【09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文】01.20号作业

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Nowdays eating meals with families regularly is not important any more. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the development of our society, people's living level is much higher than ever before. We have more choice in every aspects of our daily life, including eating meals. We can eat fast food as our lunch in the short break at noon, and also spend a large scale of time with our friends and lovers. At the same time, we neglect the importance of eating meals with families. In my sperestive, eating meals with families has its particularly importance that should not be replaced or neglected.

First of all, having dinner with families is a part of personal social responsibility. Being a person of our society, we not only have to care about our occupation, but also should take care of our family since the whole society is consisted of millions of families. As a father, you should give your children a safe and happy environment of growth and tutor them become useful persons of the society; as a son, you should look after your parents. So no matter how busy you are, you should spend time with families, and dinner time will be a good choice. You could listen to your families about their problems while having meals together, which is the most effective way to smooth your relationship with families. Moreover, some stastics shows that people always feel happy when they have meals because their need of food is met. Therefore, as a resposible person, we should not easily miss this good chance to promote our family relationship.

What's more, eating meals with families is a perfect way to relax our mood, which is benefit to ourselves. Nowadays, everyone faces large problems at work or study so that we have uncountable tension in daily life, which could be the reason of mental problems. When we have dinner with families, we could share our happiness and our problems. It is possible that you will be full of energy after telling the story and get some suggestions from your families. Though sometimes families could not give us any useful advices, we could also feel better after speaking out, just like an old saying "if you speak your puzzle to another person, it becomes half to yourself". Actually, sharing with families is much safer than that with friends, because there is not any closer relationship than that with families. No matter what happens, families will not do anything harmful to you.

To sum up, meals with families regularly is more important than ever before. Espesally in our society which is full of competition, having meals is much more than just getting rid of starvation, which becomes a kind of mental need gradually.

word的自动检查功能坏掉了……就只用了眼睛检查了拼写错误，不知道还有多少错误，我会尽快解决这个问题，请互改同学见谅

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With the development of our society, people's living level is much higher than ever before. We have more choice in every aspects(aspect) of our daily life(lives), including eating meals. We can eat fast food as our lunch in the(我觉得用a更好) short break at noon, and also spend a large scale of time with our friends and lovers. At the same time, we neglect the importance of eating meals with families. In my sperestive, eating meals with families has its particularly（用形容词particular） importance that should not be replaced or neglected.




First of all, having dinner with families is a part of personal social responsibility(personal responsibility in our society用状语更好些，不然句子太沉坠了). Being a person of our society（As normal individuals这样就可以不重复前面的society）, we not only have to care about our occupation, but also should take care of our family since the whole society is consisted of millions of families(family). As a father, you should give your children a safe and happy environment of growth and tutor them become useful persons of the society; as a son, you should look after your parents. So no matter how busy you are, you should spend time with families, and dinner time will be a good choice. You could listen to your families about their problems while having meals together, which (it或that) is the most effective way to smooth your relationship with families. Moreover, some stastics(statistics) shows that people always feel happy when they have meals because their need of food is met(没懂这句话). Therefore, as a resposible person, we should not easily miss this good chance to promote our family relationship.




What's more, eating meals with families is a perfect way to relax our mood, which is benefit to ourselves. Nowadays, everyone faces large problems at work or study so that we have uncountable tension in daily life, which could be the reason of mental problems. When we have dinner with families, we could share our happiness and our problems. It is possible that you will be full of energy after telling the story and get some suggestions from your families. Though sometimes families could not give us any useful advices, we could also feel better after speaking out, just like an old saying "if you speak your puzzle to another person, it becomes half to yourself". Actually, sharing with families is much safer than that with friends, because there is not any closer relationship than that with families. No matter what happens, families will not do anything harmful to you.




To sum up, meals with families regularly is more important than ever before. Especially in our society which is full of competition, having meals is much more than just getting rid of starvation, which becomes a kind of mental need gradually.
结构很好，规矩的5段式，例子也不错，请注意单词拼写和一些语法问题，很有潜力，加油