15日作文

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       At the present time, it is not strange to see a foreigner on the street because of the high pace of developing. You will easy to find a foreign company that hires employees. As to well know the foreigners and handle the affairs, it’s necessary to learn something about the foreign culture. And colleges have so many students than lots of them come from different countries, So I think colleges should allow the students to learn a course of culture of a country rather than their own.
      Colleges have so many students that lots of them come from different countries, As different cultures have different customs, two persons may have conflict when they have some mistakes in cultures. So if students learn something about the others’ cultures, then, they may avoid the mistakes. What’s more, they will live in harmonious, and it’s easy to get friend and good for the students to get along with the others.  
      Secondly, a culture course will help you to learn something about the others’ countries, such like the history, the literature, the science and even the economy, it’s good way to increase knowledge, also it will enrich your life and gain your respect, a learned person will often be treated as a authority.
      As everybody knows, it will be easy to get a high paid job in a foreign company. So many people try to catch the chance to get in. And if the person has learnt something about the foreign culture, it will help him a lot. Firstly, he can avoid making mistakes in culture difference. Then, it’s easier for him to touch with the businessman in the other country, because they will easier to have common topics. Often, a small detail will make you success.
      As a conclusion, learn a course of culture of a country rather than their own is necessary. Colleges should pay more attention on the culture difference, don’t look down on it, it will offer the students a good study circumstance, and even change their whole life.

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字数够吗？
第二个理由太少了。

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At the present time, it is not strange to see a foreigner on the street because of the high pace of developing(high pace of developing与外国人在街上走没有必然联系吧). You will （it is easy to）easy to find a foreign company that hires employees. As to well know (读不通顺的样子)the foreigners and handle the affairs, it’s（it is necessary to learn more about foreign culture ）necessary to learn something about the foreign culture. And colleges have so many students than( so many…than? Colleges enrolled more students from different countries than before. In my opinion,…) lots of them come from different countries, so I think colleges should allow the students to learn a course of culture of a country rather than their own
Colleges have so many students that lots of them come from different countries, (句号)As different cultures have different customs, two persons may （people from different places may conflict with each other when they encounter misunderstanding about other cultures）have conflict when they have some mistakes in cultures. So(没有so) if students learn something about the others’ cultures, then, they may avoid the( this kind of, mistakes太宽泛了，不是学了之后别的错误也不会犯了) mistakes. What’s more, they will live in harmonious, （这是两句话了，中间不要and）and (it would be much easier for them to make friends and get along with each other)it’s easy to get friend and good for the students to get along with the others

Secondly, a culture course will help you(student,作文全用三人称，正式) to learn something（不要总用一个something，a culture course will help student to know more about the history, literature, science and economy of other countries） about the others’ countries, such like the history, the literature, the science and even the economy, (又是另一句话了，语法错误，it is a good way to)it’s good way to increase knowledge, also it will enrich your life and gain your respect(怎么扯上了gain respect), a learned person will often be treated as a authority(最后一句话扯远了)

As everybody knows, it will be easy to get a high paid job in a foreign company（这句话有点崇洋了哈，:-)）. So many people try to catch the chance to get in. And (no and here,)if the person has learnt something about the foreign culture, it will help him a lot. Firstly, he can avoid making mistakes in culture difference. Then, it’s easier for him to touch with the businessman in the other country, because they will easier to have common topics. Often, a small detail will make you success(这后面几句话都有问题，特别是they will easier to)
As a conclusion, learn (to learn/learning) a course of culture of a country rather than their own is necessary. Colleges should pay more attention on the culture difference, don’t （do not,作文不要简写）look down on it, it will offer the students a good study circumstance, and even change their whole life.

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谢谢,我会的改进