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Amber0926UID: 2555355

12.18日作业Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People are busy doing different things that they can do few things well.（2007.3.3）
For most of the time, we are always on the arduous journey in seeking for the answer of this question whether people are busy doing too many things lead to that they can nothing well? There is no an uniform viewpoint to such a question due to different people stand in different angles. A multitude of people live under the illusion that the more tasks are be performed, the better results are be presented. Contrary to the opinion of this people, is my heartfelt agree with that people should concentrate on one job to contribute to achievement.

It goes without saying that we don't have too much energy and time to fulfil numerous things at the same times. For a instance, parents are forever making their child to learn more one or two skills besides those subjects which child have heart from school. The initial thought of parents is enhance child's the all-round development ability and make them to be a prominent people in the future; however, the result of this always reveals opposite. For young people lack of the ability to handle with a diverse of stuffs and too many things cost them a great amount of time and energy lead to they fail to focus on them.

Another obviously point is that whoever suffer various work must be lend to a huge pressure and anxiety to them. In that way, all of factors may be exert an negative influence to them such as being a poor health condition in the end. We can take a glance at a common example, my boss, Mark, who is a talented with the job and can be measured as a outstanding person. Unfortunately, with the various pressure of the work, he fails to continue accomplish so many things in this days and get sick have to stay at home.  Why he is willing to tolerated toil of complete diverse tasks for sacrifice the health and suffer huge pressure is beyond me.

Considerable though the disadvantages that doing different things meanwhile result in are, it doesn't mean that we can turn a blind eye to the advantages of this, when more effective and more efficient is taken into consideration. If someone has enough energy and competence to cope with this situation, performing various things at the same time would be an optimal choice.

Even though there may be one or two merits to handle with different things meanwhile, the disadvantages go beyond them. Based on all the previously stated, we could safely draw the conclusion that people invariably are busy doing different things that they can do few things well.  

xlwxxyUID: 2568970

理由很充分！
不错！

hustly0415UID: 2407456

For most of the time, we are always on the arduous journey in seeking for the answer of this question whether people are busy doing too many things lead to that they can nothing well? There is no an（删去？）uniform viewpoint to such a question due to different people stand in different angles. A multitude of people live under the illusion that the more tasks are be performed（是否有问题？）, the better results are be presented. （赞一个！）Contrary to the opinion of this people, is my heartfelt agree with that people should concentrate on one job to contribute to achievement. 开头讲的很好，句式也用的很不错，用到了一些高级词汇。 _4|C `B dKbbs.gter.net It goes without saying that we don't have too much energy and time to fulfil numerous things at the same times（time？）. For a（a不要吧？） instance, parents are forever making their child to（删去？ Make sb do sth吧）learn more (要不要加个than?) one or two skills besides those subjects which child have heart from school.（感觉这句的语气是不是改一下比较好： besides those subjects which the child have already taken in school.） The initial thought of parents is enhance child's the all-round development ability and make them to be(make sb. do/be 吧。。你查查这个。。) a prominent people in the future(这句我觉得好像可以改成这样的：Their initial thought should be enhance/ensure their child’s all-round development and make them a prominent people in the future); however, the result of this(感觉多余，可以删除) always reveals opposite. For young people lack of the ability to handle with a diverse of stuffs and too many things cost them a great amount of time and energy lead to they fail to focus on them. (这个句子有点乱，感觉，是不是应该修改一哈子？) :MG*QL(\8~bbs.gter.net (Z2O3@~(v(wBi1a.rAnother obviously point is that whoever suffer various work must be lend to a huge pressure and anxiety to them. In that way, all of factors may be(删去)exert an negative influence to them such as being a poor health condition in the end. We can take a glance at a common example, my boss, Mark, who is a（删） talented with the job and can be measured as an outstanding person. Unfortunately, with（under） the various pressure of the work, he fails to continue accomplish so many things in this days and get sick have to stay at home.(像这样的一个句子中有多个动词的，建议在不同的动词后面，分隔开来，层次会更清楚一些。个人建议：Unfortunately, under the various pressure of work, he failed to continue to accomplish so many things in his daily life, get sick and finally, he have to stay at home.) Why he is willing to tolerated toil of complete diverse tasks for sacrifice the health and suffer huge pressure is beyond me.留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA.z7B9m sG ^,_ CrEn1gConsiderable though the disadvantages that doing different things meanwhile result in are, it doesn't mean that we can turn a blind eye to the advantages of this, when more effective and more efficient is taken into consideration. If someone has enough energy and competence to cope with this situation, performing various things at the same time would be an optimal choice.（这段感觉很不错，尤其是开头的倒装句，并且这样一段避免了所谓的观点过于极端，这是我应该学习的地方。） "xU8}!\­AnN o Even though there may be one or two merits to handle with different things meanwhile, the disadvantages go beyond them. Based on all the previously stated, we could safely draw the conclusion that people invariably are busy doing different things that they can do few things well.

个人觉得这篇文章论证很好，不过第二段好像稍微欠缺一点，有很大的篇幅是在举例子。其它几段尤其是第1、4段我个人觉得写得很好，第五段大家估计都差不多（不过我的还没到达这么高的水平，学习~~），就不用说了。

文章当中很注意使用复杂句式和高级词汇，值得我学习。不过，偶尔会有一些小错误，应该注意一下，比如 make的用法。

偶的水平不高，在此大言不惭了，呵呵，勿怪~~


[ 本帖最后由 hustly0415 于 2008-12-19 09:53 编辑 ]

达达摩摩UID: 2499908

For most of the time, we are always on the arduous journey in seeking for the answer of this question whether people are busy doing too many things lead to that they can nothing well? There is no an（有点不对 删掉an）uniform viewpoint to such a question due to different people stand in different angles. A multitude of people live under the illusion that the more tasks are be performed the better results are be presented. Contrary to the opinion of this people, is my heartfelt agree with that people should concentrate on one job to contribute to achievement.
           It goes without saying that we don't have too much energy and time to fulfil numerous things at the same times（time）. For a（a删） instance, parents are forever making their child to（making their child ）learn more  one or two skills besides those subjects which child have heart from school. The initial thought of parents is enhance child's the all-round development ability and make them to be(make them be) a prominent people in the future，however, the result of this always reveals opposite. For young people lack of the ability to handle with a diverse of stuffs and too many things cost them a great amount of time and energy lead to they fail to focus on them. 最后一句没读通......
            Another obviously point is that whoever suffer various work must be lend to a huge pressure and anxiety to them. In that way, all of factors may （be删)exert an negative influence to them such as being a poor health condition in the end. We can take a glance at a common example, my boss, Mark, who is （a删） talented with the job and can be measured as an outstanding person. Unfortunately, （with under the various pressure of the work, he fails to continue accomplish so many things in this days and get sick have to stay at home这句是不是想写长句，但是表达很中式）.Why he is willing to tolerated toil of complete diverse tasks for sacrifice the health and suffer huge pressure is beyond me.
             Considerable though the disadvantages that doing different things meanwhile result in are, it doesn't mean that we can turn a blind eye to the advantages of this, when more effective and more efficient is taken into consideration. If someone has enough energy and competence to cope with this situation, performing various things at the same time would be an optimal choice.
             Even though there may be one or two merits to handle with different things meanwhile, the disadvantages go beyond them. Based on all the previously stated, we could safely draw the conclusion that people invariably are busy doing different things that they can do few things well. 后面的两段不错
同意楼上 make sb.do

Amber0926UID: 2555355

评的很细致，谢谢楼上的