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angeloolUID: 166036

agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide

With the prosperity of economy and more wealth they have got, more and more family pay an special attention to spending their spare time in a meaningful way and travelling around, which is beneficial to the health and helpful to release people's restrained nerve, would be one of the best choices. It is the best manner for travelling, many people believe, to follow the guidance of the tour guide in a group. However, I am against this opinion because of the following two reasons.

On one hand, travelling in a group is not efficient and economic. Because there are usually three or more families in one group, people will have different opinions on where to go and which to see in the so called "free" time. Every time, when my family members came back from a visit, they felt regretful that there were so many wonderful spots which they didn't see because the whole group didn't reach an agreement. It is also a common experience for many people that they have to buy a lot of useless souvenirs due to the recommendation of the tour guide. In most cases, the money people spend on entrance fees of places equals to the amount they pay on buying various kinds of memorial commodities without any value.

On the other hand, rarely will visitors feel like to be guided by some people whom they are not familiar with and some bad guides can even do harm to the scenery viewers. During the process of going around an unfamiliar place to the visitors, the worst things they don't want to meet are some dangers are ahead of them and the guides couldn't be relied on either. That's why it's a fashion nowadays that people prefer to have do-it-yourself walks by themselves with the aid of maps and highly developed Internet.

Sometimes, indeed, travelling in a group is not a bad choice for the people who don't want to pay more energy on studying their journey. However, considering the elements of cost, flexibility and safety, going on a journey by oneself will be better choice.


In summary, I would rather to get on a journey by myself than be guided by some people in a group way.

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qing200UID: 2507993

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On the other hand, rarely will visitors feel like to be guided by some people whom they are not familiar with and some bad guides can even do harm to the scenery viewers. During the process of going around an unfamiliar place to the visitors, the worst things they don't want to meet are some dangers are ahead of them and the guides couldn't be relied on either. That's why it's a fashion nowadays that people prefer to have do-it-yourself walks by themselves with the aid of maps and highly developed Internet.
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qing200UID: 2507993

With the prosperity of economy and more wealth they have got, more and more family pay an special attention to spending their spare time in a meaningful way and travelling around, which is beneficial to the health and helpful to release people's restrained nerve, would be one of the best choices. It is the best manner for travelling, many people believe, to follow the guidance of the tour guide in a group. However, I am against this opinion because of the following two reasons.开头好，句型多变换，观点意思表达清楚)" E3 T' Z% K" h7 k% ?2 \

& ]. M( o) c$ q8 S% s  Z" TOn one hand, travelling in a group is not efficient and economic. Because there are usually three or more families in one group, people will have different opinions on where to go and which to see in the so called "free" time. Every time, when my family members came back from a visit, they felt regretful that there were so many wonderful spots which they didn't see because the whole group didn't reach an agreement. It is also a common experience for many people that they have to buy a lot of useless souvenirs due to the recommendation of the tour guide. In most cases, the money people spend on entrance fees of places equals to the amount they pay on buying various kinds of memorial commodities without any value.
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On the other hand, rarely will visitors feel like to be guided by some people whom they are not familiar with and some bad guides can even do harm to the scenery viewers. During the process of going around an unfamiliar place to the visitors, the worst things they don't want to meet are some dangers are ahead of them and the guides couldn't be relied on either. That's why it's a fashion nowadays that people prefer to have do-it-yourself walks by themselves with the aid of maps and highly developed Internet. 表达好！简洁，意思又清晰明了
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9 p( A: G  l( K) SIn summary, I would rather to get on a journey by myself than be guided by some people in a group way.

整篇文章简洁，但又表达明确，

结构好。
结尾似乎还可以多说一点点

tanyangbjUID: 2601443

With the prosperity of economy and more wealth they have got, more and more family pay an special attention to spending（to do） their spare time in a meaningful way and traveling（同上） around, which is beneficial to the health and helpful to release people's restrained nerve,（relax ourselves）it
would be one of the best choices. It is the best manner（way） for traveling, many people believe,（插入句式的首要要求是不影响理解，别什么地方都插） to follow the guidance of the tour guide in a group. However, I am against this opinion because of the following two reasons.)
On one hand, traveling in a group is not efficient and economic. Because there are usually three or more families in one group, people will have different opinions on where to go（would like to go） and which to see（would like to see） in the so called（没用）"free" time. Every time, when my family members
came back from a visit, they felt regretful that there were so many wonderful spots（就place就成了，或者用beautiful scenery） which they didn't see because the whole group didn't reach an agreement. It is also a common experience for many people that they have to buy a lot of useless souvenirs due to the recommendation of the tour guide. In most cases, the money people spent on entrance fees of places equal to the amount they pay on buying various kinds of memorial commodities without any value.- Y# Q% n' O0 ?. {* N3 g
On the other hand, rarely will visitors feel like to be guided by some people whom they are not familiar with and some bad guides can even do harm to the scenery viewers.（？？？？？） During the process of going around an unfamiliar place to the visitors, the worst things they don't want to meet are some dangers are ahead of them and the guides couldn't be relied on either. That's why it's a（delete） fashion nowadays(去掉) that people prefer to have do-it-yourself walks（self-excursion） by themselves with the aide of map and highly developed Internet.
Sometimes, indeed, traveling in a group is not a bad choice for the people who don't want to pay more energy on studying（searching） their journey. However, considering the elements of cost, flexibility and safety, going on a journey by yourself will be better choice(delete).
In summary, I would rather to get（get）on（delete） a journey by myself than be（delete） guided by some people in a group way(group).
大词汇的用法很乱，还有就是最好别没事就用插入语在句子中间，可以放在开头，因为你那样很让人看不懂你的文章，别听那些什么四六级考研的老师瞎说，全是应付中国人考试的玩意，就是折磨人用的，平常哪有这么使得。还有就是语法一团乱，该补补语法了。托福不是说你使得越难的单词就越好，而是要使对，不要标新利益。让人看了感觉很像Chinese English。还有就是，良药苦口，不一定所有夸你的都是好的。