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angelmuziflyerUID: 2548676

It is more important to use land for human need than to save land for endangered animals

the world is made up of various beings,humans,animals and plants.With hundreds of thousands
kinds of animals,the ecological system becomes harmonious. however, some people regard that using land for human need outweighs saving land for endangered animals. In their opinon,human beings are the summit around the world and all the other beings have to make way to human. I strongly disagree with them, we human being can`t thinking about ourselves without balancing the benifit of all beings.
The ecological system is a exact system where beings successfully form a circle.If one part of the circle misses ,all the other parts will get lost.Endanged animals are not exceptional either. Once they extinct,not only will there be less animals in the world ,but also the ecological system will be destroyed.In this situation, what we lose is not just a kind of animal, a small ecological system may be disturbed and can`t recover forever.How can we remedy the loss? The right role every single animal playes is incomparable.
on the other hand, taking use of more land means occupying more land of endangered animals, in other words,more natual lands will disappear from the earth. We have been sufferd so much due to
lack of environment protection.How should we continue to make mistakes?Not to mention the endangered animals themselves,the land used by human will shift into artificial land, which, will decrease the green and natual land and make the desert problem more seriouse. Nowadays, some governments has realised the criticism of desert problem and began to rebuild the forest with removing farm lands,which, to some extent, relieve the desert problem.So if people go on occupying lands whcih belong to animals, the dessert problem will never be solved and we will suffer more in the future.
In conclusion, Weigh all the pioles and coles,I do support the idea of saving more land for endangered animals for the sake of substainable development,which, benifits us as well as our descendants.

ericsong1125UID: 2493162

It is more important to use land for human need than to save land for endangered animals

the (The) world is made up of various beings, humans, animals and plants. With hundreds of thousands kinds of animals, the ecological system becomes harmonious. however (However), some people regard that using land for human need outweighs saving land for endangered animals. In their opinon(s), human beings are the summit around the world and all the other beings have to make way to human. I strongly disagree with them, we human being can`t thinking about ourselves without balancing the benifit (benefit) of all beings.

The ecological system is a (an) exact system where beings successfully form a circle. If one part of the circle misses, all the other parts will get lost. Endanged (Endangered) animals are not exceptional either. Once they extinct, not only will there be less (fewer) animals in the world, but also the ecological system will be destroyed. In this situation, what we lose is not just a kind of animal, a small ecological system may be disturbed and can`t recover forever. How can we remedy the loss? The right role every single animal playes (plays) is incomparable.

on (On) the other hand, taking use of more land means occupying more land of endangered animals, in other words, more natual (natural) lands will disappear from the earth. We have been sufferd (suffered) so much due to lack of environmental protection. How should we continue to make mistakes? Not to mention the endangered animals themselves, the land used by human will shift into artificial land, which, will decrease the green and natual land and make the desert problem more seriouse. Nowadays, some governments has realis(z)ed the criticism of desert problem and began to rebuild the forest with removing farm lands, which, to some extent, relieve the desert problem. So if people go on occupying lands which (which) belong to animals, the dessert problem will never be solved and we will suffer more in the future.

In conclusion, Weigh all the pioles (poles) and coles, I do support the idea of saving more land for endangered animals for the sake of su(b)stainable development, which, beni(e)fits us as well as our descendants.

总体来说不错，内容充实，论据充分。存在一下几点问题：
1.LZ可能在计时，小失误很多，应当避免。用词上还算考究。
2.事实论据表述较为牵强，可以考虑改变表述方式或者用较有说服性的权威的example。

逻辑连贯性较好，句式变化多，翔实有余，精致欠佳。

目前就想到了这些，还望指正

angelmuziflyerUID: 2548676

谢谢你啊！评价很中肯，会继续努力地！不过那个可持续发展我的拼写是对的，呵呵，应该就是sustainable development~ 2# ericsong1125