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kwenfengUID: 2416423

In university, students should take the history courses no matter what field they study in. agree or disagree？

As we all know, there are an increasing number of subjects of different kinds in university, including science, engineering, arts, music and so on. Most of students choose the major that they are interested in or that would help them get a good job easily, however, no matter what major we study in, we should take the history class as a compulsory course.
First of all, the knowledge of history could affect every aspect of every person in this society. History is a mirror from which not only could we see what we look like now, but also we could see what we will like in the future. Through summarizing experiences from our ancients, we could prevent ourselves from making the same mistakes that our ancients made, at the same time, by learning specious skills of predecessor in history that they left behind for us, we could reach our attainment more quickly and easily. Moreover, most of the wise emperors in Chinese history knew about the importance of history, so every time before they were going to make a decision, they would look back on the approximate event in order to make sure that the decision would not follow the old road to ruin,consequently, under the rule of these emperors, the country were usually in a period of prosperity.
In addition, learning history would make our study life easily and effectively. Almost all of the students bear a heavy burden because of plenty courses and enumerable papers and exams, especially for the students who study science subjects. Therefore, if they took a course related to arts, such as history, it would definitely be a good flavoring after the dull and boring science courses. What’s more, many history stories are so funny that sometimes we could even forget the unpleasant and discomfort things in reality. According to a survey made in top 50 universities in China, the students who take the history as their compulsory or elective course got a 7.8 higher grade in science courses on average than those who do not have take it.
As a result, each university should take a serious into consideration that every students are supposed to study history.

mpromanusUID: 2565872

As we all know, there are is an increasing number of subjects of different kinds in universities, including science, engineering, arts, music (音乐难道不是arts咩? 除非你用art才特指视觉艺术) and so on. Most of students choose the majors that they are interested in or that would help them get a good jobs easily. However, no matter what major we study in, we should take the history class as a compulsory course. (问题是agree or disagree, 所以你最好回答agree or disagree，再说你最后一句话作为具体的agree/disagree的内容，才是一个完整的破题和立论.)

First of all, the knowledge of history could affect every aspect of every person (貌似有些夸大..) in this society. History is a mirror from which not only could we see what we look like now, but also we could see what we will be like in the future. Through summarizing experiences from our ancestors (以下同此处..), we could prevent ourselves from making the same mistakes that our ancients made. At the same time, by learning the specious (? 这可不是个好词，你想用的应该是special吧..) skills of our predecessors in history that they left behind for us, we could reach our attainments (你不能reach attainment，你只能gain attainment. Attainment is something you either 'have' or 'don't have'.) more quickly and easily. Moreover, most of the wise emperors in Chinese history knew about the importance of history, so every time before they were going to make a decision, they would look back on the approximate (Wrong word. Should be 'similar'. 'Approximate' means to be physically or numerically close.) events in order to make sure that the decision would not follow the old road to ruin. Consequently, under the rule of these emperors, the country were usually in a periods of prosperity. (This is well said, but we are talking about history lessons in universities here..where does that stand in this paragraph? 请注意写议论文要切题啊切题)

In addition, learning history would make our studies (of other subjects?) life easily and effectively. Almost all of the students bear a heavy burdens because of plenty courses and enumerable (This is right opposite to what I think you want to express. The word should be 'numerous'.) papers and exams, especially for the students who study science subjects. Therefore, if they take a course related to the arts, such as history, it would definitely be a good flavoring after the dull and boring science courses. (Err..那么本来就是学文的人去学同是文科的历史是不是就没有像理科学生学文那种extra的乐趣了? 那不是正好跟你要论述的论点相反吗?) What’s more, many history stories are so funny that sometimes we could even forget the unpleasant and discomfort things in reality (只是找乐子的话，用不着非得去上历史课吧..?) . According to a survey made in the top 50 universities in China, the students who take the history as their compulsory or elective course got a 7.8 higher grade (美国人不用百分制而用字母，A+, B, B-, 然后转换成5分制的累积平均分 - 俺的意思是通常他们对任何数字大于5的成绩都没有什么认知..) in science courses on average than those who do not have to take it.

As a result, each university should take a serious (what?) into consideration that every students are should be required supposed to study history.

总结：

开头两段还是可以的，到后面越发有写得累的迹象~请尽力保持注意力集中~语言方面有些不地道的地方，另外请注意单复数和高级词汇的正确使用。再强调一次，如果你不能确定100%会用一个很难的词，还不如不要用来得安全 - 按照莫非定律，如果一件事情有可能出错，它就一定会出错，所以如果你知道自己没绝对把握用对一个词，那你就会用错~论述方面请注意每段结尾都需要切题，总结段最好再强调一下主要论点。

kwenfengUID: 2416423

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