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Movies and televisions make more negative effects than positive effects on young people s behavior


Movies have been existed about one hundred years, since Tomas Edison invented the movie machine. And televisions have been appeared for about several decades. Now, many people can watch the movies and TV easily, which can bring much information and joy to us and make our live colorful. But some people think that movies and TVs make more negative than positive effects on young people’s behavior. They may think the bad information contained on movies and TVs can influence young people negatively. I don’t think so, I think the movies and TVs play an positive role on young peoples lives.
First of all, the movies and TVs are two important mediums that express the news, knowledge, cultures and fashion, which enrich our lives and watching movies and TVs have became a necessarily part in our life. As for young people, it not only entertains their lives, but also educates them. Though watching TV and film, they can realize the things they maybe never seen in real lives and learn the knowledge their teachers or people around never teach. For instance, kids can seen the live of sharks in oceans on TV program of Animal World. Through watching TV, they can know what the characters of sharks are, and how dangerous they are. Another example is that though watch TVs or movies about heroes and great people, they may be affect by these great people’s great story, and will study their respective characters.
Further more, TV and movies may color young people’s live greatly and convenient their communications. Varies kinds of programs for young people can make their childhood and juvenile wonderful. Though watching TV they can know many people and make friends with different people. An example is that, some excellent young people are reported by TV program, and thus many young people may know him though these programs. The young audience may be phone or write letters to these excellent people or make friends with them, which may advance their communications. These communications is helpful to their growth both in live and study.
The last one is that although some movies and TVs contain the information of sex, force and bloody which is harmful to young people, we can regulate the play system by government, to avoid young people contact these unhealthy contents. Moreover, we also can avoid them indulging the TV though the teachers and parents’ supervisions. Now the movie classification is operated in many counties, and has played well effects. We should not worry the unhealthy contents corrode our children’s’ heart, excessively.
In general, in modern society, watching TV and movies have became a necessary custom to us, it benefit to us, and also to young people.

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Movies have been existed about one hundred years, since Tomas Edison invented the movie machine. And televisions have been appeared for about several decades. Now, many people can watch the movies and TV easily, which can bring much information and joy to us and make our live (life)colorful. But some people think that movies and TVs make more negative than positive effects on young people’s behavior. They may think the bad information contained on movies and TVs can influence young people negatively. I don’t think so, I think the movies and TVs play an positive role on young peoples lives.

First of all, the movies and TVs are two important mediums that express the news, knowledge, cultures and fashion, which enrich our lives and watching movies and TVs have became a necessarily part in our life. As for young people, it not only entertains their lives, but also educates them. Though watching TV and film, they can realize the things they maybe never seen in real lives and learn the knowledge their teachers or people around never teach. For instance, kids can seen the live of sharks in oceans on TV program of Animal World. Through watching TV, they can know what the characters of sharks are, and how dangerous they are. Another example is that though watch TVs or movies about heroes and great people, they may be affect by these great people’s great story, and will study their respective characters.其实这段可以分2个小点来讲，一个是娱乐，一个是教育功能 |留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE(W5Lg?B)\.O

Further more, TV and movies may color young people’s live greatly and convenient their communications. Varies kinds of programs for young people can make their childhood and juvenile wonderful. Though watching TV they can know many people and make friends with different people. An example is that, some excellent young people are reported by TV program, and thus many young people may know him though these programs. The young audience may be phone or write letters to these excellent people or make friends with them, which may advance their communications. These communications is helpful to their growth both in live and study.
E^5Pa&S R8\/o$?bbs.gter.netThe last one is that although some movies and TVs contain the information of sex, force and bloody which is harmful to young people, we can regulate the play system by government, to avoid young people contact these unhealthy contents. Moreover, we also can avoid them indulging the TV though the teachers and parents’ supervisions. Now the movie classification is operated in many counties, and has played well effects. We should not worry the unhealthy contents corrode our children’s’ heart, excessively. 留学,考试,TOEFL,GRE,GMAT,IELTS,SAT,VISA,文书,签证,论坛,出国,申请,美国,英国,欧洲,加拿大,USA(m`'g8mCc)rf
In general, in modern society, watching TV and movies have became a necessary custom to us, it benefit to us, and also to young people.
感觉论点不是特别清晰~两个论点有重叠的部分，可以写成两个大的点比如 电视和TV的教育和娱乐功能，这样文章显得清晰一些
个人意见哈:)

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呵呵 谢谢！你的意见很宝贵。我认为你说的很好！我再改改！

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Movies have been existed about one hundred years, since Tomas Edison invented the movie machine. And televisions have been appeared for about several decades. Now, many people can watch the movies and TV easily, which can bring much information and joy to us and make our live colorful. But some people think that movies and TVs make more negative than positive effects on young people’s behavior. They may think the bad information contained on movies and TVs can influence young people negatively. I don’t think so, I think the movies and TVs play an positive role on young peoples lives.对电视的发展描述太多,对文章贡献不大.

First of all, the movies and TVs are two important mediums that express the news, knowledge, cultures and fashion, which enrich our lives and watching movies and TVs have became a necessarily part in our life. As for young people, it not only entertains their lives, but also educates them. Though watching TV and film, they can realize the things they maybe never seen in real lives and learn the knowledge their teachers or people around never teach. For instance, kids can seen the live of sharks in oceans on TV program of Animal World. Through watching TV, they can know what the characters of sharks are, and how dangerous they are. Another example is that though watch TVs or movies about heroes and great people, they may be affect by these great people’s great story, and will study their respective characters.

Further more, TV and movies may color young people’s live greatly and convenient their communications. Varies kinds of programs for young people can make their childhood and juvenile wonderful. Though watching TV they can know many people and make friends with different people. An example is that, some excellent young people are reported by TV program, and thus many young people may know him though these programs. The young audience may be phone or write letters to these excellent people or make friends with them, which may advance their communications. These communications is helpful to their growth both in live and study.

The last one is that although some movies and TVs contain the information of sex, force and bloody which is harmful to young people, we can regulate the play system by government, to avoid young people contact these unhealthy contents. Moreover, we also can avoid them indulging the TV though the teachers and parents’ supervisions. Now the movie classification is operated in many counties, and has played well effects. We should not worry the unhealthy contents corrode our children’s’ heart, excessively.

In general, in modern society, watching TV and movies have became a necessary custom to us, it benefit to us, and also to young people最后一段再详细点.


有些表达比较口语化.
有些词很好,值得学习:indulge