【09年1月-4月】TOEFL作文互改小组-之【TWE作文】2.1作业 by Quliette

nirvanahmjUID: 2534352

咱对综合写作不熟，写的挺纠结，望狂拍！先谢过。
About the theme whether the four-day workweek is good, the lecture and the passage holds different opinion: the passage says that the four-day workweek will help a lot while the lecture denies the conclusion from every point. Both of them talk about it from three aspects.

First, from the aspect of the individual companies, the passage holds that with the four-day workweek, the employees will be more rested and alert and for the employees require 80% of the salary, it won’t cost more to employ more staff to cover the surplus job. However, the lecture tells us that more staff means more expense on training, medical benefits, office spaces and computers which result in more spending and reduction of the profits. This gives an addition of the consideration of the passage and thus refutes the point.

Second, from the aspect of the whole country, the passage says that the four-day workweek will reduce the unemployment rates. But the lecture argues that since hiring employees is costly, the companies may require the current employees to work overtime or except them to do the 5-day work in 4days which leads to no growth of employment. This is a direct contradict of what the passage indicates.

Third, from the aspect of the employees who decided to take the option, the passage asserts that the four-day work week will improve the quality of their lives for they can have more leisure time to spend with their families and do things they have interests in. Nevertheless, even in this point, the lecture has something opposite. He indicates that those employees may take the risks of being harmed in career for their ability may be decreased. And they may lose chances of being promoted for the company prefers a 5-day worker as the supervisor. This shows us that the consideration of the passage is one sided and failed to get a good conclusion.

y61_smileUID: 2595244

占个楼  我们互改 我是46#  
谢谢你能改我作文

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不传也不要紧，就这样就很好的作文了。
请您帮我改一下 实在不好意思

嗯，最后问一句，您是听了一遍在20min内写的么。。。

1点50分UID: 2474836

不好意思  因为水平有限 实在看不出有什么问题来  
真的很汗颜~~