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The author propounds that it is a good choice to sells your home quickly and at a good price. Such evidences, like the number of agent, the avenue of each company, and his experience of listing home to Fitch and Adams, are used to bolster the recommend. On the surface, it may seem a sound suggestion, but careful weighing on closer analysiswe can find the author's evidence is unwarranted.

The number of AR agent is more than FR's, and of many FR's agents are part-time. In view of this fact, the author said the AR is superior. However, using the evidence said above we can conclude nothing, perhaps the agents of FR are more effective and own more annual sales. Moreover, it is highly possible that the part-time agents may have a wide relationship of many different estate people which is good for selling the house to the different kinds of people with proper price.

Additionally, the avenue of each company and the average price of home sales can not make sense, either. On the one hand, the avenue is higher does not meant to the profits are higher in respect that the author does not refer the cost of each company. On the other hand, average price can not indicate the specific price of sales, perhaps the luxury house AR sold is $16800, or the common house FR sold is $14400. For the reasons discuss above, the author’s recommand is incredible.

Furthermore, the author compared one sale of ten years ago with one sale of last year. It is not grantee that the condition of economic, the location of house and the status of house are same all the time, perhaps there is an economic storm ten years ago. That's why the house is sold after four months not one month. Besides, it is more likely that the later house locates at a good place where is convenient. Therefore, this example is not detailed to draw a conclusion that AR is better than FR.

In short, the author fails to distinct the difference between two companies, all evidences given is not substantial to illustrate the author's suggestion. The author should give more information about the each company and the two houses, thus we can decide which company is more superior.
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