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[a习作temp] Argument20【0906G 文以载道三月四月作文小组】2.21 作业by noheven [复制链接]

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发表于 2009-2-25 17:39:32 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
TOPIC: ARGUMENT20 - The following appeared in a letterto the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.

"The population of Balmer Islandincreases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number ofaccidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Islandshould limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped andbicycle rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summerseason. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council is sure to attain the50 percent reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year in theneighboring island of Torseau, whenTorseau's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."

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TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2009/2/25 1:19:17


This letter firstpresent that the rise of population of Balmer Island, then suggest to limit thenumber of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped and bicycle rental companiesto reduce the number accidents. To support his suggestion, the arguer postedthe "similar" facts of the neighboring island of Torseau.
Though the letter is well presented, there isno enough evidence to support the arguer's conclusion or suggestion. On theother hand, the "facts" are so problematic that make the letter opento doubt.


First, there is noany evidence to show the inter-relationship of increased population and thenumber of accidents. In common sense, the most often situation is that thenew-born babies who can not walk nor drive bring about the rise of population.In this case, why will be there more traffic accidents? Perhaps the writerwould argue that the increased population is the result of tourism; however,why are the most of the tourists choose mopeds or even to walk? Since there isnot any data to prove this situation, the forecast is just an assumptionlacking support.


Next, even theincreased population may cause more traffic accidents; there is no proof tosupport the suggested measure. The arguer just mentioned the moped and bicyclerental companies without any words about the sales companies. Since there isnot any sample or survey to illustrate origins of the moped and bicycle from Balmer Island,the suggested measure will totally perhaps not affective as the arguer hoped.Maybe the newer populations prefer to buy their own moped or even cars ratherthen renting, or even they just go by bus or subways; in either case, thesuggested measure is not helpful any more. how could the arguer claimed thatthe by limiting the number of rentals, the town is sure to reduce 50 percentaccidents exactly while discussing no other measures?

Last but notleast, there is no evidence to give proof to the analogy or similarity of Balmer Islandand Torseau Island which the situation in last year ismentioned as a benefit example. Perhaps they have totally different terrainsand traffic system, or their residents have different preferences of traffictools, though they are neighbors. Any of these cases will result in differenteven opposite circumstances.

The arguer forecastbased on some warrant conclusions and suggested too hasty. For better access,the arguer should provide more evidence to prove that increased population willcause the rise of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrian. Then thediscussion of kinds of different measure to control this situation should alsobe offered. Only after serious research, the final result will turn out.
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