【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】12月11日作业 by达达

达达摩摩UID: 2499908

2007.5.19
题目：Do you think teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders?

       

       In resent years， teachers became more and moreimportant to our life . How does the teachers Should the teachers be paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders? Most people claim that this phenomenon result from teachers should pay lower than doctors, lawyers, and business leader.  However, some people share the view that they fairly benefit from teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders. As far as I am concerned, the more and more since teachers are became more and more important to  our lives, to pay them as much as doctors will) do more good than harm to people's happiness.

       Firstly，among the advantages of teachers should paid as much as doctors , lawyers, and business leaders . This is because teachers teach us many kinds of knowledge, knowledge is priceless. These knowledge along with our life. We may quote a common example of when we study at high school, so many teachers teaches us a lot of basement science knowledge, so far we also use this knowledge in our life. The situation is not isolated in our life, it is typical of dozens.

       Without doubt, teachers teach us many kinds of priceless knowledge, and it also along with our life .This is not the single point to uphold my opinion. A lot of teachers training celebrities also play an important role in the whole world. For instance, Steven Jobs is the American computer tycoon and cofounder and CEO of Apple Computer. He also studied in the school and learns from his teachers. To the familiar facts abundant further examples may be added.

       Third, the hard work of our teacher education , so many of teachers are so tired , for example , when I was in high school , I had many classes and left school was late , but teachers were the last one left school .So in my opinion teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders.

        In conclusion, they can not compete with the benefits that teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders brings about, if teachers teach us many kinds of priceless knowledge. A lot of teachers training celebrities also play an important role in the whole world are taken into consideration. And I believe if we pay more attention to teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders will bring more merits to our society.

nickey0809UID: 2349468

How does the teachers？？
this phenomenon 指的是
the more and more since teachers are became more and more important to  our lives, ？？？？
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共同努力

xiaojing1115UID: 2578357

In resent years， teachers became more and more important to(in) our life . How does(改成should不能用how does)the teachers Should （should删除） the teachers be paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders? Most people claim that this phenomenon result from teachers(TEACHER's low salary).  However, some people share the view that they fairly benefit from teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders. As far as I am concerned, the more and more since teachers are became more and more important to  our lives, to pay them as much as doctors will) do more good than harm to people's happiness.

Firstly，among the advantages of teachers should（除should）paid as much as doctors , lawyers, and business leaders（看不懂） . This is because teachers teach us many kinds of knowledge, knowledge is priceless. These knowledge along with our life. We may quote a common example of when we study at high school, so many teachers teaches us a lot of basement science knowledge, so far we also use this knowledge in our life. The situation is not isolated in our life, it is typical of dozens.

Without doubt, teachers teach us many kinds of priceless knowledge, and it （is）also along with our life .This is not the single point to uphold my opinion. A lot of teachers training celebrities also play an important role in the whole world. For instance, Steven Jobs is the American computer tycoon and cofounder and CEO of Apple Computer. He also studied in the school and learns from his teachers. To the familiar facts abundant further examples may be added.

       Third, the hard work of our teacher education , so many of teachers are so tired , for example , when I was in high school , I had many classes and left school was late , but teachers were the last one left school .So in my opinion teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders.

In conclusion, they can not compete with the benefits that teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders brings about, if teachers teach us many kinds of priceless knowledge. A lot of teachers training celebrities also play an important role in the whole world are taken into consideration. And I believe if we pay more attention to teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders will bring more merits to our society。
建议你把作文复制到word里先看看，好多语法错误，加油，多看看范文

[ 本帖最后由 xiaojing1115 于 2008-12-11 22:42 编辑 ]

闹闹喵UID: 2500331

In resent years， teachers became more and more important to our life . How does the teachers Should the teachers:confused: 这里看不懂 be paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders? Most people claim that this phenomenon result from teachers should pay lower than doctors, lawyers, and business leader.  However, some people share the view that they fairly benefit from teachers so the teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders. As far as I am concerned, the more and more<——删掉 since teachers are became more and more important to  our lives,这里和第一句重了，可以考虑删掉其中一个 to pay them as much as doctors will do more good than harm to people's happiness.

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       Firstly，among the advantages of teachers should paid as much as doctors , lawyers, and business leaders 这一句没有主语. This is because teachers teach us many kinds of knowledge, knowledge is priceless. These knowledge along with last long in our life. We may quote a common example of when we study at high school, so many teachers teaches us a lot of basement science knowledge, so far we also use this knowledge in our life. The situation is not isolated in our life, it is typical of dozens.

     Without doubt, teachers teach us many kinds of priceless knowledge, and it also along with our life .This is not the single point to uphold my opinion. A lot of teachers training celebrities also play an important role in the whole world. For instance, Steven Jobs is the American computer tycoon and cofounder and CEO of Apple Computer. He also studied in the school and learns from his teachers. To the familiar facts abundant further examples may be added.(例子不够典型) 寄托家园W
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       Thirdly, the hard work of our teacher education删掉 , so many of 删掉teachers are so tired , for example , when I was in high school , I had many classes and left school was late , but teachers were the last one left school .So in my opinion teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders.这个不能构成理由，劳累度如果能和工资成正比那矿工应该能赚很多 这个不呢个
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In conclusion, they can not compete with the benefits that teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders brings about, if teachers teach us many kinds of priceless knowledge. A lot of teachers training celebrities also play an important role in the whole world are taken into consideration. And I believe if we pay more attention to teachers should paid as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders will bring more merits to our society.

还是和上次一样的问题。建议你多看好文章，多背诵段落，你写作文限时吗？如果不急着考试可以先试试不限时写作文，写的时候注意自己的措辞，让思想能够流畅的表达出来。熟练之后再限时也不迟

达达摩摩UID: 2499908

限时的 恩恩恩 再看范文 就是还没有输入到自己的脑子里......
谢谢大家.....

d596086UID: 2522476

文章有点乱，主题句不够完整，例子有点偏
这个题目在于payment的上，那么就是说教师工资少，为什么少？为什么应该和那些职业pay一样多？教师工作的价值在哪里，和别的职业比较如何？
从这些方面下手比较好

文章开始写，从结构上把握好，然后力保自己观点写的完整明确，最后再从语言（句子多样性上）提高

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