TOEFL 4—6月Dark_Tournament写作小组 ０００ 第五次作业

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Do you agree or disagree, technology make people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.

Does technology make our lives simpler and complicated? There is no consensus among people. Some people argue that the modern life is complicated by technology. On the other side of the leaf, others, including me, are convinced that the modern life is simpler but not more complicated than before.

There are two fundamental arguments to support my claim, the first one has to goes on people’s ability of accept new things. For one thing, there is no denying that most of citizens could accept the change brings by new technology. Like the solar energy car and fashion mobiles. Such new things will surly enhance the efficiency of life but not complicate our life. Besides, the citizens' need of new technology will be, in turn, spark by the technology industrials. That means the new technology could simpler citizen's life but not complicated. A survey conducted by Google Company indicate that most of people like to use new technology products to comfortable their life.

In addition, why there is so many people are fond of high technology things are that people need the new technology things to benefit their life. On one hand, it is university acknowledged that most of people use mobile and internet to communicate with others. As for me, the mobile and internet is the link of me and my friends, these kinds of new technology surely not complicated my life. Besides, we can not emphasize the benefits brings by technology too much. Obviously, we can not image the life without electronic and fresh water, both of them are brings by technology.

Nevertheless, one argument also the one I find most compelling against my claim, is that traffic jam and air pollution are also because of the technology which complicates our life. Although I concede this point, in my observation, these complicates also could be solved by technology. On need look no further than some developed countries to find evidences that this is the case. For instance, Singapore uses the crossroads and GPRS to deal with traffic jam; US encourage Solar Energy Car to reduce pollution.

In sum, this issue is a complex one requires subjective judgment. Thus, the new technology surely confused by some senior citizens, like the generation of my grandfather. Other citizens, such like most adults and juveniles, are easy to accept the life changed by technology. In the final analysis, so huge benefits the technology is that we can not afford to ignore it. Consequently, the technology makes people's lives simpler but not more complicated.

水龙娃娃UID: 2359238

Does technology make(makes) our lives simpler and complicated? There is no consensus among people. Some people argue that the modern life is complicated by(用because of之类的因果关系的词好一些。) technology. On the other side of the leaf, others, including me, are convinced that the modern life is simpler but not more complicated than before.!

There are two fundamental arguments to support my claim, the first one has to goes on people’s ability of（to） accept new things. For one thing, there is no denying that most of citizens could accept the change brings（brought） by new technology. Like the solar energy car and fashion mobiles. Such new things will surly enhance the efficiency of life but not complicate our life. Besides, the citizens' need of new technology will be, in turn, spark（sparked） by the technology industrials. That means the new technology could simpler citizen's life but not complicated. A survey conducted by Google Company indicate(indicates) that most of people(感觉most of people 不是太顺，如果是表达大多数人most people应该就行了) like to use new technology products to comfortable their life（to make their life comfortable或者是comfort their life）.
In addition, why there is so many people （加上who）are fond of high technology things are that people need the new technology things to benefit their life. On one hand, it is university acknowledged(university只有名词形式，最好换一种说法) that most of people use mobile and internet to communicate with others. As for me, the mobile and internet is（are） the link of me and my friends,（要加上连接词如：so之类的） these kinds of new technology surely not complicated my life. Besides, we can not emphasize the benefits brings by technology too much. Obviously, we can not image the life without electronic and fresh water, both of them are brings by technology.

Nevertheless, one argument also the one I find most compelling against my claim, is that traffic jam and air pollution are also because of the technology which complicates our life. Although I concede this point, in my observation, these complicates also could be solved by technology. On need look no further than some developed countries to find evidences that this is the case. For instance, Singapore uses the crossroads and GPRS to deal with traffic jam; US encourage Solar Energy Car to reduce pollution.这段的驳斥点找的挺好，例子也很不错，赞一个～～

In sum, this issue is a complex one （which）requires subjective judgment. Thus, the new technology surely confused by some senior citizens, like the generation of my grandfather. Other citizens, such like most adults and juveniles, are easy to accept the life changed by technology. In the final analysis, so huge benefits the technology is that we can not afford to ignore it. Consequently, the technology makes people's lives simpler but not more complicated.


几点建议：1.作者的模板基本成型了，可以再接再厉修改的更漂亮。
2.句子的驾驭水平仍要进一步提高，多注意单词及连接词的用法及具体运用。多查字典，多琢磨。这也是偶滴弱项，感觉托福更多考的是语言的运用水平，逻辑上说的通即可，而文字说平越高想来分数应该也低不了。个人见解，都加油呀～
3.另外，就此篇文章来讲，第二段的事例不是太能很好的论证第二段开头提出的观点。
有其他的咱们可以QQ再接着讨论。加油哈～～:loveliness:

ilovesherryUID: 2592030

Does technology make our lives simpler and complicated? （看你后文是选择了一方面支持，那么这里就应是or，然后simpler应与more complicated对应）There is no consensus among people. Some people argue that the modern life is complicated by technology. On the other side of the leaf, others, including me, are convinced that the modern life is simpler but not more complicated than before.
(模板作文呃~记得教主说模板作文不在迫不得已的情况下尽量不用，得不了高分)
There are two fundamental arguments to support my claim, the first one has to goes（去掉has to） on people’s ability of accept new things. For one thing(没有for another对应), there is no denying that most of（加上the 舒服一点，不知道为什么） citizens could accept the change（changes） brings（brought） by new technology. Like the solar energy car（cars） and fashion mobiles. Such new things will（去掉） surly enhance the efficiency of life but not complicate our life. Besides, the citizens' need of new technology will be, in turn,(in turn用这里逻辑关系不对，这句话我理解是想说：技术产业的进步会刺激人们对新技术的需求。或者，如果后面如果用sparking the progress of technology industries的话，可以理解为人们对技术的需求反而刺激了技术革新，你在自己调整一下吧~) spark（sparked） by the technology industrials（industrial是adj.啊，industry当工业讲的话不可数，当行业讲industries）. That means the new technology could simpler（simplify） citizen's life but not complicated （that）.  A survey conducted by Google Company indicate（indicates） that most of people like to use new technology products to comfortable their life(make their life comfortable).
（这个论点的说服性不强，为什么人们接受了新的技术就相当于技术能简化人们的生活呢，比如人们接受了网络服务，但是网络服务却是丰富了我们的生活的，提供了更广泛方便的交流方式和娱乐方式。）
In addition, why there is（are） so many people （who）are fond of high technology (high tech) things are(is) that people need the new technology things(technologyn.改为things which full of new technology,用technical好像也不太合适) to benefit their life. On one hand, (没有on the other hand的了) it is（去掉） university（universities） acknowledged that most of (去掉)people use mobile（mobiles） and internet(through the Internet) to communicate with others. As for me, the mobile and internet is the link of me and my friends, these kinds of new technology surely (do) not complicated(complicate) my life. Besides, we cannot emphasize the benefits brings(brought) by technology too much.(是不是想说we can never exaggerate the benefits brought by technology any more) Obviously, we can not image the life without electronic(electricity) and fresh water, both of them are brings(brought) by technology.

Nevertheless, one argument also the one I find most compelling against my claim, is that traffic jam and air pollution are also because of the technology(感觉少点什么，加上动名词好一点吧，这样就相当于用汉语说：交通拥挤和大气污染是因为科技…) which complicates our life. Although I concede this point, in my observation, these complicates also could（could also） be solved by technology. On need look no further than some developed countries to find evidences that this is the case.(这句我没看懂，可以解释一下吗？) For instance, Singapore uses the crossroads and GPRS to deal with traffic jam; US encourage Solar Energy Car to reduce pollution.
In sum, this issue is a complex one requires subjective judgment. Thus, the new technology surely confused by some senior citizens, like the generation of my grandfather. （新技术的确被爷爷们弄迷惑、混乱了？？）Other citizens, such like most adults and juveniles, are easy to accept the life changed by technology. In the final analysis, so huge benefits the technology is that we can not afford to ignore it. （consequently这句与上句没有因果关系）Consequently, the technology makes people's lives simpler but not more complicated.

我看了你上次的作文，觉得这一篇几乎是按上次的结构模块套的句子,感觉很教条的说……
文章里有些小笔误和词性混淆的问题，以后写完东西可以用Word帮忙检查一下~
可能是这次题目本身的问题吧，我看了很多人的觉得大家的审题都各不相同呢，我也觉得这个题目特别扭，很多人都写着写着成了论述科技的advantages and disadvantages了……
加油加油哈~

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In addition, why there is(are) so many people(who) are fond of high technology things are(is) that people need the new technology things to benefit their life. On one hand, it is university acknowledged that most of people use mobile and internet to communicate with others. As for me, the mobile and internet is the link of me and my friends, these kinds of new technology surely (do) not complicated (complicate) my life. Besides, we can not emphasize the benefits brings(brought or are brought ) by technology too much. Obviously, we can not image the life without electronic and fresh water, both of them are brings(?) by technology.

Nevertheless, one argument also the one I find most compelling against my claim, is that traffic jam and air pollution are also because of the technology which complicates our life. Although I concede this point, in my observation, these complicates (complexity) also could be solved by technology. On need look no further than some developed countries to find evidences that this is the case. For instance, Singapore uses the crossroads and GPRS to deal with traffic jam; US encourage Solar Energy Car to reduce pollution.8 ]8 k& l2 w+ }9 K' Y
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In sum, this issue is a complex and one requires subjective judgment. Thus, the new technology surely confused by some senior citizens, like the generation of my grandfather. Other citizens, such like most adults and juveniles, are easy to accept the life changed by technology. In the final analysis, so huge benefits the technology is that we can not afford to ignore it. Consequently, the technology makes people's lives simpler but not(rather than如何) more complicated.

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