task 2，写写写！希望能互相修改，谢谢！

akuang2006UID: 2236135

Cambridge IELTS 3
Testing 2
Writing task 2
When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.

People’s life way and technical skills are influenced by the development of technology. However, it is biased to conclude that traditional skills or ways of life are no longer needed in modern society.

First of all, the advancement of human society is a process with evolution in many aspects, including ways of life or culture of living. Such process, to some extent, is unavoidably. In early human society, people had little tools and kills to feed themselves and defeat invading foreigners, therefore, they were inclined to living on groups. With the increase ability of surviving, people chose to live by family unit. This is a simple example for change in life style. However, it is rather a process of evolution than a process of dying out. Either living in groups or in families, people are still social ones in nature. People prefer to communicate and share life experiences in many ways, and nearly no one would choose to live on a solitary island himself or herself even if all living necessities are available.

Secondly, the technology advancement is always built on the gradual improvement of previous technical skills. For simple example in today, the internet technology would never appear without the development of computer, digital communication, and optical fiber technologies, which also followed with a series of previous technologies. Technology development is more like an improved heritage of traditional technologies or skills than an abandoning process.

Thirdly, some new technologies endow traditional living ways and traditional professions fresh contents. For example, in Chinese traditional Spring Festival, people used to ignite fireworks to celebrate the coming of a new year. Now, to protect environment, more and more people choose to colorful lasers to make joyful atmosphere instead of traditional fireworks. Also in most Chinese traditional field of Chinese drawing, in the past, people used ink to draw, while now modern 3D technologies are tried to sketch traditional landscapes. Technologies bring fantastic experiences in many traditional fields.

To conclude, development of new technologies is not obstacle of traditional cultures or ways of life, although it sometimes influences concrete contents of cultures. And traditional technologies and skills have their own evolution process, often promoting new technologies.   

gringoireUID: 2221541

这文的行文很顺畅，但我感觉有点偏题。也就是逻辑结构问题。

感觉题目不完整。但是作者分析的实际是传统和现代技术的兼容性。。。而不是传统技术又没有SURVIVE的价值。。。（这个问题当然要看完整题目才知道是不是真偏了 ）

但更显然的逻辑问题出现在第一段。。

第一段，似乎没有论题。。。　作者开始分析技术的进步是继承的。。　但是，作者没有把这个事实和整个文章的论点联系起来。。。基本让人看得一头雾水，不知道你的ＰＯＩＮＴ是什么。。。

总之我觉得这文的观点（总观点和分观点）都有点模糊，逻辑联系也不清晰。浪费了优美的语言。。。

饱饭仔UID: 2505959

这个题目确实出得有点不好说,当年准备雅思的时候觉得这个题目究竟是要做争议写呢,还是要阐述原因
不过,楼主的文笔还是不错,不如下次找个典型的题目再发上大作一篇,如何?
楼主你善于找例子,这个很好啊.让人觉得文章比较饱满