【12月-1月IBT综合备考大帖】之【TWE作文】1.7号作业

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Our society is developing at a much higher speed

nowadays.Because the extreme changes that have been

made recent years,the new generation are totally

different from the older.I definitely believe that

young people in my country enjoy life better than

the older people.
  Firstly,the increasing treasure of our country

intensely uplift the standare of our young people's

daily lives now.As we all know,though China is a

developing country,it has made amazing advancement

in these decades of years that make this country

much more prosperous that before.Today,the young

people who born in this good period of my country

are living a comfotable lives,they can eat

different kinds of food,wear fashionable

clothes,live in spacious houses and so forth,all

these made them enjoy a much better life than their

parents.
  Moreover,the increasing fortunate of my country

also meet the young people's mental needs.While the

economy of my country is develop fast,the other

aspects of our social life are also undergo extreme

changes.In our spare time,our young people can read

all kinds of literature,listen foreigh music,and we

can also take numerous exercises to keep fit,which

are quite different their parents.I remember that

my father told me when he was a child, because of

the poverty of his family,he had to abandon the

opportunity to go to school,and he joked that he

was jealous of my life in this new age.
  Finally,because of the rising standard of lives

and numerous knowledge we connect today,our young

people have a deep understanding of our own

country, our world, our lives, we know better what

we really want, and what kind of persons we want to

be and which life we want to live, so we can fully

make use of the tools around us to make a much

better life that we appreciate,so this attitide

made us enjoy life better than the older people who

were constrained by the old time.

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Our society is developing at a much higher speed nowadays.Because the extreme changes that have been made recent years,the new
generation are totally different from the older.I definitely believe that young people in my country enjoy life better than the older people.

Firstly,the increasing treasure of our country intensely uplift the standare of our young people's daily lives now.As we all know,though China is a developing country,it has made amazing advancement in these decades of years that make this country much more prosper
to us that before.Today,the young people who born in this good period of my country are living a comfotable lives,they can eat different kinds of food,wear fashionable clothes,live in spacious houses and so forth,all these made them enjoy a much better life than theirs.

Moreover,the increasing fortunate of my country also meet the young people's mental needs.While the economy of my country is develop fast,the other aspects of our social life are also undergo extreme changes.In our spare time,our young people can read all kinds of literature,listen foreigh music,and we can also take numerous exercises to keep fit,which my father told me when he was a child, because of the poverty of his family,he had to abandon the opportunity to go to school,and he joked that he was jealous of my life in this new age.

Finally,because of the rising standard of lives uand numerous knowledge we connect today,our young people have a deep understanding of our own country, our world, our lives, we know better what we really want, and what kind of persons we want to be and which life we want to live, so we can fully we tmake use of the tools around us to make a much better life that we appreciate,so this attitide made us enjoy life better than the older people who were constrained by the old time.

1.论证还可以.
2.都用些高级词.
ps:楼主怎么分这么多段?下载后改了好长时间乱码.下次建议提供word下载.

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我看得是楼上改好的文章
写的很不错，语言清晰易懂，文章整体结构也很好

如果时间充沛的话，可以加强段落中的比较分量，这样使得文章更有说服性