【Dark_Tournament 小组第二次作业】---lewinsky

lewinskyUID: 2479218

Last summer,I volunteered to work as an English teacher in a primary school for children of migrant workers.To be accurate,I was dragged in instead of a volunteer.When my humorpus friends first hit upon the idea of this project, I was totally against it.However, some of my bright friends twisted my arms to have me join them.Thanks to those wise friends, the volunteer work which i learned gave me a precious little chance to help children with their English.And of course, I undoubtedly hold the opinion that wise friends are more important than humorous ones.
   The threshold reason why i regard smart friends as great significance of mine lies in the fact that their personal qualities and qualifications make me more likely to trust their suggestion. Wise friend is a great marriage of positiveness and optimism besides humorous, which provides us various aspects of issue.We can not only get informed but also have a deep understanding of events hence a better appreciation of it.On the contrary, humorous friends invariably take a joke rather than render us some persuading suggestion.Consequently, wise friends are more essential from my point of view.
   In addition, what humormous friends say might not so convincing, even worse, they hoax someone into believing a falsehood from time to time. As an old motto goes,"A liar is not believed when he speaks the truth",the fact of events might be affected by humorist unintentionally and it may indeed embarrassed somebody to some extent.There are a mutitude of examples about how humorous friends exaggerate the facts by unfairly retelling the story which result in numerous lovers break up.In contrast, bright friends frequently get exposure to the facts before telling to others.
   Furthermore,compared with humorous friends, the wise has more thoroughly comprehensive insight on our life.From the foregoing example what i say, with the help of my bright friends,i realize that volunteering shouldn't be just a onetime personal experience.It should be a lifetime activity of everbody.without the help of my bright friends, i had not such a feeling of enrichment,fulfillment and happiness through volunteer work.Meanwhile, i was paid for my work,amply paid, not in terms of money, but something more valuable.
    All in all,wise friends who have a more sense of sincereness, trustworthiness and foresight are more important than humoerous ones.

Amber0926UID: 2555355

你对我的批改很好，很认真哦。。谢谢啦
Last summer,I volunteered to work as an English teacher in a primary school for children of migrant workers.To be accurate,I was dragged in instead of a volunteer.（感觉是中国人的语序I as a volunteer, to be accurate, was dragged in this activies）When my humorpus friends first hit upon the idea of this project, I was totally against it.However, some of my bright friends twisted my arms to have me(delete) join them.Thanks to those wise friends, the volunteer work which i learned gave me a precious little chance to help children with their English.And of course, I undoubtedly hold the opinion that wise friends are more important than humorous ones
   The threshold reason why i regard smart friends as great significance of mine lies in the fact that their personal qualities and qualifications make me more likely to trust their suggestion. Wise friend is a great marriage of positiveness and optimism besides humorous, which provides us various aspects of issue.We can not only get informed but also have a deep understanding of events hence a better appreciation of it.(这句改为倒装会更漂亮些)On the contrary, humorous friends invariably take a joke rather than render us some persuading suggestion.Consequently, wise friends are more essential from my point of view.! G2 s7 @1 V2 g5 w5 R0 T
   In addition, what humormous friends say might not so（改为worth） convincing, even worse, they hoax someone into believing a falsehood from time to time. As an old motto goes,"A liar is not believed when he speaks the truth",the fact of events去掉 might be affected by humorist unintentionally and it may indeed embarrassed somebody to some extent.There are a mutitude of examples about how humorous friends exaggerate the facts by unfairly retelling the story which result in numerous lovers break up.In contrast, bright friends frequently get exposure to the facts before telling to others

   Furthermore,compared with humorous friends, the wise has more thoroughly comprehensive insight on our life.From the foregoing example what i say, with the help of my bright friends,i realize that volunteering shouldn't be just a onetime personal experience.It should be a lifetime activity of everbody.without the help of my bright friends, i had not such a feeling of enrichment,fulfillment and happiness through volunteer work.Meanwhile, i was paid for my work,amply paid, not in terms of money, but something more valuable.
    All in all,wise friends who have a more sense of sincereness, trustworthiness and foresight are more important than humoerous ones.

感觉开头的一个例子可作为引出话题，但是下面两点的论证仅围绕这个例子有点单薄，不能很好的对比出humorous friednds and intelligent friends的各自优势与缺点。适当再加入一些例子好点
总的来说语言运用的挺好，我语法特差，不做评论，有改的不当的地方敬请原谅
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