寄托天下
查看: 1324|回复: 2
打印 上一主题 下一主题

[活动] 【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组ilovesherry第六次作业】 [复制链接]

Rank: 2

声望
3
寄托币
135
注册时间
2009-1-16
精华
0
帖子
0
跳转到指定楼层
楼主
发表于 2009-2-22 17:16:02 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
Agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.



Currently, along with the development of morden society, people start to be conscious of their life’s level and most of them choose to travel around. Generally, there are two ways that people may choose to travel, one of them is traveling alone and another one is jorn in a group led by a tour guide. While some people prefer to take the trip by themselves, others, including me, would like to led by the tour guide.

Can you imagin an unfamilier and difficult book which has no contents and involves with thousends of pages but you have to finish reading it in three days? I assume that the significance of a tour guide to a first trip is what the contents to a complicated book. Firstly,being in a group and having a tour guide can save money and time which we may cost in our tours. As the majority of the youth are have narrow incomes and do not have so many deposits which can affort a high spending journey all by themselves so that they prefer to be in a tourism and enjoy their spare time led by a tour guide. Every summer, I and one of my friends, Shuai, always go on a trip with a group and that can be taken just no more than two thousand yuan per time and the those trips can only take us one or two weeks. We have been to many beautiful places and interests and we all had great enjoyment each time because of the scenery and of course,the convenience brought by the tourism and tour guide.

Secondly, no one can doubt that those tour guides had taken numbers of examinations before they got the job and for this reason, they had obtained much knowledge about stories, the history and famous people that associated with the interests and places where we may go. If we can jorn in a group and follow with a tour guide, I am sure that we will acquire knowledge and informations that we may hardly hear and learn from other methods. Those informations will help us know more about the place we go to and maybe they will be used at some other situations we will be faced with then.

Thirdly, as a strenger to the place we go to, some people may have an issue of recognizing the direction without saying that finding out the interests there. As the contents to a thick book, it can help readers to find out the information they want quickly, a tour guide can lead us to not only the most famous place but also the perticular and special places which full of amazing and beautiful scenery. The tourism also help us to book a room in hotel and arrange meals for us, all what the tourists will do is enjoy the relax time and wonderful trips. What’s more, we can make new friends in the tour group.

To sum up, although travel alone can have free choices and spare times that decided by the tourists, I would prefer to join in a group led by a tour guide.
无不可过去之事,有自然相知之人~
0 0

使用道具 举报

Rank: 3Rank: 3

声望
0
寄托币
291
注册时间
2004-6-3
精华
0
帖子
1
沙发
发表于 2009-2-25 18:21:44 |只看该作者
Agree or disagree: The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide.


Currently, along with the development of morden modern society, people start to be conscious of their life’s level and most of them choose to travel around. Generally, there are two ways that
people may choose to travel, one of them is traveling alone and another one is jorn
to join in a group led by a tour guide. While some people prefer to take the trip by themselves, others, including me, would like to led by the tour guide.


Can you imagin imagine an unfamilier unfamiliar and difficult book which has no contents and involves with thousends thousands of pages but you have to finish reading it in three days? I assume that the significance of a tour guide to a first trip is like what the contents to a complicated book. Firstly, being in a group and having a tour guide can save money and time which we may cost in our tours. As the majority of the youth are have narrow (?) incomes and do not have so many deposits which can affort a high spending journey all by themselves so that they prefer to be in a tourism and enjoy their spare time led by a tour guide. Every summer, I and one of my friends (顺序有问题), Shuai, always go on a trip with a group and that can be taken just no more than two thousand yuan per time and the those trips can only take us one or two weeks. We have been to many beautiful places and interests and we all had great enjoyment each time because of the scenery and of course, the convenience brought by the tourism and tour guide.(可以举些实际的例子,而不是反复重复convenience之类的大道理,and用的较多,请注意。)

Secondly, no one can doubt (hardly could anybody doubt,增加句型的变化) that those tour guides had taken numbers of examinations before they got the job and for this reason, they had obtained much knowledge about stories, the history and famous people that associated with the interests and places where we may go. If we can jorn in a group and follow with a tour guide, I am sure that we will acquire knowledge and informations that we may hardly hear and learn from other methods. Those informations will help us know more about the place we go to and maybe they will be used at some other situations we will be faced with then.

Thirdly, as a strenger to the place we go to, some people may have an issue of recognizing the direction without saying that finding out the interests there the destination. As the contents to a thick book, it can help readers to find out the information they want quickly, a tour guide can not only lead us to not only the most famous place but also the perticular and special places which full of amazing and beautiful scenery (语法有问题). (中间没有and The tourism ? also help us to book a room in hotel and arrange meals for us, all what the tourists will do is enjoy the relax time and wonderful trips. (中间没有and What’s more, we can make new friends in the tour group.

To sum up, although travel alone can have free choices and spare times that decided by the tourists, I would prefer to join in a group led by a tour guide.

小评:
1.
错字太多,下回先用WORD修改;
2.
理由不错,很充分,可以适当减少,重点击破;
3.
语法再多注意一下,可以看出这篇是限时写成的,字数很多啊,赞一个,继续努力!!
Gre hehe gre ...

使用道具 举报

Rank: 2

声望
0
寄托币
119
注册时间
2009-2-10
精华
0
帖子
5
板凳
发表于 2009-2-27 00:02:33 |只看该作者
占楼 明天改
英雄不问出处,流氓不问岁数,所以不要问我是谁,嘿嘿

使用道具 举报

RE: 【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组ilovesherry第六次作业】 [修改]

问答
Offer
投票
面经
最新
精华
转发
转发该帖子
【Dark_Tournament TOEFL-ibt作文小组ilovesherry第六次作业】
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-919761-1-1.html
复制链接
发送
回顶部