【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组 ericsong1125第五次作业】

ericsong1125UID: 2493162

Do you agree or disagree, technology make people's lives simpler in turn to make people's lives more complicated.

Since Industry Revolution technology has become the impetus of the world’s development. Whatever eastern or western, Xiaoping Deng or Ronald Reagan, technology has always been considered changed this society. However, simple or complicated, the influence of technology development becomes the controversial topic recently. In my point of view, technology makes our life more convenient other than the partial view angle of complicated.
Technology makes our life more efficient. As sorts of science and technique developing in last two hundreds years, transportation, communication and automation methods have great changed. We have more choices when we start our journey, contacting and work. A famous person I remembered come to my mind to prove my issue. Marco Polo, an Italian tourist in 12th century, took him 17 years in touring from Italy to China and back to Europe. His transportation is horse and his own feet. He crossed battlefield in mid-east, desert without one living person, snow mountains hardly stay in one minute and concurred uncountable difficulties. Without development of technology and new methods of mobile innovation, we should follow Mr. Polo’s trace when we wonder to travel. Even when we want to get news of other countries, we must wait for postman rather than modern communication technology. Thus, we should attribute this fast and efficient world to the magic technology.
Technology actually raised quality of our life. Many ways of life not only in western but in eastern changed, actually ameliorated. People in ancient times have a short life-span. One of the most important reasons is restriction of dietetic method. They stored fresh vegetable and meat in salt water or underground, but the nutrition lost and quality worse. After refrigerator invented, people could store food into this cold machine and actually raised quality of life. We should thank the technology that we may still write on paper other than click mouse and speak to computer when we take TOFEL test. All the examples above prove my point of view, technology makes our life better.
Maybe some people would take out the traffic jam or information bomb as the opposite proof, I would say that all these problems are caused by our laggard life style could not matching for the rapid development of technology. Just like the feeling astonishing and scare when the vehicle first invented, people still lag behind the technology. After our life style changed, we could solve the problems above like accepting fast vehicle instead of horse.
In conclusion, efficiency and high quality are both merits of our simple life. Partial view of complicated would emend in future if our life style could match to the technology. Therefore, I agree technology make people's lives simpler in turn to make people's lives more complicated.

lewinskyUID: 2479218

Since Industry Revolution technology(是表达工业革命没有technology吧） has become the impetus of the world’s development. Whatever eastern or western, Xiaoping Deng or Ronald Reagan, technology has always been considered （两个动词，表达什么意思？）changed this society.（The fact that technology has become an impetus of the world's development after Industry Revolution is approved by whehter it is in the east or in the west, Xiaoping Deng or Ronald Reagan) However, simple or complicated（可删掉）, the influence of technology development becomes（gives rise to) the controversial topic(a controversial debate on it) recently. In my point of view, technology makes our life more convenient other than the partial view angle of complicated.5 d" w, g3 ?5 N/ H; Q; Z
Technology makes our life more efficient. As sorts of science and technique developing in last two hundreds years(上句无谓语，Technology has been developing in last two hundreds years which makes our life more efficient), transportation, communication and automation methods have great changed. We have more choices when we start our journey, contacting and work(The transportation system,communication technology and automation have greatly improved so as to render us more choices when we start up our journey ,keep on contacting and embark on working). A famous person I remembered come to my mind to prove my issue. Marco Polo, an Italian tourist in 12th century, took him 17 years in touring from Italy to China and back to Europe.(A distingushied person, Marco Polo, an Italian tourist in 12th century who took 17 years in touring from Italy to China and back to Europe merely by his feet and a horse, come to my ming to prove my issue) His transportation is horse and his own feet. He crossed battlefield in mid-east, desert without one living person, snow mountains hardly stay in one minute and concurred (encountered)uncountable difficulties. Without development of technology and new methods of mobile innovation, we should(have to) follow Mr. Polo’s trace when we wonder to travel. Even when we want to get news of other countries(get informed from other places), we must wait for postman rather than (utilize)modern communication technology. Thus, we should attribute this fast and efficient world to the magic technology.
Technology actually raised quality(raised the living standard) of our life. Many ways of life not only in western but in eastern changed, actually ameliorated.(可删掉此句，下文并没有提及具体东西方生活改善对比） People in ancient times have a short life-span. One of the most important reasons is restriction of dietetic method（People in ancient times, for instance,have a short life-span due to the restriciton of poor living condition). They stored fresh vegetable and meat in salt water or underground, but the nutrition lost and quality worse(Those who stored vegetable and meat in salt water or underground suffered from malnutrition and other diseases which result in short life). After refrigerator invented, people could store food into this cold machine and actually raised quality of life(Fortunately, the personal computer,biotechnology,and the Internet give us a chance we've never had before to end extreme poverty and end death from preventable disease). We should thank the technology that we may still write on paper other than click mouse and speak to computer when we take TOFEL test.(呵呵，这个托福的例子可以不要吧） All the examples above prove my point of view, technology makes our life better.
Maybe some people would take out the traffic jam or information bomb as the opposite proof, I would say that all these problems are caused by our laggard life style（which have nothing to do with the rapid development of technology) could not matching for the rapid development of technology. Just like the feeling astonishing and scare (Just like the feeling, to some extent,mixed with a sense of astonishing and insecurity)when the vehicle first invented, people still lag behind the technology. After our life style changed, we could solve the problems above like accepting fast vehicle instead of horse(最后一句没表达清楚 In line with the promise of this high-tech age, we should take advantage of innovations instead of rejecting them-and that's why the future can be different from the past).
In conclusion, efficiency and high quality are both merits of our simple life. Partial view of complicated would emend in future if our life style could match to the technology. Therefore, I agree technology make people's lives simpler in turn to make people's lives more complicated.
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qing200UID: 2507993

2# lewinsky

Do you agree or disagree, technology make people's lives simpler in turn to make people's lives more complicated.

Since Industry Revolution， technology has become the impetus of the world’s development. （Whatever是无论什么，任何事物的意思，放在这里似乎不合适，改成no matter） eastern or western, Xiaoping Deng or Ronald Reagan, technology has always been considered changed this society. However, simple or complicated, the influence of technology development becomes the controversial topic recently. In my point of view, technology makes our life more convenient other than the partial view angle of complicated（convenient不能与simple对换吧？题意不同了）.  A/ r% }9 b! R; {; S. n2 ]

Technology makes our life more efficient. As sorts of science and technique developing in last two hundreds years, transportation, communication and automation methods have great 做副词应改成greatly ）+been 被动changed. We have more choices when we start our journey, contacting and work. A famous person （I remembered删） comes to my mind to prove my issue. Marco Polo, an Italian tourist in 12th century, took him 17 years in touring from Italy to China and back to Europe. His transportation （is改成depended on） horse and his own feet. He crossed battlefield in mid-east, desert without one living person, snow mountains （改mountains covered with snow）hardly stay （in改成for） one minute and concurred uncountable（我觉得countless好些） difficulties. Without development of technology and new methods of （mobile形容词是容易移动的，有交通工具的，车载的等，名词是移动电话的意思，这里用得似乎不对） innovation, we should follow Mr. Polo’s （trace是跟踪，追踪的意思，应在这里不恰当， 改成we have to travel by means which is the same to that used by Mr. Polo） when we wonder to travel. Even when we want to get news of other countries, we must wait for postman rather than modern communication technology.(这句的后半句成了we wait for modern communication technology ，因为和前面共了谓语) Thus, we should attribute this fast and efficient world to the magic technology最后这句总结似乎没有点到题，快和高效和题目的简单和复杂似乎没有多大关联.# ?% g* M+ q$ J
Technology actually raised quality of our life. Many ways of life not only in western but in eastern changed, actually ameliorated. People in ancient times have a short life-span. One of the most important reasons is restriction of dietetic method. They stored fresh vegetable and meat in salt water or underground, but the nutrition lost and quality worse. After refrigerator invented, people could store food into this cold machine and actually raised quality of life. We should thank the technology that we may still write on paper other than click mouse and speak to computer when we take TOFEL test. All the examples above prove my point of view, technology makes our life better.（better跟题目的simpler也无关，题目并没有说技术有没有使人们的生活好了或坏了 ）
Maybe some people would take out the traffic jam or information bomb as the opposite proof, I would say that all these problems are caused by our laggard life style could not matching for the rapid development of technology. Just like the feeling astonishing and scare when the vehicle first invented, people still lag behind the technology. After our life style changed, we could solve the problems above like accepting fast vehicle instead of horse这段例子好，也和题意有些相关.; W* c/ x' o3 y8 k

In conclusion, efficiency and high quality are both merits of our simple life. （高效和高质量都不一定简单，相反可能复杂些）Partial view of complicated would emend in future if our life style could match to the technology. Therefore, I agree technology make people's lives simpler in turn to make people's lives more complicated.开头和结尾矛盾了吧，我觉得题目的意思是技术本来是要把我们的生活简单化，结果反而弄复杂了。 就像交通工具的发明与应用，本来是要让人们能够更加简易的交通， 但由于各种各样的交通工具的大量发明与生产，我们的生活变得复杂多了。如果没有这么先进的交通工具我们的周末很可能都在家里或附近的地方，但现在我们周末的活动丰富多了，地点的选择也大多了，这样我们的生活确实复杂些了。我只是用一个小例子说我的观点以及对题目的理解。
开头表明观点，后面各段一个观点进行论证，
结构不错，但感觉有点跑题

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

以上两位改的很好哇
鼓掌~~~~~~

ericsong1125UID: 2493162

感谢啊，改的很不错