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发表于 2009-2-15 21:03:23 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
I do not agree the opinion that it is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades.

First, as a university student, I think that those so-called difficult classes are not always useful and valuable for us to use in the future. Take higher mathematics for example. You might find that higher mathematics, which is provided as a class at university, is very hard to learn. You need to learn more sophisticated math methods at university than the common math methods we learned in high school. Some of these methods even could be used to solve those astronomical problems. However, as a normal student, you do not need this knowledge except you want to become an astronaut. Actually, in our daily life, the math knowledge we use most is counting. For example, counting how much money we spend recently.

With the development of this society, people always get horrible disease. And, there is also an official investigation showing that there are more and more people getting cancer than before. Why? Because there are too many and high pressures undertaken by people nowadays. Students also have many kinds of pressures, especially when students at university or in college study those difficult classes, and then find they can not resolve the questions raised in these difficult classes and may get a low grade or fail the exams. They may feel very bad and even frustrated. I still remember that last semester, one of my classmates could not go to sleep several nights and always cry unexpectedly because she couldn’t finish sophisticated math assignments and might not pass the final exam. If those students are always under such a pressure, it is not good for them health.

Third, in my opinion, I think students at university or in college should chooses those classes in which they are interest and useful. Because those students will pay more attention to those classes that they are interests, and they might learn these classes well. By contributing their more efforts, they can also get high grades. We know that when finding a job, a student learning useful and popular classes and having high grades will have more chances than a student learning difficult and less popular classes and having low grades.

From above all, there is no doubt to believe that it is not better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades.
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发表于 2009-2-15 23:06:21 |只看该作者
I do not agree the opinion that it is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades.

First, as a university student, I think that those so-called difficult classes are not always useful and valuable for us to use in the future. Take mathematics for example. You might find that mathematics, which is provided as a class at university, is very hard to learn. You need to learn more sophisticated math methods at university than the common math methods we learned in high school. Some of these methods even could be used to solve those astronomical problems. However, as a normal(ordinary, normal有师范类的意思) student, you do not need this knowledge except you want to become an astronaut. Actually, in our daily life, the math knowledge we use most is counting. For example, counting how much money we spend recently.

With the development of this society, people always get sick. There is an official investigation showing that there are more and more people getting cancer than before. Why? Because there is too high pressure nowadays people have to take. Students also have pressure, and especially when students at university or in college study those difficult classes, and find they can not resolve the questions raised in these difficult classes and may get a low grade or fail the exams. They may feel very bad and even frustrated. I still remember that last semester, one of my classmates could not go to sleep several nights and always cry unexpectedly because she couldn’t finish sophisticated math assignments and might not pass the final exam. If those students are always under such a pressure, it is not good for them(their) health. 论证充分,好!观点站得住脚

Third, in my opinion, I think students at university or in college should chooses(choose) those classes in which they are interest(interested) and useful. Because those students will pay more attention to those classes that they are interests(interested), and they might learn these classes well. By contributing their more efforts, they can also get high grades. We know that when finding a job, a student learning useful and popular classes and having high grades will have more chances than a student learning(the one who choose) difficult and less popular classes and having(have) low grades.

From above all, there is no doubt to believe(删) that it is not better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades.

开头可以展开说下,结尾可以再稍扩展总结一下~
有些地方可以再简洁一点
写first, second, third的时候最好都写
改的不好,勿怪~

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发表于 2009-2-16 12:42:27 |只看该作者
谢谢,非常有用。

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发表于 2009-2-22 16:32:43 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 奔跑蜗牛 于 2009-2-22 16:48 编辑

偏题 题目是 是不是高分才可以选择难得科目
文章写成了 大学生到底该不该选难得科目

第二段 最好把主题句先提出来 虽然这样写很吸引人 但是考试的时候阅卷者容易不耐烦

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发表于 2009-2-23 14:00:40 |只看该作者
It is better for students at university or in college to choose difficult classes even if they cannot get top grades. 题目是 你同不同意:对大学生而言应选择很难的课程即使他们不能获得高分。 楼主,我不觉得我偏题啊。

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