而且也不等于an easy life..) and connects people more tightly than before. As far as I am concerned, mobile phones should not be prohibited in public transportation because of the following reasons.

Firstly, using mobile phones on public transportation could be a good way to kill time (这个词不是很正面，可以换成spend time more fruitfully). Needless to say, taking public transportation might be a boring process, because there is no one to talk with, which would make us anxious and have detrimental effects on our health. If I can talk with my friends about some funny stories during work time on public transportation (you mean, over a mobile phone?), it would be advantageous to my well-being and strengthen our friendship as well. Moreover, I could accomplish work during this time on public transportation, such as discussing the feasibility of a new proposal or distributing tasks. It definitely saves me lots of time; thus I would have more time to spend with my family.

The popularity of mobile phones makes (虽然make是一个万金油单词，也不应该不管通顺与否都用，而且表意如果不完整，更读不顺...enable each other to stay within touch) each other within touch at anytime, and then (and then连用是口语化的用法，正式写作请避免) prevents us from missing some crucial occasions. If mobile phones is are prohibited in public transportation, it might mean that our rights of being informed of opportunities would be deprived. I remember once I was on a bus, and my favorite company called me that they would like to give me an interview; finally, I got that important position. If I had had not been allowed to use my cell phone on the bus, I could have missed this job. Using mobile phones in public transportation would bring about chances, some could be life-changing; thus, mobile phones should not be prohibited in public transportation.

Admittedly, someone may argue that using mobile phones in public transportation would encroach on their rights and make the public surroundings noisy. However, compared with the advantages using mobiles could bring about, such as helping us to kill time and save time, preventing us from missing precious opportunities while in public transportation (如果不用while的话，就变成opportrunities是关于public transportation的机会了..), the disadvantages are definitely insignificant. Therefore, mobile phones should be allowed in public transportation.

总结：

这篇写得不错，逻辑很清晰，语言上也没有很大的问题，主要是需要继续加强词汇的应用，特别是对于make什么什么类似结构的变化 (改过很多篇都有这个问题，为何大家都很喜欢用make呢？至今百思不得其解)。。