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发表于 2009-1-8 21:35:57 |显示全部楼层

超时了,郁闷啊,一点状态都没有

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Movies and televisions make more negative effects than positive effects on young people s behavior.

Nowadays,watching movies and televisions is a very common way for people to entertain themselves, thus it seems as a part of life as eating and breathing. Coming with the fact that more and more people are infatuated with watching them, the issue about the influence of watching movies and televisions, especially for young people, became increasingly drastic recently. Since watching movies and television takes young people too much time and energy, it brings many negative effects on children’s study, behavior and personal pursuit.

        First of all, watching movies and television account for students a bulk of time which should be better used in studying. It is easy to find that the more time one spends on watching, the less time one can focusing on studying. One study shows that the Chinese students will spends an average of three hours every day just on seeing movies and televisions. One single movie always lasts for two or three hours, even a short TV-program probably lasts up to one hour. One can image that if student watch one movie in a night, he or she will have no time to study. What worst, the serial of TV-programs, which are showed on TV everyday for several hours, will waste the young people huge time from studying more previous knowledge. This question already aroused the educators' concerning.

        Besides, the contents of the movies and television always potentially affect young people’s behaviors. People, notably the young, are easily trend to imitate the way of figures or idols talking and doing. It is good for the young people to follow the people whose behavior and ethics are performed well in the movies or televisions; but in the other side, if the movies or televisions were full of violent, immorality, eroticism and so on, then the children's behavior and talking ways will be guided to the negative direction. Many experts point that the soaring of the crime rate of young people is directly related to the individual’s consciousness who learned them from movies and televisions.

        In addition to the time-consuming and negative behavior factors, the movies and televisions also change the young people’s life attitude as well as the personal goals. Previously, what the student’s dream are those things like to be a teacher, doctor or a successful businessman; whereas nowadays, most students want to become a super star and enter into the entertainment circle. Most students are loyal fans of some movies’ stars, whose vigor and energy are distracted from studying to pursuing these famous people. Those models inside of children’s hearts, in the past, are doctors, scientists, or solders, now being replaced with the pop starts, movies figures and so forth, which makes parents worried a lot about their children’s future.

         Although the television and movies make our common life more colorful and agreeable, it does bring many hazards to the young generations. The parents, educators and all of the social members should take more notes about the influences what the mode technology actually bring to the young people.



[ 本帖最后由 d596086 于 2009-1-8 23:01 编辑 ]
You can call me a dreamer, but I am not alnoe

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发表于 2009-1-8 22:33:34 |显示全部楼层
看了lz两篇作文,发现lz很强的啊,羡慕啊

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发表于 2009-1-9 11:52:50 |显示全部楼层

Nowadays,watching movies and televisions is a very common way for people to entertain themselves, thus it seems as a part of life as eating and breathing. Coming with the fact that more and more people are infatuated with watching them, the issue about the influence of watching movies and televisions, especially for young people, became increasingly drastic recently. Since watching movies and television takes young people too much time and energy, it brings many negative effects on children’s study, behavior and personal pursuit.

        First of all, watching movies and television account for students a bulk of time which should be better used in studying. It is easy to find that the more time one spends on watching, the less time one can focusing on studying. One study shows that the Chinese students will spends an average of three hours every day just on seeing movies and televisions. One single movie always lasts for two or three hours, even a short TV-program probably lasts up to one hour. One can image that if student watch one movie in a night, he or she will have no time to study. What worst(这个能这么用嘛?LZ要是知道,告诉我一声), the serial of TV-programs, which are showed on TV everyday for several hours, will waste the young people huge time from studying more previous knowledge. This question already aroused the educators' concerning.最后一句话我喜欢,比哪种therefore+总结好多

        Besides, the contents of the movies and television always potentially affect young people’s behaviors. People, notably the young, are easily trend to imitate the way of figures or idols talking and doing. It is good for the young people to follow the people whose behavior and ethics are performed well in the movies or televisions; but in the other side, if the movies or televisions were full of violent, immorality, eroticism and so on, then the children's behavior and talking ways will be guided to the negative direction. Many experts point that the soaring of the crime rate of young people is directly related to the individual’s consciousness who learned them from movies and televisions.

        In addition to the time-consuming and negative behavior factors, the movies and televisions also change the young people’s life attitude as well as the personal goals. Previously, what the student’s dream are those things like to be a teacher, doctor or a successful businessman; whereas nowadays, most students want to become a super star and enter into the entertainment circle(这个说法太C-english了吧:) 人家叫艺能界咋办). Most students are loyal fans of some movies’ stars, whose vigor and energy are distracted from studying to pursuing these famous people. Those models inside of children’s hearts, in the past, are doctors, scientists, or solders, now being replaced with the pop starts, movies figures and so forth, which makes parents worried a lot about their children’s future.

         Although the television and movies make our common life more colorful and agreeable, it does bring many hazards to the young generations. The parents, educators and all of the social members should take more notes about the influences what the mode technology actually bring to the young people.

这文章写的不错,结构整齐,词汇功力很强啊

表面风光,内心彷徨;容颜未老,心已沧桑;似乎有才,实为江郎;成就难有,郁闷经常;比骡子累比蚂蚁忙,比岳飞更忠良!!

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发表于 2009-1-9 17:46:04 |显示全部楼层
同意楼上的看法,楼主词汇功底强,语句通顺,阅读楼主的文章让我学到了很多。
我想一定能在IBT考试中考出好成绩的!

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发表于 2009-1-9 21:36:27 |显示全部楼层
第三个论点角度很好啊!

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发表于 2009-1-10 02:19:31 |显示全部楼层

Nowadays,watching movies and televisions is a very common way for people to entertain themselves, thus it seems as a part of life as eating and breathing. Coming with the fact that more and more people are infatuated with watching them, the issue about the influence of watching movies and televisions, especially for young people, became increasingly drastic recently. Since watching movies and television takes young people too much time and energy, it brings many negative effects on children’s study, behavior and personal pursuit.

        First of all, watching movies and television account for students a bulk of time which should be better used in studying. It is easy to find that the more time one spends on watching, the less time one can focusing on studying. One study shows that the Chinese students will spends an average of three hours every day just on seeing movies and televisions. One single movie always lasts for two or three hours, even a short TV-program probably lasts up to one hour. One can image that if student watch one movie in a night, he or she will have no time to study. What worst(what is worse), the serial of TV-programs, which are showed on TV everyday for several hours, will waste the young people huge time from studying more previous knowledge. This question already aroused the educators' concerning.

        Besides, the contents of the movies and television always potentially affect young people’s behaviors. People, notably the young, are easily trend to imitate the way of figures or idols talking and doing(fifures and idols' talking ways,doing way 不知道有么有这说法哈). It is good for the young people to follow the(删掉) people whose behavior and ethics are performed well in the (删掉)movies or televisions; but in(on) the other side, if the movies or televisions were full of violent, immorality, eroticism and so on, then(删掉,因为前面是if从句) the children's behavior and talking ways will be guided to the negative direction. Many experts point that the soaring of the crime rate of young people is directly related to the individual’s consciousness who learned them from movies and televisions(which have been learned from movies and televisions).

        In addition to the time-consuming and negative behavior factors, the movies and televisions also change the young people’s life attitude as well as the personal goals. Previously, what the student’s dream are those things like to be a teacher, doctor or a successful businessman(students' dreams are about being a teacher ,doctor or  a successful business man in the future); whereas nowadays, most students want to become a super star and enter into ( 删掉)the entertainment circle(maybe entertainment world). Most students are loyal fans of some movies’ stars, whose vigor and energy are distracted from studying to pursuing these famous people.(and their vigor and energy.... 否则whose 有点像是形容move stars,觉得呢?) Those models inside of children’s hearts, in the past, are doctors, scientists, or solders, now being (they are)replaced with the pop starts, movies figures and so forth, which makes parents worried a lot about their children’s future.

         Although the television and movies make our common life more colorful and agreeable, it does bring many hazards to the young generations. The parents, educators and all of the social members should take more notes about the influences what the mode technology actually bring to the young people.

稍微改了下,看看吧

再赞楼主的用词啊,好丰富啊~~

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