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绿草茵茵UID: 2471736

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题目：Do drivers have to pay a fee for driving in busy city streets when traffic is in a great amount

Due to the development of modern trasportations, life has become more and more convenient. However, at the same
time, most of us have to face a big problem that is traffic jam caused by too many cars. There are several methods to
deal with it, in my opinion, drivers paying a fee for driving in busy city streets is one of the best ways. The following
statements will support my point.

The first and most important reason is that extra money will need to hire more policemen and related staffs organizing
traffic circulation. Of course, this fare will be shouldered by the car driver. Moreover, new roads and streets may be
required to build for the constant increase of cars, we have to consider where money come from? Obviously, the car
driver should pay for these.

The second reason is that the car driver should have an responsibility for traffic jam, paying some money for common
people who spend more time going to work or going home. Too many cars in the street easily cause traffic problems,
most of common people have to wait for longer time in their daily life. Even though there is not traffic problem, most
people have to waste more time on their way home or to work because of the expansion of car.

In addition, exhausting gas let by cars is one of causes for air pollution. Air pollution indeed, has become more and more
serious problem. Our feeling can fair tell us that air is less fresh than several years ago without any surveys. Just because of air pollution aroused by cars, many countries have established strict standards for car emissions. Therefore, these car
drivers should be charged with air pollution.

In conclusion, the car drivers should pay a fee for drving in busy city streets, because they should answer for the direct
result caused by their cars, including extra money will be required to hire staffs to organize traffic circulation, some fee
will be compensated for common people whose time has been wasted by traffic jam as well as some fare will need to
pay for air pollution.

[ 本帖最后由 绿草茵茵 于 2008-12-14 18:34 编辑 ]

mpromanusUID: 2565872

Due to the development of modern transportations, life has become more and more convenient. However, at the same time, most of us have to face a big problem, that is traffic jam caused by too many cars. There are several methods to deal with it. in my opinion, drivers paying a fee for driving in busy city streets is one of the best ways. (The question is whether drivers HAVE TO pay this fee WHEN THE ROADS ARE BUSY, i.e. whether this fee needs to be compulsory at certain times and places and why, not whether this is the best method to deal with traffic jams and why. Do you see the difference? You need to address the question, and ONLY the question, directly.) The following statements will support my point.

The first and most important reason is that extra money will be needed to hire more policemen and related staffs organizing traffic circulation (Traffic is not something you can 'organize'. The word is 'regulate'.). Of course, this fare will be shouldered by the car drivers (and why is that? Why must only car drivers pay for this cost? Pedestrians, bus drivers and cyclers use the roads as well, why not charge them too? I don't see where your 'of course' comes from.). Moreover, new roads and streets may be required to build for to accomodate the constant increase of number of cars. we have to consider where money comes from. Obviously, the car drivers should pay for these. (Same question. The number of cars increase but so do numbers of other vehicles. Why do you only penalize the car drivers? I don't see any strong reason here.)

The second reason is that the car drivers should be responsible for traffic jams, paying some money for common people (Do you mean public transport users, or everybody? This sounds like you do not consider car drivers to be 'common people' - which is definitely not the case in the United States. I understand that car drivers are often seen as elite and privileged in China, but in the US, cars are as common as bicycles are in China, and car drivers are definitely considered typical, common Americans.) who spend more time going to work or going home. Too many cars in the street easily cause traffic problems. most of common people have to wait for longer time in their daily lives (I don't really get your logic. Don't car drivers have to wait in traffic jams as everybody else does? If everybody has to wait in traffic jams, why do you think that 'common people' wait for longer than car drivers do?). Even though there is not traffic problem, most people have to waste more time on their way home or to work because of the increasing number of expansion of cars. (Again, I don't get your logic. Why are you blaming cars for slowing down 'common people'? Cars jam up the roads, yes, but so do buses, bicycles and motocycles - why are you not blaming them? When there are traffic jams, 'common people' can opt for subways and rails, but car drivers have to sit in their cars waiting in the jams, so who's wasting time then? It comes down to this question: is a increasing number of cars the REAL reason that people, on average, have to spend more time commuting in public transport?)

In addition, exhausting gas let by cars is one of the causes for of air pollution. Air pollution indeed, has become more and more serious problem. Our feelings (If you feel fresh air, that's called a 'sense', not a 'feeling'.) can fairly tell us that air (Where? I understand this is a widespread problem but don't assume it just occurs anywhere.) is less fresh than several years ago without any surveys. Just because of air pollution aroused (I would avoid this 'passionate' word unless absolutely necessary. A simple 'caused' will serve you better). by cars, many countries have established strict standards for car emissions. Therefore, these car drivers should be charged with for air pollution.

In conclusion, the car drivers should pay a fee for drving in busy city streets, because they should answer for the direct results caused by their cars, including extra money will be required to hire staffs to organize traffic circulation, some fee will be compensation for common people whose time has been wasted by traffic jam as well as some fare will need to payment for clearning up? air pollution.

总结：

语言方面有些不地道，比如没有fee pay for xxx这种用法，只有xxx pay fee for xxx，因为fee是不会自己pay自己的。。不过更重要的问题是，很抱歉地说，你把题目理解错了。。题目问的其实是在 交通高峰时段 使用 拥挤的城市道路 该不该交钱。。也就是说 如果不是高峰时段，不是城市道路，开车上路是不用给钱的。。题目不是问你应不应该规定要开车就得交钱。。这个题目的背景是有来由的，而且有个专门词组，叫做congestion pricing..前段时间伦敦就在为这个繁忙时段汽车进伦敦城区该不该收钱的问题吵了很久。。现在实行这种做法的城市只有几个，但是对于控制高峰时段车流量的效果显而易见，所以才会成为有讨论价值的题目。从实际操作的角度来说，开车就要交钱的政策基本是行不通的，买车买油保险还有养车本身已经是一笔经年累月的大支出，再要不停地收上路钱，开车的成本提得太高，没人开车，公共交通系统更不堪重负了，没人买车，经济更刺激不起来了。。