【12月-1月IBT综合备考大帖】之【TWE作文】nignstory 12.23号作业

ningstoryUID: 2548108

大学往往让学生通过TEAM WORK完成PROJECT,然后给TEAM MEMBER打上同样的分数,你觉得这样好吗?


There is a phenomenon that, in colleges, professors usually disposes a project to a team of students. After finishing the project, the professor mark a score for the team, and every member in the team will be obtained as same score. As far as this phenomenon is concerned there some issues should be discussed.
Firstly, disposing a project to a team of students and marked same for every one in team has many advantages. Through doing the project, students in a team will learn how to collaborate with each other and how to deal with each other. Although they will find the shortcomings and merits with each other though team works, mark them identical will encourage they work as a whole. For my experience, I have attended a team to do a project that preparing a party in our university. There are 10 members in our team, everyone doing different works, some one buy goods, some one clean the halls, some work fast, some one work slowly. After the party, we are tired, but we feel happy because we have learned collaboration and unquit. We fell integrated that the director of the department mark a high score for every one of us because we are working as a whole team, even though not everyone contribute to the work equal.
Secondly, on the other hand, marking score same for every one in a team are adverse to students, some times. Because student in the team have different IQ, personality and ability, the contributions to a project usually varies. If every one is obtained a same score, the students who have higher ability and have more contributions to the work will be hurt. They will feel unequal and lost enthusiasm to do the next project. For example, a professor proposes a research project about environmental pollution to a team of students. It’s obvious that not every one are good at doing this research work, some students are interesting in this topic and they will work hard to complete the project and contribute much, some other students are indifferent to this topic and they contribute little. How to mark the score for them if you are the professor? Evidently, we must depend on the workload: more contribution to the project, higher scores they will have, vice versa. If we mark same score to everyone, we will cause unequality.
In a word, some times we should mark identical to very member of team to value their work, and some times we should mark differently. In general, if the emphasis of the project is the whole team, identical scores should be given; and if the emphasis of project is individuals in the team, the scores would be marked by contributions.

Amber0926UID: 2555355

There is a phenomenon that, in colleges, professors usually disposes a project to a team of students. After finishing the project, the professor mark a score for the team, and every member in the team will be obtained as same score. As far as this phenomenon is concerned there some issues should be discussed.

Firstly, disposing a project to a team of students and marked same for every one in team has many advantages. Through doing the project, students in a team will learn how to collaborate with each othe(去掉each other) and how to deal with each other. Although they will find the shortcomings and(改成or) merits with each other though team works, mark them identical will encourage they work as a whole. For my experience, I have attended a team to do a project that preparing a party in our university. There are 10 members in our team, everyone doing different works, some one buy goods, some one clean the halls, some work fast, some one work slowly. After the party, we are tired, but we feel happy because we have learned collaboration and unquit. We fell integrated that the director of the department mark a high score for every one of us because we are working as a whole team, even though not everyone contribute to the work equal.

Secondly, on the other hand, marking score same for every one in a team are adverse to students, some times. Because student in the team have different IQ, personality and ability, the contributions to a project usually varies. If every one is obtained a same score, the students who have higher ability and have more contributions to the work will be hurt. They will feel unequal and lost enthusiasm to do the next project. For example, a professor proposes a research project about environmental pollution to a team of students. It’s obvious that not every one are good at doing this research work, some students are interesting in this topic and they will work hard to complete the project and contribute much, some other students are indifferent to this topic and they contribute little. How to mark the score for them if you are the professor? Evidently, we must depend on the workload: more contribution to the project, higher scores they will have, vice versa. If we mark same score to everyone, we will cause unequality.
In a word, some times we should mark identical to very member of team to value their work, and some times we should mark differently. In general, if the emphasis of the project is the whole team, identical scores should be given; and if the emphasis of project is individuals in the team, the scores would be marked by contributions.

我感觉这题目但从一面论证好像论点相当少并容易跑题，楼主从正反2面论证很不错。另外举例很充分值得学习
只是第三段出现论点转折很突然感觉不好
另外句式有点单调，可以尝试谢谢倒装、复杂句等
呃。。太晚了就不多说了，不当之处请见谅

d596086UID: 2522476

基本同意楼上观点
两段一段写优点，一段写缺点
开头可以再点明白一点从2个方面写

段落中的例子有点....太普通

ningstoryUID: 2548108

非常感谢楼上的点评，说的很好。我要加强句子的练习。

ningstoryUID: 2548108

再次感谢！

[ 本帖最后由 ningstory 于 2008-12-24 18:34 编辑 ]