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snailkevinUID: 2456176

写的有点仓促，字数有点短..

Some people think that it is best for extended families (including grandparents, aunts and uncles ,etc.) to live together. Other people think that it is best for the nuclear family (parents and children only) to live away from the extended family. Which type of family living arrangment do you think is the most benedical? Use specific reasons to support your response.


I totally agree with the statement that it is best for the nuclear family to live away from the extend family. In my opion, living as a extended family seems to bring negative aspects: inconvenience on daily life, different customs, as discussed below.

First reason for arguing agasinst live as a extended family has to do with inconvenience. Naturally, it is very accidental for such a large family choose to work, get educate or get recreation in the same area. Therefore, if we choose to live together, we have to pay more time on the road or we have to choose a limit of decisions in nearby place. For such case, living as a nuclear family must be a wise decision.

In addition, it is best for nuclear family to live away from extended family that people have their own custom each. It could be hardly demonstrated that elders share a lot of common with young people on both views and life styles. Also, different families may have different living condition such as education experience and economic condition. For that matter, it seems to be problematic to put several nuclear families live together. Thus, this is the second reason I approve to live as the nuclear family.

To sum up, I perfer living away to living together as the extended family. To bolster this point, I enumerate several reasons, the inconvenience of living together and the custom of each nuclear family as example. Based on these indications I would totally agree with the statement for nuclear family living away from extended family.

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mpromanusUID: 2565872

I totally agree with the statement that it is best for the nuclear family to live away from the extended family. In my opion, living as a extended family (ONE extended family means a family of relatives that are not your immediate relatives. For example, your uncle's family is one extended family of yours. Your grandparent's family is another one. Therefore we don't say people 'live as' extended families because these families are not defined by who are living together with whom. We may say 'live with' extended families.) seems to bring negative aspects effects/impacts: such as inconvenience in daily life,and different customs, as discussed below. (The colon : is a very advanced punctuation mark. I don't encourage its use unless you're absolutely sure how it should be used.)

The First reason for arguing agasinst living as a extended family has to do with inconvenience. Naturally, it is very accidental rare for that all members of such a large family would choose to work, get receive education or get find recreation in the same area. Therefore, if we choose to live together, we have to pay more time on the road or we have to choose a  from limited of decisions (on what?) in nearby place. For such a case, living as a nuclear family must be a wise decision.(How? This is very vague. If a nuclear family stays in a very underdeveloped area, they too can find the location very inconvenient. The size of the family is not the only factor in this.)

In addition, it is best for nuclear family to live away from the extended family given that each person people has their his own customs each (Do you not feel awkward at all that you are using 'their' and 'each' almost next to each other?). It could be hardly demonstrated that elders share a lot of common with young people on both views and life styles. (I'm not sure I'm understanding this correctly. Do you mean 'it's very obvious that the elderly don't have a lot in common with young people'?) Also, different families may have different living conditions such as education experience and economic conditions. (These are not 'living conditions' but rather 'family backgrounds'.) For that matter, it seems to be problematic to put several nuclear families live together. Thus, this is the second reason I approve to living as the nuclear family.

To sum up, I perfer living away to living together as the extended family. To bolster this point, I enumerate several (Don't use this word unless you have more than three.) reasons: the inconvenience of living together and the customs of each nuclear family, as examples. Based on these indications I would totally agree with the statement for nuclear family living away from extended family.

总结:

首先，这不是一个agree/disagree的题目 - The question is 'Which type is the most beneficial'. 所以正确的正面回答是: I think xxx type is the most beneficial because of xxx, xxx and xxx. 请注意题目不是只有一种，模板也不是只有一种，要看清题目再回答问题。然后需要指出的是你在用反面论述写 - 题目问的是哪种比较好，你的论述方式是论反面观点的不好。这种论述方式的危险就是像在第二段最后的评语中指出的那样，反面论点不好不等于正面论点一定好。所以要正面回答问题的论述方式应该是主要论述正面论点的好，次要论述反面论点的不好。

语言方面主要是词语的顺序不很地道。请注意使用正确的英文句法。

snailkevinUID: 2456176

谢谢romanus, 还有相当多的问题要去修改啊:handshake:handshake