【09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文】1.29号作业 by 紫苜蓿

紫苜蓿UID: 2587531

agree or disagree? It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.
Please submit your essay before 22:00, 30th Jan, and good luck!
这个我一会儿也贴到自己的作文帖子里去。。报了名 就交一次作业吧！写的仓促 请组员们改改。。

people always have different inclination of study, students especially need to promote themselves effectively. some people hold that students should learn facts as many as possible, while others believe to understand ideas and concepts is much more important than leaning facts. as far as i'm concerned, although both facts and ideas is necessary to learn, i definitely appreciate the latter.

firstly, knowledge that being called fact is a relative concept. once upon a time then the brightest man believed that the earth was flat, this "fact" is accepted widely by people but turned out to be wrong at last. even if we believe one fact wholeheartedly would be wrong, therefore it is not necessary to simply gather every fact that we learned in class. some people may ask, if we failed to gain enough facts in our mind, how to cope with problems in the future. well, the answer is database, we can search for anything we need in the database, and don't have to remember everything.

furthermore, while studying a subject, there is definitely many science concepts, it's important to remember these concepts to get an outline of subject. sometimes they are easy to understand, while sometimes not. then we should take certain means to better understand the complex concepts, that is ideas going through these concepts that unified them. that teachers do in class is convey his ideas to students and make sure that they can better understanding the basic concepts by this ideas. if we students absorb the ideas of teachers and convert it to our own then we may probably attain a sketch of contents in the text book. this makes studying much efficient and interesting.

finally, what are we students mostly being expected to do in the future is science innovation and discovery. ideas is of the most importance in this activity. the more ideas we learn from teachers and other classmates the more ideas we can come to and finally they became ours and we can even create new ideas that is full of innovation. this is crucial for scientific research , and students with this merit of idea can surely do a really good job in scientific field.

all in all, ideas and concepts are the most important and precious knowledge that we should try our best to learn.if we hold on to this study habit we will surely do better job in the future.

total time 36min

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

戴教主说 开始写的时候不要太限制时间 先把文章写完整。大约写了几篇后再开始修改自己的作文

hantangren2009UID: 2582164

大家好！我也想加入，可以吗？

紫苜蓿UID: 2587531

谢谢 已经有长老帮我改过了：） 很开心 非常有收获！
楼上的 可以的 去报名吧

大伙一块傻UID: 2557169

people always have different inclination of study, students especially need to promote themselves effectively. some people hold( the opinion) that students should learn facts as many as possible, while others believe to understand ideas and concepts is much more important than leaning facts. as far as i'm concerned, although both facts and ideas is necessary to learn, i definitely appreciate the latter.

firstly, knowledge that being called fact is a relative concept. once upon a time then the brightest man believed that the earth was flat, this "fact" is accepted widely by people but turned out to be wrong at last. even if we believe one fact wholeheartedly would be wrong, therefore it is not necessary to simply gather every fact that we learned in class. some people may ask, if we failed to gain enough facts in our mind, how to cope with problems in the future. well, the answer is database, we can search for anything we need in the database, and don't have to remember everything.(我觉得是anything,因为这句话是否定句)
furthermore, while studying a subject, there is definitely many science concepts, it's important to remember these concepts to get an outline of subject. sometimes they are easy to understand, while sometimes not. then we should take certain means to better understand the complex concepts, that is ideas going through these concepts that unified them. that teachers do in class is convey his ideas to students and make sure that they can better understanding the basic concepts by this ideas. if we students absorb the ideas of teachers and convert it to our own then we may probably attain a sketch of contents in the text book. this makes studying much efficient and interesting
finally, what are we students mostly being expected to do in the future is science innovation and discovery. ideas is of the most importance in this activity. the more ideas we learn from teachers and other classmates the more ideas we can come to and finally they became ours and we can even create new ideas that is full of innovation. this is crucial for scientific research , and students with this merit of idea can surely do a really good job in scientific field.
Eall in all, ideas and concepts are the most important and precious knowledge that we should try our best to learn.if we hold on to this study habit we will surely do better job in the future.


我觉得写得挺好的~以上两点是我的一点建议~！你看看吧~！欢迎提意见~！

紫苜蓿UID: 2587531

谢谢~~ 第一个地方是省略了 实际上减少一些省略确实会更清楚些。。
第二个地方 如果改成anything 就改变了本意 本来是部分否定 意思是不需要讲所有的事情都记住 改成anything就变成了完全否定  ；）

大伙一块傻UID: 2557169

6# 紫苜蓿
恩~~~！
你作文写得挺好的~能说说你是怎么准备的吗？谢谢~

紫苜蓿UID: 2587531

咳咳~牛人好多 我这样的经不起推敲啊

主要是找准自己的缺点  
首先我的思路经常短路 所以要针对topic事先准备提纲，最近就忙这个。。
再次自己行文不流畅、话少 这点就是看别人改文章 大致都看了看 坛子里的批改都很有价值的 我学到了很多。。
再就是速度了 下周再练速度。。


还在拼命学习中 因为要短期提高所以不得不多练。。

一起加油！

woaichixiguaUID: 2450470

1# 紫苜蓿

people always have different inclination of study, students especially need to promote themselves effectively. some people hold the view that students should learn facts as many as possible, while others believe to understand ideas and concepts is much more important than leaning facts. as far as i'm concerned//这个可以不要, although both facts and ideas is necessary to learn, i definitely appreciate the latter.

firstly, knowledge that being called fact is a relative concept. once upon a time then the brightest man believed that the earth was flat, this "fact" is accepted widely by people but turned out to be wrong at last. even if we believe one fact wholeheartedly would be wrong, therefore it is not necessary to simply gather every fact that we learned in class. some people may ask, if we failed to gain enough facts in our mind, how to cope with problems in the future. well, the answer is database, we can search for anything we need in the database, and don't have to remember everything.

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finally, what are we students mostly being expected to do in the future is science innovation and discovery. ideas is of the most importance in this activity. the more ideas we learn from teachers and other classmates the more ideas we can come to and finally they became ours and we can even create new ideas that is full of innovation. this is crucial for scientific research , and students with this merit of idea can surely do a really good job in scientific field.

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all in all, ideas and concepts are the most important and precious knowledge that we should try our best to learn.if we hold on to this study habit we will surely do better job in the future.

偶觉得LZ写得很好咧...一点小建议,如果可以加入一些鲜活一点的例子会不会更好?

woaichixiguaUID: 2450470

偶也在深圳咧...偶3月7号考,LZ你准备得怎样啦?

紫苜蓿UID: 2587531

偶也在深圳咧...偶3月7号考,LZ你准备得怎样啦?
woaichixigua 发表于 2009-1-31 19:15

！ 你还有一个多月 有前途啊~好好准备~ 可别学我 到现在才慌~~我在华强北那儿考 你呢？

你的意见偶收下了 确实我的文章缺乏例证 所以说服力不够 但是我写例证 经常不小心就写成小学生作文了 呵呵

偶在想 举例子列事实之类的工作 是不是也可以做一个模板~~~~~~~研究一下 恩恩