【12月-1月IBT综合备考活动】之【TWE写作】12月20号作业

kaoladedashuUID：2403207

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

It is no denying that the highly developed modern science and technology has made many revolutionary changes in our world over the past years. Thus, it is not hard to imagine that some radical change would also occur related to the books just like books of bamboo were displaced since the advent of paper in ancient China. Consequently, what will be the substitute of printed book? The most possible equivalent is E-book so far. From my point of view, however, it is unfeasible that students will use printed books no longer in the next twenty years from now on, because the printed books still bear a couple of advantages.
First of all, from the perspective of economy, the conventional printed books are more practical than the e-books. Even though the rapid advances in science and technology enable the electronic productions to be more pervasive, under on circumstances will the inputs to produce the device of e-book lower than that of producing printed book within the next twenty years from now on. Moreover, in some region on earth there are a huge amount of children who are homeless and even cannot afford to eat. Education is out of reach for them, not to mention popularization of e-books. Therefore, promoting education for students with relatively low cost is much more pressing.
In addition, the printed book serves as a healthy reading tool. In order to alleviate eyestrains, many publishing companies adjust the color of the paper as well as the font and size of the words to be suitable for reading. Though e-books could also achieve these merits, screen resolution of e-book devices might be lower than actual paper, making it difficult to read e-books. Furthermore, looking at a screen for a long time can result in eye trouble and sometimes headaches. From this point of view, before all these drawbacks of e-books being perfected, the printed book should continue being employed by students.
From discussed above, taking into account the virtues of the printed books, they will not retire from the stage of history in the next twenty years from now on.

无音萧UID：2518358

站个位子。明天中午来改

mpromanusUID：2565872

It is no denying that the highly developed modern science and technologies have made many revolutionary changes in our world over the past years. Thus, it is not hard to imagine that some radical changes would also occur related to the books would also occur, just like books of bamboo scrolls were replaced since the advent of paper in ancient China. Consequently, what will be the substitute of printed books? The most possible equivalent (to what?) is e-book so far. From my point of view, however, it is unfeasible that students will no longer use printed books no longer in the next twenty years from now on, because the printed books still bear a couple of advantages.

First of all, from the perspective of economy, the conventional printed books are more practical than the e-books. Even though the rapid advances in science and technologies enable the electronic productions to be more pervasive (? 电子制造变得普遍和电子产品的价格的联系不是这样的吧? 是制造成本很低，所以制造才普遍，不是制造普遍让成本降低，所以你这里的逻辑很奇怪.), under on circumstances will the inputs to produce the device of e-book devices lower than that of producing printed books within the next twenty years from now on. Moreover, in some regions on earth there are a huge amount (amount通常修饰不可数名词..改用number) of homeless children who are homeless and even cannot even afford to eat. Education is out of reach for them, not to mention popularization of e-books (..他们的确负担不起电子书，但是他们难道负担得起印刷书吗? 两个都负担不起那对他们来说有啥区别撒..). Therefore, promoting education for students with relatively low costs is much more pressing. (是啊，但这跟印刷书不会被电子书取代有啥关系? 而且现在都流行送廉价电脑去支援非洲了耶..)

In addition, the a printed book serves as a healthy reading tool. In order to alleviate eyestrains, many publishing companies adjust the color of the paper as well as the font and size of the words to be suitable for reading. Though e-books could also achieve these merits, screen resolution of e-book devices might be lower than actual paper, making it difficult to read e-books. Furthermore, looking at a screen for a long time can result in eye trouble problems and sometimes headaches (读纸质书读久了也是会眼睛疼头疼的..). From this point of view, before all these drawbacks of e-books being perfected (还有能让缺点更加完美的招式啊?..缺点是用来remedy的..), the printed books should continue to being employed by students.

From what's discussed above, taking into account the virtues of the printed books, they will not retire from the stage of history in the next twenty years from now on.

总结：

基本上没有很大的问题，语言方面请注意单复数 (俺都要变成单复数的祥林嫂啦..) 。另外有些词句的排序也需要注意下。论述方面请记得每段结尾都需要点题，另外第二论点并不很有说服力。

chineseladyUID：2403976

It is no denying that the highly developed modern science and technology has made many revolutionary changes in our world over the past years. Thus, it is not hard to imagine that some radical change would also occur related to the books just like books of bamboo were displaced since the advent of paper in ancient China. Consequently, what will be the substitute of printed book? The most possible equivalent is E-book so far. From my point of view, however, it is unfeasible that students will use printed books no longer in the next twenty years from now on, because the printed books still bear a couple of advantages.

First of all, from the perspective of economy, the conventional printed books are more practical than the e-books. Even though the rapid advances in science and technology enable the electronic productions to be more pervasive, under on circumstances will the inputs to produce the device of e-book lower than that of producing printed book within the next twenty years from now on. Moreover, in some region on earth there are a huge amount of children who are homeless and even cannot afford to eat. Education is out of reach for them, not to mention popularization of e-books. Therefore, promoting education for students with relatively low cost is much more pressing.

In addition, the printed book serves as a healthy reading tool. In order to alleviate eyestrains, many publishing companies adjust the color of the paper as well as the font and size of the words to be suitable for reading. Though e-books could also achieve these merits, screen resolution of e-book devices might be lower than actual paper, making it difficult to read e-books. Furthermore, looking at a screen for a long time can result in eye trouble and sometimes headaches. From this point of view, before all these drawbacks of e-books being perfected, the printed book should continue being employed by students.

From discussed above, taking into account the virtues of the printed books, they will not retire from the stage of history in the next twenty years from now on.

已经有高人点拨了语法哦。LZ的观点和我差不多，个人觉得结尾丰满些就更好了。

无音萧UID：2518358

It is no denying that the highly developed modern science and technology has made many revolutionary changes in our world over the past years. Thus, it is not hard to imagine that some radical change would also occur related to the books just like books of bamboo were displaced since the advent of paper in ancient China. Consequently, what will be the substitute of printed book? The most possible equivalent (用个这个词感觉有点怪，alternative会好些吧）is E-book so far. From my point of view, however, it is unfeasible that students will use printed books no longer in the next twenty years from now on, because the printed books still bear a couple of advantages.

First of all, from the perspective of economy, the conventional printed books are more practical than the e-books. Even though the rapid advances in science and technology enable the electronic productions to be more pervasive, under on circumstances will the inputs（？cost) to produce the device of e-book lower than that of producing printed book within the next twenty years from now on.(太绝对了吧，谁说一定E-book的成本不会低？如果你硬要这么说的话，要给出点论证吧，否则太武断） Moreover, in some region on earth there are a huge amount of children who are homeless and even cannot afford to eat. Education is out of reach for them, not to mention popularization of e-books. Therefore, promoting education for students with relatively low cost is much more pressing.（这一小段不错）

In addition, the printed book serves as a healthy reading tool. In order to alleviate eyestrains, many publishing companies adjust the color of the paper as well as the font and size of the words to be suitable for reading. Though e-books could also achieve these merits（很中国）, screen resolution of e-book devices might be lower than actual paper, making it difficult to read e-books. （这句论证有点勉强哦）Furthermore, looking at a screen for a long time can result in eye trouble and sometimes headaches. From this point of view, before all these drawbacks of e-books being perfected, the printed book should continue being employed by students.

From discussed above, taking into account the virtues of the printed books, they will not retire from the stage of history in the next twenty years from now on.

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kaoladedashuUID：2403207

谢谢LS各位了的点拨，发现很多毛病啊，学习了！
继续努力！:)